Conquering Darkness
An ecology of hope19 total reviews
Comment from karenina
I never heard of flash fiction before coming here (seven or so weeks ago)----but gosh darn it, I really enjoy the style....a story that starts, has a middle and gets to the point with just enough to make it interestingly addictive and not so long I have to call in late to work.... Awesome!
Karenina
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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I never heard of flash fiction before coming here (seven or so weeks ago)----but gosh darn it, I really enjoy the style....a story that starts, has a middle and gets to the point with just enough to make it interestingly addictive and not so long I have to call in late to work.... Awesome!
Karenina
Comment Written 01-May-2018
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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Thank you for your amusing review. It is quite a challenge to make sense in only 150 words. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Out of darkness comes hope? I get the gist of this but you do need to work at it and I think what is not written may be leaving too big of a gap.
Bea the wee bear was returning - insert commas around the wee bear.
When Bea and Scruffles her raccoon cat woke - insert commas around her racoon cat.
strange dark foreboding odor - how is the odor dark?
All the best
GMG
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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2018
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Hi there,
Out of darkness comes hope? I get the gist of this but you do need to work at it and I think what is not written may be leaving too big of a gap.
Bea the wee bear was returning - insert commas around the wee bear.
When Bea and Scruffles her raccoon cat woke - insert commas around her racoon cat.
strange dark foreboding odor - how is the odor dark?
All the best
GMG
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Comment Written 29-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2018
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I unfortunately, am limited to 150 words. This is a severe cropping of a couple of chapters from my Novel which is part 2 of a series Be Wee With Bea. Thank you for your comprehensive review.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 150 Words Flash Fiction writing prompt.
Your story is well told.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the 150 Words Flash Fiction writing prompt.
Your story is well told.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 28-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2018
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Thank you for your affirming review. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from Wabigoon
Liz--
I assume this is part of a longer piece. Sounds like maybe it's black plastic? Had to know how to grade this, I guess. I like it, like the animal characters and that we are seeing things though their eyes.
Thanks
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2018
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Liz--
I assume this is part of a longer piece. Sounds like maybe it's black plastic? Had to know how to grade this, I guess. I like it, like the animal characters and that we are seeing things though their eyes.
Thanks
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment Written 28-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2018
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Thank you for your affirming review. Yes, this is a severe cropping of a couple of chapters from my Novel which is part 2 of a series Be Wee With Bea. It was a blacked top over a beautiful dirt path I used to walk at graduate school, only to come back the next year & it was tarred over.
Comment from Beck Fenton
You write prose like a poet! I love the discovery of sand and the continuing saga of Bea, that wonderful wee bear.
" This path brought her joyful memories of discovering her footprints remained even after she'd stepped off the path" seems like a wonderful metaphor for life... for our actions.... for the magical wonder of childhood.
Great job as usual.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2018
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You write prose like a poet! I love the discovery of sand and the continuing saga of Bea, that wonderful wee bear.
" This path brought her joyful memories of discovering her footprints remained even after she'd stepped off the path" seems like a wonderful metaphor for life... for our actions.... for the magical wonder of childhood.
Great job as usual.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2018
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Thank you for your affirming review. Thank you for your vote of appreciation with by giving my 6 stars.
Comment from lyenochka
It's an intriguing story. I was confused about what happened in the path. I don't know what happened other than the night to make the "golden path" black. I see optimisim with the green blades growing. I was confused about the "raccoon cat." Is it a cat that resembles a raccoon? I thought a raccoon more likely to accompany a bear in the wild.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2018
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It's an intriguing story. I was confused about what happened in the path. I don't know what happened other than the night to make the "golden path" black. I see optimisim with the green blades growing. I was confused about the "raccoon cat." Is it a cat that resembles a raccoon? I thought a raccoon more likely to accompany a bear in the wild.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2018
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Thank you for your affirming review. Yes, this is a severe cropping of a couple of chapters from my Novel which is part 2 of a series Be Wee With Bea. It was a blacked top over a beautiful dirt path I used to walk at graduate school, only to come back the next year & it was tarred over. My cat was a beautiful Maine Coon.
Comment from Sherman541
I am always amazed at the short stories that people come up with in only 150 words. That is, I think hard to do. I like the story that starts looking for something almost lost and then suddenly finding it. Good Luck and Best Wishes in the Contest! Sherman541
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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I am always amazed at the short stories that people come up with in only 150 words. That is, I think hard to do. I like the story that starts looking for something almost lost and then suddenly finding it. Good Luck and Best Wishes in the Contest! Sherman541
Comment Written 27-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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Thank you for your admiring review. Ilm glad you appreciated then challenge and enjoyed the story.
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You are most welcome ;)
Comment from Harry Smith
Nice picture for this very interesting short story that kept the reader interested from the beginning until the end. It has lots and lots of imagery.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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Nice picture for this very interesting short story that kept the reader interested from the beginning until the end. It has lots and lots of imagery.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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Thank you for your comprehensive review. I'm glad you enjoyed the imagery.
Comment from Henry King
This an excellent story in which an adult can assist the very young reader in understanding that the beauty of the path is returning. A question and answer session explaining the rebirth and growth of the plant world. This tale meets the requirements of the contest. Well done.
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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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This an excellent story in which an adult can assist the very young reader in understanding that the beauty of the path is returning. A question and answer session explaining the rebirth and growth of the plant world. This tale meets the requirements of the contest. Well done.
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Comment Written 27-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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Thank you for your inspired review. I glad you see the potential generated by it.
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You are welcome. I have never taught in Grammar school or High school, but all my siblings and many of our children and grandchildren have. I am sensitive to what is needed. We are taught how to read and write but not how to listen.
