Wild Poetry Dream
Just a silly dream that came to me16 total reviews
Comment from dginnh
That was a fun read, and obviously you have far better next door neighbors than I do, plus you have your tennis court. Creativity and imagination are wonderful things, this is a great place to share. Dave
reply by the author on 19-May-2018
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That was a fun read, and obviously you have far better next door neighbors than I do, plus you have your tennis court. Creativity and imagination are wonderful things, this is a great place to share. Dave
Comment Written 19-May-2018
reply by the author on 19-May-2018
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Thank you Dave, for your delightful review and stars! So much sincerely appreciated! Stay tuned! Vance
Comment from mermaids
You have a smooth flow of words and lines and their is a feel of fun in your poem. You also tell a tale here, I like how the lady loves poetry and just had to come over to meet you.
reply by the author on 19-May-2018
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You have a smooth flow of words and lines and their is a feel of fun in your poem. You also tell a tale here, I like how the lady loves poetry and just had to come over to meet you.
Comment Written 19-May-2018
reply by the author on 19-May-2018
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Thank you mermaids! For your lovely review and stars, very sincerely appreciated, please stay tuned! Blessings to you! Vance
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks what imagination can do, how marvellous thing is imagination, anything could be created, how a dream has been framed, a poetry dream; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 19-May-2018
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This speaks what imagination can do, how marvellous thing is imagination, anything could be created, how a dream has been framed, a poetry dream; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 19-May-2018
reply by the author on 19-May-2018
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Hello and thanks Alcreator Litt Dear, always a genuine delight to hear from you and glad you enjoyed this quickie dream! Have a great day and please stay tuned! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment from Bucketlist
I giggled at this poem, because I just wrote one about men. It, of course, mentions the male mind and erotica. (Motley Crew posted today,14th May) I liked the format of your poem, and have no pics. Good job,
Hugs, Trisha
reply by the author on 15-May-2018
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I giggled at this poem, because I just wrote one about men. It, of course, mentions the male mind and erotica. (Motley Crew posted today,14th May) I liked the format of your poem, and have no pics. Good job,
Hugs, Trisha
Comment Written 14-May-2018
reply by the author on 15-May-2018
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Wow Trisha! thanks for the great review and generous stars, so wonderful to hear from you and you have definitely made my day! I'm off to look for your latest post! hugs always! Vance
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I hope you find something you like! You express yourself strongly - that?s brain great
You?re welcome.
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from BeasPeas
Well, I must say, Vance, your poem held my attention all the way through to the end. Amusing whether truth or fiction. Good storytelling. The young lady in the image certainly looks jubilant. Marilyn
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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Well, I must say, Vance, your poem held my attention all the way through to the end. Amusing whether truth or fiction. Good storytelling. The young lady in the image certainly looks jubilant. Marilyn
Comment Written 13-May-2018
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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One can only hope~!! thanks so much for your lovely review and stars! Always my joy to hear from you! Vance
Comment from val fitchie
hello, there. As you know, I'm a fool for that old stacatto rhythm. I love to see folks DANCING with their beloved WORDS. I studied intently the chorus lines that the Grey one performed in front of my EYES of TRUTH. I DID find patterns of da DA da etc. It was done in the Master's own way. The ELEGANCE shone through in the steps you took. Not one mis step. The BEAT is evident- fully alive with it's partner, LYRICAL.
(Lyrical has never faded from the scene, including today's showing. Be it the bully pulpit, or the dirty old man, words are your weapons. Slay us with mirth or meaning, we shall lay before thee moved to immobility
reply by the author on 13-May-2018
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hello, there. As you know, I'm a fool for that old stacatto rhythm. I love to see folks DANCING with their beloved WORDS. I studied intently the chorus lines that the Grey one performed in front of my EYES of TRUTH. I DID find patterns of da DA da etc. It was done in the Master's own way. The ELEGANCE shone through in the steps you took. Not one mis step. The BEAT is evident- fully alive with it's partner, LYRICAL.
(Lyrical has never faded from the scene, including today's showing. Be it the bully pulpit, or the dirty old man, words are your weapons. Slay us with mirth or meaning, we shall lay before thee moved to immobility
Comment Written 12-May-2018
reply by the author on 13-May-2018
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Thank you so much val, my dear friend who always lifts my spirits and challenges my mind to reach out for something that will excite yours! you always make my day no matter what you say about this...GRAY one! Vance
Comment from judiverse
This is fun. He certainly takes his time to getting around to asking the enticing female what her name is. She claims to love poetry and I interested in what he writes. Could be a come-on on her part, and there's a lot of double-entendre. You know what I'm going to say next. You have clever rhyme in this but you hide it in your lengthy lines. I think your work will be more inviting with shorter lines and maybe some stanzas. You're hiding what you can do. judi
reply by the author on 11-May-2018
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This is fun. He certainly takes his time to getting around to asking the enticing female what her name is. She claims to love poetry and I interested in what he writes. Could be a come-on on her part, and there's a lot of double-entendre. You know what I'm going to say next. You have clever rhyme in this but you hide it in your lengthy lines. I think your work will be more inviting with shorter lines and maybe some stanzas. You're hiding what you can do. judi
Comment Written 10-May-2018
reply by the author on 11-May-2018
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Thanks Judiverse and as always a delightful and generous review! Sure is nice to have you around! love and hugs! Vance
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You're very welcome, Vance. Seize the day! judi
Comment from apky
A great humorous piece that left me smiling, Vance.
Come to think of it, this is a fabulous idea. So why don't we start a website just like the one you suggest?
>>To be here for you until the winter snow! Now keep this poem secret here on Fanstory alone, and don't bother to call me because I won't give you her phone!...... Isn't fantasy a wonderful thing?? One could almost image a website called FANTASY STORY!<<
reply by the author on 11-May-2018
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A great humorous piece that left me smiling, Vance.
Come to think of it, this is a fabulous idea. So why don't we start a website just like the one you suggest?
>>To be here for you until the winter snow! Now keep this poem secret here on Fanstory alone, and don't bother to call me because I won't give you her phone!...... Isn't fantasy a wonderful thing?? One could almost image a website called FANTASY STORY!<<
Comment Written 10-May-2018
reply by the author on 11-May-2018
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Thanks so much apky for your truly uplifting and generous review and stars! Always a joy to hear from you! Vance
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written fantasy poem. It us our dreams and vivid imagination that keeps our minds young and active when the body can only do all kinds of tricks only in our imagination.
reply by the author on 11-May-2018
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A very well-written fantasy poem. It us our dreams and vivid imagination that keeps our minds young and active when the body can only do all kinds of tricks only in our imagination.
Comment Written 10-May-2018
reply by the author on 11-May-2018
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Thank you Sandra, for your generous and lovely review, so much appreciated as always! Vance
Comment from Emily Teitsworth
I really liked the comedy in this piece. I laughed a couple times during it! Although, I think the rhyming felt a bit forced. Maybe try a version with no rhyming, or rhyming every other line? Could help loosen it up a bit. I also wanted to say, and I'm not sure you were going for this, but some of the words you used suggested sex rather than tennis. I'm assuming this was intended, and if so, it was fun! If not, I would suggest editing some of the wording like "risky" and "climax". Thanks for the fun read!
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reply by the author on 11-May-2018
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I really liked the comedy in this piece. I laughed a couple times during it! Although, I think the rhyming felt a bit forced. Maybe try a version with no rhyming, or rhyming every other line? Could help loosen it up a bit. I also wanted to say, and I'm not sure you were going for this, but some of the words you used suggested sex rather than tennis. I'm assuming this was intended, and if so, it was fun! If not, I would suggest editing some of the wording like "risky" and "climax". Thanks for the fun read!
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Comment Written 10-May-2018
reply by the author on 11-May-2018
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Thanks for your review Emily and glad to meet you but sorry to leave you with less than good impression! All the best! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
