Stories of the Dreamtime
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Sky Dancer"Aboriginal myths and legends.
13 total reviews
Comment from aryr
This was amazing, I really enjoyed the concept of sky walking the rainbow. Terara became Jayawah and enjoyed the freedom of the sky. I am still amazed that between the cultures there are so many similarities. Very well done, thanks again for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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This was amazing, I really enjoyed the concept of sky walking the rainbow. Terara became Jayawah and enjoyed the freedom of the sky. I am still amazed that between the cultures there are so many similarities. Very well done, thanks again for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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Thank you my friend. Blessings, Kay
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Blessings to you my new found sister, you are very welcome.
Comment from Marvin Calloway
This piece is not the kind of writing I would normally read but I couldn't help noticing how extremely well it was written.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2018
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This piece is not the kind of writing I would normally read but I couldn't help noticing how extremely well it was written.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2018
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As long as you enjoyed our culture is the main thing. Thank you.
Comment from BeasPeas
I enjoyed reading this legend. Australia is a fascinating place and I like to read about it. Your glossary of terms was a help in getting the gist of the tale, but for the most part the reader was able to deduce the meaning through the story itself. It's always good to include the meaning of words unfamiliar to most people. Much luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2018
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I enjoyed reading this legend. Australia is a fascinating place and I like to read about it. Your glossary of terms was a help in getting the gist of the tale, but for the most part the reader was able to deduce the meaning through the story itself. It's always good to include the meaning of words unfamiliar to most people. Much luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 03-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2018
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Hello Marilyn, Thanks so much for reading my last chapter. Our country is unique. There are 10,000 aboriginal dialects across Australia. Blessings,, Kace.
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Hi Kace. You have set yourself quite a task to write about your country and the tribes. Fascinating. Marilyn
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17 chapters and counting! XXK.
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Good for you. Keep going. Marilyn
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Kay, this story is beautiful. I'll think of Terara every time I see a rainbow. One minor slip of the finger:
He is so small and can't climb too well?"-no question mark
Great job! :) Nancy
great job!
reply by the author on 19-May-2018
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Kay, this story is beautiful. I'll think of Terara every time I see a rainbow. One minor slip of the finger:
He is so small and can't climb too well?"-no question mark
Great job! :) Nancy
great job!
Comment Written 18-May-2018
reply by the author on 19-May-2018
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Hello Wombat, How are you? Thanks for dropping by. Will fix question mark. Love, Kay.
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Hello Wombat, How are you? Thanks for dropping by. Will fix question mark. Love, Kay.
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Now I gotta go find a wombat portrait. Love it, Kay! :) N
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Now you gotta read Warroon Wombat with a surprise ending! :-)
Comment from Quantum Traveler
Well Aussie I have totally enjoyed this great adventure.
The Title and Imagery engaged me enough to start this adventurous read and it captured and held my attention from beginning to end.
A believable and fascinating story for a good bedtime read for youthful children.
This reminds me of my Native American "Crow" Fancy Dancer.
An Excellent Dreamtime Story.
Beautifully written...Quantum Traveler...Phil.
reply by the author on 15-May-2018
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Well Aussie I have totally enjoyed this great adventure.
The Title and Imagery engaged me enough to start this adventurous read and it captured and held my attention from beginning to end.
A believable and fascinating story for a good bedtime read for youthful children.
This reminds me of my Native American "Crow" Fancy Dancer.
An Excellent Dreamtime Story.
Beautifully written...Quantum Traveler...Phil.
Comment Written 14-May-2018
reply by the author on 15-May-2018
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Hello Phil, from on tribe in Oz to you in America! Thanks so much for reading and glad you enjoyed. Cheers, Kay.
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I love this chapter on Sky Dancer and it has peaked my interest in the other chapters of Dreamtime Stories are they in your portfolio?
Sky Dancer is a story that captivates my mind and resonates for a long time and doesn't go away.
Not to many stories to that for me.
If I could I'd give you another "Six".
Very well done Kay...Cheers...Q.T...Phil.
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Hi Phil, Yes, there are 15 chapters in my portfolio...happy reading my friend. Blessings, Kay.
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Thank you Kay I will read.
The Best to You...Q.T...Phil.
Comment from mermaids
This is a cherished tale that is important to keep going. I like the image of the little boy as the Sky Dancer. There is beauty in this story, full of life and nature. It reminds the reader to cherish God's creation.
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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This is a cherished tale that is important to keep going. I like the image of the little boy as the Sky Dancer. There is beauty in this story, full of life and nature. It reminds the reader to cherish God's creation.
Comment Written 14-May-2018
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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Thank you so much for reading, glad you liked the story/legend. Love, Kay.
Comment from Phillip C Kuhn
As the popularity of young adult books continues to rise its interesting to see how new ideas will come about to be competitive in such a competitive market, but this story is great, good job
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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As the popularity of young adult books continues to rise its interesting to see how new ideas will come about to be competitive in such a competitive market, but this story is great, good job
Comment Written 14-May-2018
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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Thanks so much for your kind review, so glad you enjoyed. Cheers, Kay.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
You did a great job on this little story of Bush Lore Kay. Sad, the boy believed the Baiame, that he could ride a rainbow and he stepped off the mountain into nothingness never to be found. Excellent story and presentation. Nancy XX
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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You did a great job on this little story of Bush Lore Kay. Sad, the boy believed the Baiame, that he could ride a rainbow and he stepped off the mountain into nothingness never to be found. Excellent story and presentation. Nancy XX
Comment Written 14-May-2018
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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Nancy, He did become a water spirit! No edits from you? Glad you enjoyed my friend. Love, Kay.
Comment from giraffmang
I have something of a fascination for these kind of more indigenous tales and the spirits of the things around us. You have a good tone to this one.
called to his grandson "where are you boy?"- should probably have a comma following grandson and start the dialogue with a capital letter.
The changing of the season; from summer - no real need for the semi-colon here.
and sweeping the gunya's out - no apostrophe necessary here.
He was too frighten by the goanna's - frightened.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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I have something of a fascination for these kind of more indigenous tales and the spirits of the things around us. You have a good tone to this one.
called to his grandson "where are you boy?"- should probably have a comma following grandson and start the dialogue with a capital letter.
The changing of the season; from summer - no real need for the semi-colon here.
and sweeping the gunya's out - no apostrophe necessary here.
He was too frighten by the goanna's - frightened.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 14-May-2018
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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GMG, Thanks so much for reading and editing. Much appreciated that you enjoyed. Cheers, Kay.
Comment from PoemsOfDD
K, I really enjoyed reading this excellent Australian bush story. It depicts a way of life true to the aboriginal people and also adds a sense of sadness in the sky dancer Terara.
In the 8th paragraph - a tiny edit.
"....stamped his broad foo(t) in the sand."
I appreciate the richness of this story and shower it with a sixer. ~DD
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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K, I really enjoyed reading this excellent Australian bush story. It depicts a way of life true to the aboriginal people and also adds a sense of sadness in the sky dancer Terara.
In the 8th paragraph - a tiny edit.
"....stamped his broad foo(t) in the sand."
I appreciate the richness of this story and shower it with a sixer. ~DD
Comment Written 14-May-2018
reply by the author on 14-May-2018
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Hello DD, Thanks so much for reading, glad you enjoyed! Best Wishes, K. XX
