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In Time of Need

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My book of prayers and musings in time of need.

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Comment from Sharon Haiste
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I think this is a good entry for the Sonnet Poetry writing prompt.
Your verse is well done and nicely written.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon

 Comment Written 12-May-2018

reply by the author on 17-May-2018
    thank you so much for taking the time to read and review.
Comment from patcelaw
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Dawn, nicely worded and well presented sonnet for the contest. I wish you the best in the contest. May your Mother's day weekend be blessed. Patricia

 Comment Written 11-May-2018

reply by the author on 11-May-2018
    Thank you so much I really appreciate you taking the time to read and review.
Comment from apky
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A lovely sonnet done so well, executed with just the right words at the right places. there are so much caution we have thrown to the wind:

We must be mindful of the caution call
from one who's traveled through destruction's eye.
Oh ye of youth, be careful on your way
and heed the wisdom, please do not defy,
or you will find yourself adrift, astray.

The lighthouse warns of dangers yet to come,
oh child be brave and wise, do not succumb!

 Comment Written 10-May-2018

reply by the author on 11-May-2018
    Thank you so much for the wonderful review, very much appreciate your time.
Comment from Mastery
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Hi, Dawn This is a wonderful sonnet filled with mgnificent images. Bravo!

(Goes to show you how much I know about poetry. I thought a sonnet consisted of two or three four or five-line stanzas and then a closer with two lines.)

Blessings, Bob

 Comment Written 10-May-2018

reply by the author on 11-May-2018
    LOL you are funny. Glad to see you old friend. Always appreciate your time.
Comment from bob cullen
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A truly great and accurate description of the purpose of a lighthouse. The painting added to the poem's imagery and to the dangers of the journey.
I loved the rhyme and balance of this poem. And of course, the reminder of the perils of the sea.

 Comment Written 10-May-2018

reply by the author on 11-May-2018
    Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review.
Comment from DionysusDeVille
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There is much wisdom in our elders and listening to them is definitely the smartest thing to those who need to succeed in life. This poem definitely captures that emotion and drives the point home

 Comment Written 10-May-2018

reply by the author on 11-May-2018
    thank you so much for taking the time to read and review, much appreciated.
Comment from Teri7
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This is a very well written poem about the Guiding Light. You used very good descriptive words and very beautiful imagery. I enjoyed reading and reviewing it. Blessings, teri

 Comment Written 10-May-2018

reply by the author on 10-May-2018
    Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review.
Comment from karenina
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I don't know what color that font is but it's hypnotic! Okay, that aside, the seas is my favorite place....ashore or on the stormy blue I find life and excitement and all things beautiful! Your lighthouse poem stands alone as it is, when I think of it as a metaphor for God's light it takes on a reverence that humbles my faith. Beautiful.

Karenina

 Comment Written 10-May-2018

reply by the author on 10-May-2018
    I'm glad you found that metaphor as that was the goal. Thank you for your wonderful comment, that color is kinda hypnotic.
reply by karenina on 10-May-2018
    It came through loud and clear for me!
Comment from Joy Graham
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Your sonnet tells a story of the sea. It can be terrifying in storms. You put me in that scene, and make it look easy. This is supposed to my year to write sonnets, but am not writing them as much as I would write an octogram or rondeau. Something about writing sonnets makes me feel tense. Le sigh. You have terrific rhymes. I had issue with your meter in line six as I can't get the word, "mirrors" to work for me. My favorite of all your sonnet is the last line :)

Best wishes in the contest.

Joy xx

 Comment Written 10-May-2018

reply by the author on 10-May-2018
    Perhaps a difference in pronunciation, sometime I hate this Colorado accent!! Funny that's not the line I was having issues with, sigh...thanks for the stop by I will have to go find some of your Rondeau. I love those but haven't been able to write one in so long, well haven't written anything in so long, hahahahahaha