Comment from Realist101

Excellent

Very good Red! This is awesome. I don't know how people write these kinds of poems that have the rules like this and make sense. But yours does. The old chimneys do tell a tale. Nice work as always. S.

 Comment Written 09-May-2018

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reply by the author on 09-May-2018

Sheer lack of anything worthwhile to do that keeps me hunting and pecking and looking for informal prompts as to what I should write. Yes, sometimes I feel like a chimney standing there by itself in a field of frostbitten kudzu...thanks very much for reading and reviewing. Write something.

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

those clapboard castles of the poor <-- What a terrific phrase this is! You did a great job with the cascade form, especially in choosing the right sort of topic. "The works of men decay and die" is a universal theme.

 Comment Written 06-May-2018

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reply by the author on 06-May-2018

Thanks very much for reading and reviewing my response to the Potlatch club challenge. I find the Cascade form works better for me than most others. I think the words "works of men decay" is from an old hymn but I can't find it-so I used them. But then every combination of words has been used somewhere.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written cascade poem the picture of the chimney against the sky bring many ideas and pictures to the mind. You used the cascade format well to tell a little story in this poem.

 Comment Written 06-May-2018

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reply by the author on 06-May-2018

I like the cascade format better than many others. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing.

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

Great Cascade poem Red, your repeating lines cascade beautifully through the verses - those clapboard castles of the poor - great line, very descriptive poem. Enjoyed,
cheers.

 Comment Written 06-May-2018

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reply by the author on 06-May-2018

Thanks very much for reading and reviewing my response to the Potlatch Club challenge. I rather like the Cascade form.

Comment from ameen786

Excellent

"Clapboard castles of the poor,"-a unique and beautiful line; wonderful cascade with a haunting theme in excellent rhymes; thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 06-May-2018

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reply by the author on 06-May-2018

Thank you very much for reading my response to the Potlatch Club challenge. I think the Cascade form is useful.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Exceptional

LIJ
Your cascade is filled with great imagery. Great job on its form. Your words were well=chosen. I enjoyed reading it very much. I could picture everything in my mind, even no picture had been included. Your lines flow smoothly with a super story told. Thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 05-May-2018

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reply by the author on 06-May-2018

A six. I appreciate that! The Cascade is not the unhandiest form I've tackled. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing my attempt to write one.

Comment from Maame Grace

Excellent

I was looking out for how you did the cascade, and you nailed it;
"Against the sky,"
"How swiftly falls the morning light," and the wooded hill is lone and high."
One word. Beautiful!
Also, the theme of the lonely, silhouette of the chimney, runs through the stanzas.
I did not notice anything that needs to be fixed.
Beautiful, again!

 Comment Written 05-May-2018

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reply by the author on 06-May-2018

Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my response to the Potlatch Club challenge.

Comment from ciliverde

Excellent

I like this cascade poem very much! It's moody and involves nature, both of which are close to my heart. You've done well to set a scene that is haunting and clear, and the repeating lines help to weave the story. "Clapboard castles of the poor" is a great line.
Carol

 Comment Written 05-May-2018

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reply by the author on 06-May-2018

There are several stone chimneys standing in vacant housesites in my area, some built of hillside rocks and red clay. Like old graveyards, they fascinate me. Thanks very much for reading my attempt at a Cascade poem. Board and batten walls were popular here in early settler days...I wonder if that qualifies as "clapboard."

Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

Nicely done, Red :) This looks like a tricky poetry form to work with, but you make it look easy. I can picture the chimney and the bats. Clapboard makes me think of the movies and actors and directors.

Joy xx

 Comment Written 05-May-2018

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reply by the author on 06-May-2018

Bats and chimney swifts will nest in the flue if you don't build a little fire and burn the trash or whatever every couple of days through the summer. Bits of life in a day that is past. Thanks for reading my Cascade poem.

Comment from Harry Smith

Excellent

I like your picture selection for this well written poem that is filled with emotions and lots of imagery. The reader really enjoyed.

 Comment Written 05-May-2018

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reply by the author on 06-May-2018

Thanks very much for reading my potlatch response. The Cascade is not as rigid and awkward as some forms of poetry...