Precious Gems
Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "Alonelyness"Na-po-wri-mo
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Comment from Harry Smith
Great picture selection for this poem that I found to be very interesting. The poem is filled with lots of both imagery and emotions. The reader could relate.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2018
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Great picture selection for this poem that I found to be very interesting. The poem is filled with lots of both imagery and emotions. The reader could relate.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2018
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Dear Harry, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from apky
What a powerful opening stanza, framed by the artwork you chose which completely complement the poem.
Loneliness comes in different
Shades and colors,
Sometimes when we're alone
And sometimes with others
A great poem, nice word conjuration, and a great theme to bease your poem on.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2018
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What a powerful opening stanza, framed by the artwork you chose which completely complement the poem.
Loneliness comes in different
Shades and colors,
Sometimes when we're alone
And sometimes with others
A great poem, nice word conjuration, and a great theme to bease your poem on.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2018
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Dear apky, Thanks for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from Air Spirit
A very thought provoking thought.. I LOVE your made up word... it says so much in just one word.. Alonelyness is something that I believe we all experience.. although it defies logic.. because how can we, as human beings be lonely, in a world with almost 8 billion people, UNLESS it is an internal state of affairs.. not dependent on who is around us -- which I believe it is.. I think most of us can identify with being with a group of people, or maybe just one person, but still feel LONELY, disconnected, and alone.. and are enveloped by alonelyness.. but I agree with your last sentence, "...Someday the sweetest person you've ever known Will unexpectedly appear, like a miracle." I believe that Alonelyness is almost a pre-cursor to being able to love.. because it often open us up and prepares us because of a sweet appreciation of its absence.. thank you for this great share.. well done!
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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A very thought provoking thought.. I LOVE your made up word... it says so much in just one word.. Alonelyness is something that I believe we all experience.. although it defies logic.. because how can we, as human beings be lonely, in a world with almost 8 billion people, UNLESS it is an internal state of affairs.. not dependent on who is around us -- which I believe it is.. I think most of us can identify with being with a group of people, or maybe just one person, but still feel LONELY, disconnected, and alone.. and are enveloped by alonelyness.. but I agree with your last sentence, "...Someday the sweetest person you've ever known Will unexpectedly appear, like a miracle." I believe that Alonelyness is almost a pre-cursor to being able to love.. because it often open us up and prepares us because of a sweet appreciation of its absence.. thank you for this great share.. well done!
Comment Written 27-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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Dear Air Spirit, Thank you for appreciating my word "Alonelyness" and for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from Artasylum
First love the hopeful ending line:
Will unexpectedly appear, like a miracle
Also: Alonelyness
I will (not in a poem) take your well coined phrase. Very clever and I love coined phrases.
Very sad but well penned read..
yours, diana
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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First love the hopeful ending line:
Will unexpectedly appear, like a miracle
Also: Alonelyness
I will (not in a poem) take your well coined phrase. Very clever and I love coined phrases.
Very sad but well penned read..
yours, diana
Comment Written 27-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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Dear Diana, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from frogbook
This is an intricate tale of what being alone and being lonely can mean. Original and clever keeping the reader interested and attracted by your new word.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2018
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This is an intricate tale of what being alone and being lonely can mean. Original and clever keeping the reader interested and attracted by your new word.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2018
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Dear frogbook, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from Teri7
Donna, This is a very well written poem about Alonelyness. I have to be honest. I have never heard this word until I read your work. It makes a lot of sense to me. Sometimes we can be in a crowd of people and feel alone. You used very good words and art work. The only thing that helps me not feel that way is knowing the Lord is with me always as with all of us! love, Teri
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2018
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Donna, This is a very well written poem about Alonelyness. I have to be honest. I have never heard this word until I read your work. It makes a lot of sense to me. Sometimes we can be in a crowd of people and feel alone. You used very good words and art work. The only thing that helps me not feel that way is knowing the Lord is with me always as with all of us! love, Teri
Comment Written 24-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2018
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Dear Teri, Thank you for your comments and review. I think "Alonelyness" is the first word I ever made up. Maybe someday it will be in the dictionary! You know that the Lord is with you always, but I can't always feel that way, unfortunately. Sometimes it feel as though He's a universe away. Donna
Comment from karenina
I have heard say, and I agree...there is a huge difference between being alone, and being lonely. I seek out times to be alone...a walk in the woods, a seat on a pew in an empty church...because that alone time gives me the gift of no distraction and allows me to self reflect. I have, however, felt lonely in a room full of people--if they were, say attending the same play as I was but not part of a circle of friends.
Good points...
Karenina
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2018
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I have heard say, and I agree...there is a huge difference between being alone, and being lonely. I seek out times to be alone...a walk in the woods, a seat on a pew in an empty church...because that alone time gives me the gift of no distraction and allows me to self reflect. I have, however, felt lonely in a room full of people--if they were, say attending the same play as I was but not part of a circle of friends.
Good points...
Karenina
Comment Written 24-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2018
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Dear Karenina, I'm glad you got the meanings of my poem - alonelyness can take on so many meanings. Thank you for your comments and review. I sought out Fan Story so I wouldn't feel so lonely, and even though I have never met any of you in person, it makes me feel a lot better. Dove
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I think this serves as friend and family to member of us....no need to ever be lonely here my friend. I am a message away!--Karenina
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Dear Karenina, Thanks for being just a message away! I think you said you lived in Massachusetts too? Dove
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
Thank you for this detailed desciption and defintion of a word you made up that could easily fit in Webster's dictionary. After 30byears of a rollar costar marriage that didn't work, for these past 15 years, I love living by myself. I go when I want to go, when I want to lay around I do that too. I'm a licensed ordained Evangelist. I've preached out in the streets, Ive been out on the streets feeding the needy, teaching the children about Jesus, and inspiring then to learn scripture by rewards of treats. Ive traveled near and far preaching the word of God. In June I'll be 65 and I try to resort more to teaching and one on one. I council to young women and a few women my age. But I don't ever think about loneliness because I learned long ago that Im NEVER ALONE. Because Jesus is with me and in me. But I enjoyed reading your poem and I learned a new word. Thank you
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2018
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Thank you for this detailed desciption and defintion of a word you made up that could easily fit in Webster's dictionary. After 30byears of a rollar costar marriage that didn't work, for these past 15 years, I love living by myself. I go when I want to go, when I want to lay around I do that too. I'm a licensed ordained Evangelist. I've preached out in the streets, Ive been out on the streets feeding the needy, teaching the children about Jesus, and inspiring then to learn scripture by rewards of treats. Ive traveled near and far preaching the word of God. In June I'll be 65 and I try to resort more to teaching and one on one. I council to young women and a few women my age. But I don't ever think about loneliness because I learned long ago that Im NEVER ALONE. Because Jesus is with me and in me. But I enjoyed reading your poem and I learned a new word. Thank you
Comment Written 24-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2018
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Dear Mary, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
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My pleasure
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My pleasure
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about being alone and loneliness. I am most of the day home alone but I never feel lonely or bored. I keep myself busy during the day and before I know the day is over and my daughter returns from work.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2018
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A very well-written poem about being alone and loneliness. I am most of the day home alone but I never feel lonely or bored. I keep myself busy during the day and before I know the day is over and my daughter returns from work.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2018
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Dear Sandra, Thank you for your comments and review. I'm glad you never feel lonely. It's an ugly way to feel. Dove
Comment from Miriam Collins
This is very powerful, "Loneliness comes in different Shades and colors, Sometimes when we're alone, And sometimes with others" this is very relatable. Everyone goes through times when they feel lonely, even when they are with someone. And many times it is hard for others to always notice when people are feeling lonely. I think having a passion for writing as you have, seems to help. A passion for something helps to pass the loneliness one feels in life. I would love to see more description of things in your writing. But you write with power, and your writing is not at all empty it is very meaningful.
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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2018
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This is very powerful, "Loneliness comes in different Shades and colors, Sometimes when we're alone, And sometimes with others" this is very relatable. Everyone goes through times when they feel lonely, even when they are with someone. And many times it is hard for others to always notice when people are feeling lonely. I think having a passion for writing as you have, seems to help. A passion for something helps to pass the loneliness one feels in life. I would love to see more description of things in your writing. But you write with power, and your writing is not at all empty it is very meaningful.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2018
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Dear Poetrypearls7, Thank you for relating to my poem, and for your comments and review. Dove
