Close Your Eyes and Dream
Sweet dreams...12 total reviews
Comment from HaleyBel
I particularly liked this lullaby as it reminded me a day in the life of a child. The colours they see, the objects they will note. The tasks they may find. and of course, sleep is a large part of the life of a baby.
reply by the author on 12-May-2018
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I particularly liked this lullaby as it reminded me a day in the life of a child. The colours they see, the objects they will note. The tasks they may find. and of course, sleep is a large part of the life of a baby.
Comment Written 12-May-2018
reply by the author on 12-May-2018
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Thank you for this wonderful review, I really appreciate it.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Pantygynt
There was I presume some semblance of a tune in your head when you created this. I loved the words but wasn't tempted musically. I think this was probably because of the free form you are using. Of course rhyme and metre are not necessary tin a song lyric but I do find them helpful. I did like the circularity of the piece.
reply by the author on 12-May-2018
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There was I presume some semblance of a tune in your head when you created this. I loved the words but wasn't tempted musically. I think this was probably because of the free form you are using. Of course rhyme and metre are not necessary tin a song lyric but I do find them helpful. I did like the circularity of the piece.
Comment Written 12-May-2018
reply by the author on 12-May-2018
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Thanks for reading. This contest required free verse with no rhyming patterns allowed. I love rhyme and my original poem had rhyming throughout. I changed it to be in compliance with the rules, but kept my basic thought. I don't usually enter free verse because I find it hard not to constantly rhyme.:)
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
A sweet and wonderful response to the writing prompt of a lullaby. I heard myself read/sing it as I looked over your words. Well-written and a great entry for the contest. I wish you lots of luck.
reply by the author on 12-May-2018
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A sweet and wonderful response to the writing prompt of a lullaby. I heard myself read/sing it as I looked over your words. Well-written and a great entry for the contest. I wish you lots of luck.
Comment Written 12-May-2018
reply by the author on 12-May-2018
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Thank you for this kind review, i really appreciate it.
Comment from cupa tea
This one is pretty close to being able to sing as a song to a sleeping child. It has parts that are difficult. I like the length of the song. Lots of activities going on in your song. I'm not sure a song such as this needs that many things happening in it. But, what do I know. Good Luck!
reply by the author on 11-May-2018
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This one is pretty close to being able to sing as a song to a sleeping child. It has parts that are difficult. I like the length of the song. Lots of activities going on in your song. I'm not sure a song such as this needs that many things happening in it. But, what do I know. Good Luck!
Comment Written 11-May-2018
reply by the author on 11-May-2018
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Thank you for taking time to read and for your honest review. I really appreciate it.
Comment from Sugarray77
Excellent! Your style and theme are spot on! You have managed to say and convey in a few words a very lovely lullaby for your readers. Well done and good job!
reply by the author on 11-May-2018
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Excellent! Your style and theme are spot on! You have managed to say and convey in a few words a very lovely lullaby for your readers. Well done and good job!
Comment Written 11-May-2018
reply by the author on 11-May-2018
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Thank you for this nice review, it means a lot :)
Comment from jenintorre
This is a lovely lullaby that you have written. It really sang to me. You have chosen a very cute peice of artwork to accompany it. I wish you good luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 11-May-2018
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This is a lovely lullaby that you have written. It really sang to me. You have chosen a very cute peice of artwork to accompany it. I wish you good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 11-May-2018
reply by the author on 11-May-2018
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Thanks for reading and reviewing, its always appreciated.
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
This is such a sweet lullaby, mystery writer, such a precious picture to match the writing. I wish you luck in the contest, this should do well. ~Kerry
reply by the author on 11-May-2018
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This is such a sweet lullaby, mystery writer, such a precious picture to match the writing. I wish you luck in the contest, this should do well. ~Kerry
Comment Written 10-May-2018
reply by the author on 11-May-2018
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Air Spirit
A very tender, loving and soothing lullaby for a child.. actually, I know of some adults that might enjoy having this sung to them as well.. :) your words are calming and reassuring, just what you want to offer a child who is ready for slumber.. you want their dreams to be filled with the best that life has to offer.. My favorite lines in your poem were "...Take my hand,
outside we'll play.
Blue sky above, green grass below
clouds above put on a show..." vivid, idyllic and loving.. perfect!
reply by the author on 09-May-2018
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A very tender, loving and soothing lullaby for a child.. actually, I know of some adults that might enjoy having this sung to them as well.. :) your words are calming and reassuring, just what you want to offer a child who is ready for slumber.. you want their dreams to be filled with the best that life has to offer.. My favorite lines in your poem were "...Take my hand,
outside we'll play.
Blue sky above, green grass below
clouds above put on a show..." vivid, idyllic and loving.. perfect!
Comment Written 09-May-2018
reply by the author on 09-May-2018
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Thank you so much for this great review, I really appreciate it.
Comment from nartoonla
Tweet, with a nice background and loveable piece...well done, and thank you for participating! The little ones deserve a lullaby as one cradles it to sleep feeling love and knowing it is safe.
reply by the author on 09-May-2018
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Tweet, with a nice background and loveable piece...well done, and thank you for participating! The little ones deserve a lullaby as one cradles it to sleep feeling love and knowing it is safe.
Comment Written 09-May-2018
reply by the author on 09-May-2018
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Thank you for this nice review, I'm glad yoy liked it.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the A Lullaby writing prompt.
Your short verse has a good rhythm and makes a lovely lullaby.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the A Lullaby writing prompt.
Your short verse has a good rhythm and makes a lovely lullaby.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 08-May-2018
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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Thank you for your kind review, I always appreciate it.
