Tortillas
A Ghazal55 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
Wow, this is definitely a different form of poetry, I've never come across before. I can understand that you're inspired by your visit to Mexico. I'ts always nice to make something new. And thanks a lot for the notes. When I read it again it all made sense. I really like your poem, and good luck. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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Wow, this is definitely a different form of poetry, I've never come across before. I can understand that you're inspired by your visit to Mexico. I'ts always nice to make something new. And thanks a lot for the notes. When I read it again it all made sense. I really like your poem, and good luck. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 01-May-2018
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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Thank you, Ulla, for your review. I love this form of poetry popular in Arabia, Persia, and India for centuries. To read contemporary Ghazals, I suggest "Ravishing Disunities: Real Ghazals in English," edited by Agha Shahid Ali, or you can read the Ghazal that inspired me to try my hand at this form: https://www.rattle.com/love-refrains-by-barbara-lydecker-crane/
You are welcome to enter FanStory?s Ghazal contest. The contest deadline has been extended three days. Thank you for your review and for wishing me the best in the contest.
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I will certainly have a look on the sites you've provided.
Comment from TPAC
An interesting style of write, finding the repetitious repeat of the same word different. I find this write limited in projected views interests at least for me. All in my opinion of this work.
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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An interesting style of write, finding the repetitious repeat of the same word different. I find this write limited in projected views interests at least for me. All in my opinion of this work.
Comment Written 01-May-2018
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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Oh, thank you, TPAC, for your review. Ghazals were originally sung. When I listen to them in their original language of Pasto, Urdu, or Arabic, the repetition of the same word makes sense because it forms the rhythm, melody, and beat of the song. The songs and poems have a Yo-Yo effect in that the lines swing out from the repetition and come back. Just as the limitations of the Japanese poetic form the haiku opens up immense opportunities for creativity, the limitations of Ghazals liberates my immagination.
Thanks again.
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Gordon Ramsay would be proud of you for attempting to make your own tortillas, Andre! What a great way to soak up the Mexican culture. This is the first I've heard of a "comal". Thanks for teaching me something new!
I've never written a Ghazal poem. The format looks quite challenging. You did a great job here, and I love that you made your Ghazal poem humorous. Each couplet could easily stand on its own as a separate poem. Perfect pairing of picture and poem.
"When we wanted tasty frisbees
we threw and caught the tortillas" ... lol (my fave couplet)
Well done, Andre! Good luck in the contest. Hope you're having a great vacation! ~~ Connie
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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Gordon Ramsay would be proud of you for attempting to make your own tortillas, Andre! What a great way to soak up the Mexican culture. This is the first I've heard of a "comal". Thanks for teaching me something new!
I've never written a Ghazal poem. The format looks quite challenging. You did a great job here, and I love that you made your Ghazal poem humorous. Each couplet could easily stand on its own as a separate poem. Perfect pairing of picture and poem.
"When we wanted tasty frisbees
we threw and caught the tortillas" ... lol (my fave couplet)
Well done, Andre! Good luck in the contest. Hope you're having a great vacation! ~~ Connie
Comment Written 01-May-2018
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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Oh, thank you, Connie, for your tasty review. Many Westerners are intimidated by the ancient Middle Eastern poetry form, the Ghazal, so I decided to write a silly one to make the form approachable. Yes, each couplet, including your favorite, stands on its own. To read contemporary Ghazals, I suggest "Ravishing Disunities: Real Ghazals in English," editted by Agha Shahid Ali, or you can read the Ghazal that inspired me to try my hand at this form: https://www.rattle.com/love-refrains-by-barbara-lydecker-crane/
You are welcome to enter FanStory?s Ghazal contest. Thank you for your review and for wishing me the best in the contest. Now, back to my vacation!
Comment from RGstar
A nice rendition of the form. Punchy and humour filled. Very much something that perked the afternoon for me.
Enjoyed it.
Good luck in the competition.
Best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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A nice rendition of the form. Punchy and humour filled. Very much something that perked the afternoon for me.
Enjoyed it.
Good luck in the competition.
Best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 01-May-2018
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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Oh, thank you, RG, for your review. The Ghazal intimidates many Western people because it comes from the East, so I wrote a silly, fun Ghazal to make the form approachable and demystify its structure. Thank you for the best wishes, too.
Comment from PoemsOfDD
I have to say I quite enjoyed this fun and entertaining Ghazal poem. It is a format that I have never tried writing but this was certainly a poem that got a chuckle out of me. Who would have thought that writing about tortillas could be so amusing. Great job and best of luck in the competition. ~DD
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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I have to say I quite enjoyed this fun and entertaining Ghazal poem. It is a format that I have never tried writing but this was certainly a poem that got a chuckle out of me. Who would have thought that writing about tortillas could be so amusing. Great job and best of luck in the competition. ~DD
Comment Written 01-May-2018
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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Oh, thank you, DD, for your review of my poem. I'm glad it gave you a chuckle. So many Westerners are intimidated by the Middle Eastern poetry form, the Ghazal, that I decided to write a silly one to make the form approachable. To read contemporary Ghazals, I suggest "Ravishing Disunities: Real Ghazals in English," editted by Agha Shahid Ali, or you can read the Ghazal that inspired me to try my hand at this form: https://www.rattle.com/love-refrains-by-barbara-lydecker-crane/
You are welcome to enter FanStory?s Ghazal contest.
Thanks also for wishing me luck in the contest.
Comment from dragonpoet
Nicely done ghazal poem about someone forgetting a most important
item for a trip. Sometimes one thing can change a lot of others.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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Nicely done ghazal poem about someone forgetting a most important
item for a trip. Sometimes one thing can change a lot of others.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 01-May-2018
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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Oh, thank you, dragonpoet, for your review and for wishing me good luck in the contest. Yes, when you forget an important ingredient, its absence changes the whole recipe.
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You're welcome.
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I think this is the first time I've read a Ghazal poem, or even heard the name. It's a fascinating style. I enjoyed reading yours, even though you ended up having to make your own Tortillas! lol. Well done, and good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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I think this is the first time I've read a Ghazal poem, or even heard the name. It's a fascinating style. I enjoyed reading yours, even though you ended up having to make your own Tortillas! lol. Well done, and good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 01-May-2018
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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Oh, thank you, Sandra, for your review and for wishing me good luck in the contest. The Middle Eastern Ghazal intimidates many Westerners, so I decided to write a silly one to make the form approachable. To read contemporary Ghazals, I suggest "Ravishing Disunities: Real Ghazals in English," editted by Agha Shahid Ali, or you can read the Ghazal that inspired me to try my hand at this form: https://www.rattle.com/love-refrains-by-barbara-lydecker-crane/
You are welcome to enter FanStory?s Ghazal contest. Once again, thank you for your review.
Comment from LIJ Red
Old timers in hard times ground their meal fine and put it in every gravy and batter they made and fried cornmeal flitters, which was a grainy tortilla...which taste like hard times...excellent attack on a rigid poetic form.
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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Old timers in hard times ground their meal fine and put it in every gravy and batter they made and fried cornmeal flitters, which was a grainy tortilla...which taste like hard times...excellent attack on a rigid poetic form.
Comment Written 01-May-2018
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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Oh, thank you, LIJ Red, for your delicious review. I wanted to shake things up with my poem. Thanks.
Comment from Sugarray77
Whew! I love tortillas. Ha. Great writing and great form. This is my first exposure to the Ghazal poetry form and its very good. You encourage all of us with this and I hope to try this type of verse soon. Well done.
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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Whew! I love tortillas. Ha. Great writing and great form. This is my first exposure to the Ghazal poetry form and its very good. You encourage all of us with this and I hope to try this type of verse soon. Well done.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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Oh, thank you, Sugarray77, for your kind review. I love this form of poetry popular in Arabia, Persia, and India for centuries. To read contemporary Ghazals, I suggest "Ravishing Disunities: Real Ghazals in English," editted by Agha Shahid Ali, or you can read the Ghazal that inspired me to try my hand at this form: https://www.rattle.com/love-refrains-by-barbara-lydecker-crane/
You are welcome to enter FanStory?s Ghazal contest. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
lol, This is terrific, I love it, It's silly and clever. By using a name and conversation as "Rob, you forgot the tortillas.
You should have bought the tortillas."
This made it fun, I was just imagining the conversation about these tortillas, lol, it's really quite comical. I make homemade tortillas all the time, they're super easy to do and very tasty. Have fun cooking:))) Good luck in the contest! ~Kerry
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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lol, This is terrific, I love it, It's silly and clever. By using a name and conversation as "Rob, you forgot the tortillas.
You should have bought the tortillas."
This made it fun, I was just imagining the conversation about these tortillas, lol, it's really quite comical. I make homemade tortillas all the time, they're super easy to do and very tasty. Have fun cooking:))) Good luck in the contest! ~Kerry
Comment Written 30-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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Oh, thank you, Kerry, for your review. I was lived when my partner, his sister, and I arrived in Puerto Vallarta, Tuesday and went shopping at Mega, but security kicked me out because I had our Chihuahua with me. So my partner and his sister completed shopping alone. Even though tortillas was on the list, they forgot them. "Rob, you forgot the tortillas" stayed with me, so I decided to write a poem of tortilla jokes to make the Ghazal form fun and approachable.
Yes, I'll have fun cooking. Thanks again.
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lol, that is hilarious. That's terrible they didn't let you in the store. You should of said this is my little mexican Chihuahua, the mascot of taco bell in America and wants tortillas too. lol. Have a great trip!
