Life As It Is Lived
Four line poem:41 total reviews
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Diane. You have put my entry to shame. In fact, I wager to say you will win this contest with such a beautiful four-liner. Oh well, I never claimed to be a poet. Prose is my forte. LOL. Bless you. Great poem. Bob
reply by the author on 13-May-2018
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Hi, Diane. You have put my entry to shame. In fact, I wager to say you will win this contest with such a beautiful four-liner. Oh well, I never claimed to be a poet. Prose is my forte. LOL. Bless you. Great poem. Bob
Comment Written 13-May-2018
reply by the author on 13-May-2018
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You are much too kind, Bob!
So pleased you enjoyed.
My poor husband had to listen to no less than a dozen revisions as we drove to Grand Rapids this past weekend! Pretty certain his "memr'y's landscape" is filled with my counting syllables and asking him "Does this make sense?"
Have a wonderful week!
diane
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I do the same thing with my wife. LOL. Bob
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Diane;
Thank you for sharing your entry for the Four-Line Poem contest. You mastered the poetic form and I love the graphic you used to compliment the piece. Good luck to you in the contest,
~patty~
reply by the author on 13-May-2018
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Hi, Diane;
Thank you for sharing your entry for the Four-Line Poem contest. You mastered the poetic form and I love the graphic you used to compliment the piece. Good luck to you in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 13-May-2018
reply by the author on 13-May-2018
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Hello Patty!
I am so pleased that you enjoyed!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
I wish the graphic transferred to the home page!
Thank you again!
diane
Comment from ameen786
Hello Mrs. KT, your profound and succinct take on life reminds me of this saying, "Life can only be understood backwards; but it must be lived forwards,"-thank you for sharing this picture perfect write and good luck!
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Hello Mrs. KT, your profound and succinct take on life reminds me of this saying, "Life can only be understood backwards; but it must be lived forwards,"-thank you for sharing this picture perfect write and good luck!
Comment Written 13-May-2018
reply by the author on 13-May-2018
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Hello ameen!
I love your quote!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
So pleased you enjoyed!
diane
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is a great metaphor. I like your alliteration. especially with your f's. It is very effective. I like how you correlate the landscape with the memory and with where the fluff lands. I am partial to dandelions so I especially like your subject matter. Very well done.
reply by the author on 13-May-2018
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This is a great metaphor. I like your alliteration. especially with your f's. It is very effective. I like how you correlate the landscape with the memory and with where the fluff lands. I am partial to dandelions so I especially like your subject matter. Very well done.
Comment Written 13-May-2018
reply by the author on 13-May-2018
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Hello Liz!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you so much!
diane
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
You've used an excellent example with the dandelion. It does seem like life is sometimes just like you've described here. This was an awesome way to bring your point across. Well done Mrs. KT!
reply by the author on 13-May-2018
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You've used an excellent example with the dandelion. It does seem like life is sometimes just like you've described here. This was an awesome way to bring your point across. Well done Mrs. KT!
Comment Written 13-May-2018
reply by the author on 13-May-2018
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Hello Jeffrey!
I am very pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you so much!
diane
Comment from Angela_Ulrich
An excellent piece written within some very strict constraints. I love poems that manage to conjure a sense of action or motion using just a few words. This accomplishes that. Good luck in the contest. I'm sure this has a shot at winning.
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An excellent piece written within some very strict constraints. I love poems that manage to conjure a sense of action or motion using just a few words. This accomplishes that. Good luck in the contest. I'm sure this has a shot at winning.
Comment Written 13-May-2018
reply by the author on 13-May-2018
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Hello Angela,
I am very honored by your exceptional rating and thoughtful review.
Thank you very much!
diane
Comment from Sarah B Sullivan
Great thoughts.
The ' in the middle of mem'ry seems like you're cheating on the syllables. : )
You actually could write "dandelion fluff "(as an indiscreet object, you don't have to point out it comes from dandelions in the plural), and get rid of the s' in the poem, which would make the poem look sharper (and not make me think, for a moment, that you were trying to substitute an apostrophe for another syllable ! ).
Thank you for sharing.
-Sarah
reply by the author on 13-May-2018
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Great thoughts.
The ' in the middle of mem'ry seems like you're cheating on the syllables. : )
You actually could write "dandelion fluff "(as an indiscreet object, you don't have to point out it comes from dandelions in the plural), and get rid of the s' in the poem, which would make the poem look sharper (and not make me think, for a moment, that you were trying to substitute an apostrophe for another syllable ! ).
Thank you for sharing.
-Sarah
Comment Written 13-May-2018
reply by the author on 13-May-2018
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Hi Sarah,
Thank you for your excellent rating and review.
"Mem'ry" has been written as such for years by poets. One of the most beautiful poems ever written, wherein the poet employs the spelling is "Elegy Written in a Church Courtyard" by Thomas Gray. Same as for words such as histr'y, wandring, o'er, etc.
I like your idea about "dandelion fluff."
diane
Comment from zanya
Yes an appropriate image of time at this season of the year, as the dandelion sprouts and the fleeting nature of life - yet 'mem'ry's landscape' is as our data base
reply by the author on 13-May-2018
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Yes an appropriate image of time at this season of the year, as the dandelion sprouts and the fleeting nature of life - yet 'mem'ry's landscape' is as our data base
Comment Written 13-May-2018
reply by the author on 13-May-2018
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Hello zanya,
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you ever so much!
diane
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello Mrs. KT, I think this is a very lovely poem. Your observation of life is so true, and what a great image for describing how fleeting this journey is, and we are left with memories, which you so poetically refer to as 'landscape'.
I saw no errors and this was a special work for me. Just beautiful, and thanks for sharing this poem, which I think is deserving of a six-star rating, so take a bow, Ana.
reply by the author on 13-May-2018
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Hello Mrs. KT, I think this is a very lovely poem. Your observation of life is so true, and what a great image for describing how fleeting this journey is, and we are left with memories, which you so poetically refer to as 'landscape'.
I saw no errors and this was a special work for me. Just beautiful, and thanks for sharing this poem, which I think is deserving of a six-star rating, so take a bow, Ana.
Comment Written 13-May-2018
reply by the author on 13-May-2018
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Hello Ana,
So very honored by your exceptional rating and thoughtful review.
You words mean a great deal to me ...
diane
Comment from meeshu
a very nice write, KT. four lines of prose about destiny or fate? I read this as a positive approach, life's a mystery we should enjoy.......meeshu
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reply by the author on 13-May-2018
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a very nice write, KT. four lines of prose about destiny or fate? I read this as a positive approach, life's a mystery we should enjoy.......meeshu
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Comment Written 13-May-2018
reply by the author on 13-May-2018
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Hello meeshu!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Always positive...well, most of the time... :)
Thank you!
diane
