This Time - That Time 2
Viewing comments for Chapter 45 "Where Am I?"Veronica is sent back again
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Comment from l.raven
HI Sandra, I am so glad we got to see everyone grown up...I would've wondered what they turned out like as they grew up...if Joe and Rosie got there chocolate store...and how Francis was doing with his red eyes...if they ever changed...and see if Mildred was getting on...this is an awesome chapter sweet angel...I am so sorry I am out of sixes...you so deserve one...******...soooooooo very well written...it will be interesting to see what else happens...love you lots sweet girl...Linda xxoo
say hi to Ian for me...xxoo love
reply by the author on 06-May-2018
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HI Sandra, I am so glad we got to see everyone grown up...I would've wondered what they turned out like as they grew up...if Joe and Rosie got there chocolate store...and how Francis was doing with his red eyes...if they ever changed...and see if Mildred was getting on...this is an awesome chapter sweet angel...I am so sorry I am out of sixes...you so deserve one...******...soooooooo very well written...it will be interesting to see what else happens...love you lots sweet girl...Linda xxoo
say hi to Ian for me...xxoo love
Comment Written 05-May-2018
reply by the author on 06-May-2018
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Thank you so much, Linda, your virtual 6 is as good as the real thing. Your reviews are always 6 stars to me, my dear friend. There are only 3 parts left, so keep your eyes open! :-)) Biggest hugs and loads of love, my lovely friend. :) Sandra xxxx
I hope your mum is feeling better now. Ian managed to walk on his special boot all around his bed, so he's feeling proud. His blood pressure is way too high, so he's on stronger tablets to stop him having another heart attack. So all positive at the moment. love you lots, my wonderful friend. xxx
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sounds wonderful...he should be proud...he's a real trooper...mom is going to the doctor tomorrow...she is congested...and sounds awful...but a least she has stopped saying she wanted to die...I guess it is one day at a time for her sweet angel...you are always soooo welcome you...and big hugs and love to you as well my wonderful friend...smiling back at you...loveeeeeee you...Linda xxoo
Comment from Phillip C Kuhn
The story was interesting and held mine the whole time, it had a good flow and the characters and dialogue felt real and believable enough, good work
reply by the author on 06-May-2018
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The story was interesting and held mine the whole time, it had a good flow and the characters and dialogue felt real and believable enough, good work
Comment Written 05-May-2018
reply by the author on 06-May-2018
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Thank you for reading this part, Phillip, and your kind comments. I'm so pleased you thought the dialogue felt real, that is so encouraging. :) Sandra xx
Comment from Swampfox1
You're doing a very good job. I like the story, like the way it is progressing and everything is happening just fine. I did not find any errors. This section was pretty nice: "Rosie looked up and smiled as we came in. 'I'm glad yeh made it in time, Luv. They'll be 'ere soon.' She closed the books before she stood up and smoothed away the creases in her long orange-brown skirt, pushed the grips in her hair a bit more securely to hold her bun in place, and finally pinched her cheeks to put some colour in them. 'D'ya think I look alright?'
'Yeh look lovely,' Meg said. 'Are yeh nervous?'" Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-May-2018
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You're doing a very good job. I like the story, like the way it is progressing and everything is happening just fine. I did not find any errors. This section was pretty nice: "Rosie looked up and smiled as we came in. 'I'm glad yeh made it in time, Luv. They'll be 'ere soon.' She closed the books before she stood up and smoothed away the creases in her long orange-brown skirt, pushed the grips in her hair a bit more securely to hold her bun in place, and finally pinched her cheeks to put some colour in them. 'D'ya think I look alright?'
'Yeh look lovely,' Meg said. 'Are yeh nervous?'" Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 05-May-2018
reply by the author on 06-May-2018
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Thank you so much for another of your lovely reviews, Swampfox1, I really appreciated your kind words. :) Sandra xx
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You are very welcome.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I take it from the first part of this post that Mildred isn't doing as well as we all believed. DARN!!!!!!!!! I still enjoy this story and I'm glad you let us know how things are doing in Bristol.
reply by the author on 05-May-2018
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I take it from the first part of this post that Mildred isn't doing as well as we all believed. DARN!!!!!!!!! I still enjoy this story and I'm glad you let us know how things are doing in Bristol.
Comment Written 05-May-2018
reply by the author on 05-May-2018
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LOL!! Barbara, you are so funny!! It's not all over yet, three more parts to go. Thank you so much, my friend, for this lovely, fun review. I'm glad you are still enjoying it. LOL!! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A very good chapter, Sandra.
-The special reward for James is
wonderful: '..., revealing his place in medical history.'
-Good transition from their mention of
Mildred to Ver. and Mildred sharing
quality time together; however, Mildred does
still seem to be impacted by her heart attack,
which is understandable.
-Then, you take us to Cornwall, and so many
nice things have happened for the family.
-It's hard to believe Daveth has grown so
much and is quite a young man now.
-How nice that Francis's eyes are now blue,
and seems to have a lot of his mother's traits.
-Then, Jacob finally appears; I wonder what that
will mean for Francis and the family?
reply by the author on 05-May-2018
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-A very good chapter, Sandra.
-The special reward for James is
wonderful: '..., revealing his place in medical history.'
-Good transition from their mention of
Mildred to Ver. and Mildred sharing
quality time together; however, Mildred does
still seem to be impacted by her heart attack,
which is understandable.
-Then, you take us to Cornwall, and so many
nice things have happened for the family.
-It's hard to believe Daveth has grown so
much and is quite a young man now.
-How nice that Francis's eyes are now blue,
and seems to have a lot of his mother's traits.
-Then, Jacob finally appears; I wonder what that
will mean for Francis and the family?
Comment Written 05-May-2018
reply by the author on 05-May-2018
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Hi Pam, thank you so much for another wonderful review. Yes there had to be some final answers to what Veronica had been set to do, and why. You will find out about the meeting between Francis and Jacob next time, and what it will mean to the family. I have three more parts to post, all done, but will take me about a week and a half to post. I have to do a lot of reviewing, which I enjoy. It's a nice way to build up the member pumps. Thank you so much for the 6 stars, dear friend. As always, I really appreciate you. Big hugs, :)) Sandra xxx
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You are very welcome and deserving of the stars and review, Sandra. It's always good to get some answers, but it stands to reason that Jacob's return will have some kind of impact.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Sandra,
My, how time flies by
'Veronica certainly gets the [job] done,' suggest no 's'
When Jowell put his 'Book of Accounts' on the table and opened it, [the four men ignored the first part] for the moment and scrutini[z]ed the second half. More concise
I guess the Powers can send Veronica back in time or space. The "space' is a bit of a change.
There is a little confusion about the time in the present, 1991. Has any time passed from the previous chapter. It seems not since Veronica is still concerned about Mildred.
Perhaps add something like: [Only a week had passed.] It was such a nice day...
An excellent device reintroducing Daveth, as that is where this story began, with him appearing in Anne's room needing help.
This chapter also answers many questions the reader may have had about how everyone fared.
It looks like a nice house and a good life for all concerned.
And then, the cliff hanger as Jacob is about to appear.
The next chapter should also be quite interesting.
Well done, my friend!
Robert
reply by the author on 05-May-2018
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Hello Sandra,
My, how time flies by
'Veronica certainly gets the [job] done,' suggest no 's'
When Jowell put his 'Book of Accounts' on the table and opened it, [the four men ignored the first part] for the moment and scrutini[z]ed the second half. More concise
I guess the Powers can send Veronica back in time or space. The "space' is a bit of a change.
There is a little confusion about the time in the present, 1991. Has any time passed from the previous chapter. It seems not since Veronica is still concerned about Mildred.
Perhaps add something like: [Only a week had passed.] It was such a nice day...
An excellent device reintroducing Daveth, as that is where this story began, with him appearing in Anne's room needing help.
This chapter also answers many questions the reader may have had about how everyone fared.
It looks like a nice house and a good life for all concerned.
And then, the cliff hanger as Jacob is about to appear.
The next chapter should also be quite interesting.
Well done, my friend!
Robert
Comment Written 05-May-2018
reply by the author on 05-May-2018
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Thank you so very much for this very helpful review, Robert. Your suggestions were gratefully accepted. It's nice to get a review that sees what the author doesn't, they are worth their weight in gold. So thank you! I've made some changes which I hope will clear matters up. Thank you for the lovely six stars as well, my friend. I really appreciated everything. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from apky
Another wonderful chapter that I enjoyed, especially the second half of it. It is so rewarding to see that Veronica's endeavours have come to fruition and Rosie and Francis are as thick as thieves - to borrow the cliche.
The first part of this chapter mystified my, because there were characters I hadn't read about before. I guess they must have been in the story before I started reading it.
reply by the author on 05-May-2018
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Another wonderful chapter that I enjoyed, especially the second half of it. It is so rewarding to see that Veronica's endeavours have come to fruition and Rosie and Francis are as thick as thieves - to borrow the cliche.
The first part of this chapter mystified my, because there were characters I hadn't read about before. I guess they must have been in the story before I started reading it.
Comment Written 05-May-2018
reply by the author on 05-May-2018
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The powers that be, is the name Veronica has given them. She has no idea who they are. They have appeared several times throughout the book, but at long distances apart. They are the ones that are responsible for her trips through time. Thank you, Aki for this lovely review. Only 3 to go. :))) Sandra xxxx
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Looking forward to the three more!
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Sandra.Aanother well-written segment here. You continue to keep your plot very plausible. :)
Suggestions: "The 'Powers That Be' sat around the table with delighted smiles on their faces." (I cannot see these people with this opening line.) Even if we are to assume that you have readers familiar with the story, you still relly should have a better opening "hook."
And: "'It's not glowing anymore,' Petro stated finally, referring to the 'Future' part of the book." (I suggest you always stick with "he said she said in speech tags. Using adverbs like "finally" do not enhance the writing at all.
Also: " It was such a nice day, Mildred and I decided we'd go for a walk through the woods." (I cannot see how nice it is. Color some imagery for the reader...sun is bright, sky is blue, something instead of just "telling" Show me.
Overall, excellent chapter, my friend. Keep plugging away. :) Bob
reply by the author on 05-May-2018
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Hi, Sandra.Aanother well-written segment here. You continue to keep your plot very plausible. :)
Suggestions: "The 'Powers That Be' sat around the table with delighted smiles on their faces." (I cannot see these people with this opening line.) Even if we are to assume that you have readers familiar with the story, you still relly should have a better opening "hook."
And: "'It's not glowing anymore,' Petro stated finally, referring to the 'Future' part of the book." (I suggest you always stick with "he said she said in speech tags. Using adverbs like "finally" do not enhance the writing at all.
Also: " It was such a nice day, Mildred and I decided we'd go for a walk through the woods." (I cannot see how nice it is. Color some imagery for the reader...sun is bright, sky is blue, something instead of just "telling" Show me.
Overall, excellent chapter, my friend. Keep plugging away. :) Bob
Comment Written 05-May-2018
reply by the author on 05-May-2018
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Thank you so much for your helpful review, Bob, I appreciate all the time you spent reading and reviewing. I'll definitely take a look at those things. That was kind of you to help! Big hugs, my friend. Sandra xxx
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XX :) Bob
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
It's great that Veronica got to go back and see how everyone was doing 10 years into the future. I'm sure she would have been curious especially about Francis. Well done as always. Rox
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It's great that Veronica got to go back and see how everyone was doing 10 years into the future. I'm sure she would have been curious especially about Francis. Well done as always. Rox
Comment Written 05-May-2018
reply by the author on 05-May-2018
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Thank you, Rox, for reading this part. Yes, she would, and so would all you readers!!! LOL. Big hugs my friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment from Zue65
Wow, Veronica had a chance to see Rosie, Joe and their children with Meg and Francis all grown up. What could be an impending conflict that Veronica must help solve in this happy family, to be given a task to travel in this time. I will wait for the next post to find out. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 05-May-2018
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Wow, Veronica had a chance to see Rosie, Joe and their children with Meg and Francis all grown up. What could be an impending conflict that Veronica must help solve in this happy family, to be given a task to travel in this time. I will wait for the next post to find out. Keep writing.
Comment Written 05-May-2018
reply by the author on 05-May-2018
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The PTB decided to let her her see the meeting of father and son, since she played a huge part in keeping the family safe. Now we'll see what Jacob thinks of his new status of being a father. Thank you so much, Susan, for another lovely review! :) Sandra xx
