Comment from Artasylum

Excellent

I'm enjoying this reading level very much. What does that say about me. I'm really enjoying your writing and the children's voice. Keep it up. Thanks, Yours, diana

 Comment Written 06-May-2018

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reply by the author on 07-May-2018

Thank you Artasylum: I am a children's writer. That's why all of my writing has a child's voice. I write from a child's point of view. It pleases me greatly, that you're enjoying my work. It is my intention to continue writing the way, and what I write. There is much more to come, and it will always be, truly yours. Rhonnie.

Comment from Michael W Hogan

Good

This was a fun story and triggered many memories that we all carry from our childhoods. Your story sequence was very good and the characterization of the children and their behavior was excellent. A few minor formatting and contextual flaws were the only thing holding it back from a much better score. Bravo!

 Comment Written 06-May-2018

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reply by the author on 07-May-2018

Thank you, Micheal Hogan: Writers write. Authors rewrite. Viewers like you help me make my writing better. In my next edition of this work I shall take heed to your encouraging and helpful comments. rhonnir69.

Comment from Liz O'Neill

Excellent

The setting was clearer by your good use of onomatopoeia. You also created entertaining alliteration. And a clever allusion to Elvis. At first I thought it was Sponge Bob...he was square...You created just enough suspense, coming from a child's perspective. The characters remained consistent in their role and reactions and dialogue. This was a fun story to read. Well done.

 Comment Written 06-May-2018

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reply by the author on 07-May-2018

Thank you, Liz O'Neill: I am a children's writer. I try my best to entertain my readers by leaving them pleased with what I have written. In my experience as a children's writer, I've learned that the word, "FUN." is the magic word with our children. Thank you for using the magic word fun in your description of my work.
You have been encouraging and helpful. Thank you. Rhonnie.

Comment from Pamusart

Excellent

This does not sound like a very responsible babysitter. I never fell asleep on the job. I had a Siamese cat named Perky. She would follow me to my babysitting job and then cry very loudly outside the front door of the house at which I babysat. I had to let her in. She was sooooo loud. She did not care that there was a male Siamese bigger than she at one of the places. She just stared him down. Well done entertaining story. Thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 06-May-2018

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reply by the author on 07-May-2018

Thank you, Pamusart: Next time the parents in my story need a babysitter I'll be sure to recommend lady, Pamusart, and her Siamese assistant. (smile) Then maybe we can teach our friend, Candace a few things about babysitting. LOL. I'm so glad that you like my work, Pam. Thank you for viewing it. There's much more to come, rhonnie69.

reply by Pamusart on 07-May-2018

Good. Look forward to it

Comment from Harry Smith

Excellent

This is a great picture for this very well written short story that is filled with plenty of imagery and laced with lots of emotions as well. The reader really enjoyed.

 Comment Written 06-May-2018

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reply by the author on 07-May-2018

Thank you Harry: You and I already know each other, so all I have to say here is thank you. As you know, brother Harry, the work that goes into fostering the building up of our God's Kingdom
has many ways. As a children's writer, my way of doing it is from a child's point of view. "Put it in them while their young; and when they're older, they will not depart from it. Right, Harry? "The greatest person in the Kingdom is the one becomes like a child. The Kingdom of our God belongs to people like them," according to the words of our God, Jesus. So I'm spreading the good news of the Gospel among our children; so they can show their elders how and why they should think and behave like them. Rhonnie.

Comment from Katya

Excellent

This is an entertaining story, and the tendency to moralize which has gotten out of proportion in some of your other works is here kept within a good and reasonable bounds. You do write well.

 Comment Written 06-May-2018

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reply by the author on 07-May-2018

Thank You, Katya: I like your reviews because they remind me of Mom's admonishments. I learn a lot of worth while lessons from them. While I may write well, Katya, listening to caring, encouraging, and helpful advise of my readers will foster improvement in my writing endeavors. You write well too, Katya. I learn from your writing. Thank you for sharing. Rhonnie.