Perennials of War
Viewing comments for Chapter 75 "Chapter Dreiundzwanzig, part eins"Is Anderson a gallant knight? Can he recover Shan
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Comment from G.B. Smith
Hey there Miss barbara
Silence ensued as their lips almost met. A crack and a bang sounded. Anderson pushed Shana to the ground and covered her body with his. Chivrilis fellow isn't he. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery.
Bear
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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Hey there Miss barbara
Silence ensued as their lips almost met. A crack and a bang sounded. Anderson pushed Shana to the ground and covered her body with his. Chivrilis fellow isn't he. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery.
Bear
Comment Written 30-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Darn it. He almost kissed her, and they were interrupted by gunshots. What a hard life that must be. I still can't imagine why those guys want to kill Shana and others over a painting. It can't worth THAT much. Is something hidden inside the frame, perhaps?
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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Darn it. He almost kissed her, and they were interrupted by gunshots. What a hard life that must be. I still can't imagine why those guys want to kill Shana and others over a painting. It can't worth THAT much. Is something hidden inside the frame, perhaps?
Comment Written 29-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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You're getting closer. LOl Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from meeshu
no nightmares? or maybe there were. the story is moving along nicely and the life during wartime, cliffhanger at the end of this installment is great. well done, Barbara............meeshu
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no nightmares? or maybe there were. the story is moving along nicely and the life during wartime, cliffhanger at the end of this installment is great. well done, Barbara............meeshu
Comment Written 29-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello, I'm guessing you've already edited this as it read so smoothly and I didn't notice any glaring errors, you certainly do leave us hanging and wondering what is going to happen next. I liked that, and you develop lots of secondary characters I see, that's something I need to focus on as a fictional writer, I tend to have main characters and not enough hanging in the wings.
Nice writing and thanks for sharing your story, which I would recommend, Ana.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2018
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Hello, I'm guessing you've already edited this as it read so smoothly and I didn't notice any glaring errors, you certainly do leave us hanging and wondering what is going to happen next. I liked that, and you develop lots of secondary characters I see, that's something I need to focus on as a fictional writer, I tend to have main characters and not enough hanging in the wings.
Nice writing and thanks for sharing your story, which I would recommend, Ana.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2018
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I often use those extra characters to get a point across. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Harry Smith
What a beautiful picture you selected to accompany this chapter. The chapter kept the reader interested from beginning until the end and is filled with lots and lots of imagery.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2018
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What a beautiful picture you selected to accompany this chapter. The chapter kept the reader interested from beginning until the end and is filled with lots and lots of imagery.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb
I don't know why I'm getting an uncomfortable feeling when Shanna and Anderson were talking and walking around the lake
Maybe it was you warned us with you ending of this chapter that put me into a frightful feeling---
A crack and a bang sounded. Anderson pushed Shana to the ground and covered her body with his.
Gert
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2018
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Hello Barb
I don't know why I'm getting an uncomfortable feeling when Shanna and Anderson were talking and walking around the lake
Maybe it was you warned us with you ending of this chapter that put me into a frightful feeling---
A crack and a bang sounded. Anderson pushed Shana to the ground and covered her body with his.
Gert
Comment Written 29-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2018
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Maybe Drew just wanted to get close to Shana. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome Barb
guess time will tell.
Gert
Comment from royowen
A wonderful episode today Barbara. Dear Shana woke up after a fitful night's sleep, Anderson takes Shana for a walk down by the lake, and asks her why she was a little off hand, just when they nearly kiss, a crack is heard and Drew throws her, puts his body over her hers to protect her. Well done, blessings, Roy
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A wonderful episode today Barbara. Dear Shana woke up after a fitful night's sleep, Anderson takes Shana for a walk down by the lake, and asks her why she was a little off hand, just when they nearly kiss, a crack is heard and Drew throws her, puts his body over her hers to protect her. Well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 29-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Welcome Barbara
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Our relationship isn't for their knowledge, at least not yet. Hopefully, someday, it will. That's up to you." He stepped back and wiped an escaped tear from her cheek. "Can I be Drew again?" When she nodded, he asked, "Ready for breakfast? Mom made migas with homemade tortillas. It's one of my favorites."
"Your mom doesn't have a cook?"
"Nope, she likes to do things herself. You're going to find things a lot different here than in New York." Anderson glanced toward the house and then back at Shana. "You need to tell me when something's bothering you, no matter what it is. Don't keep secrets from me." A stunning write as ever with a compelling cliffhanger brilliant work Barbara love Meia xx
Shana nodded. "I'll try."
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2018
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Our relationship isn't for their knowledge, at least not yet. Hopefully, someday, it will. That's up to you." He stepped back and wiped an escaped tear from her cheek. "Can I be Drew again?" When she nodded, he asked, "Ready for breakfast? Mom made migas with homemade tortillas. It's one of my favorites."
"Your mom doesn't have a cook?"
"Nope, she likes to do things herself. You're going to find things a lot different here than in New York." Anderson glanced toward the house and then back at Shana. "You need to tell me when something's bothering you, no matter what it is. Don't keep secrets from me." A stunning write as ever with a compelling cliffhanger brilliant work Barbara love Meia xx
Shana nodded. "I'll try."
Comment Written 29-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from c_lucas
I don't think that was a shot. Just increasing the tension a bit. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2018
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I don't think that was a shot. Just increasing the tension a bit. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2018
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Maybe Texas isn't as safe as Drew believes it is. Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome, Barbara.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
WHAT???? That's a horrid thing to do, Barbara! Now I have a whole week to wait to find out what's going on!!! Have the Russian mafia found her? I hope Drew's family are alright. So not nice to leave me dangling like this!! What a wonderful part, my friend, shame you ran out of time to finish it properly, LOL. Bravo! :) Sandra xxx
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WHAT???? That's a horrid thing to do, Barbara! Now I have a whole week to wait to find out what's going on!!! Have the Russian mafia found her? I hope Drew's family are alright. So not nice to leave me dangling like this!! What a wonderful part, my friend, shame you ran out of time to finish it properly, LOL. Bravo! :) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 29-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2018
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Thank you for a review that made me smile.
