Life's Slide
2nd posting, 1st was on a wrong account and no transfer here8 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This has multileveled meaning. It is clearly a great metaphor of life. You keep the reader in mystery with your step by step revealing of what we will eventually experience. Although it is one step at a time. We have this myth that we will finally arrive. The reader was hoping you would affirm that and yet you led us beyond our resting on our laurels to plunge downward to begin where we began with all kinds of new strengths and wisdom. Well written.
reply by the author on 21-May-2018
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This has multileveled meaning. It is clearly a great metaphor of life. You keep the reader in mystery with your step by step revealing of what we will eventually experience. Although it is one step at a time. We have this myth that we will finally arrive. The reader was hoping you would affirm that and yet you led us beyond our resting on our laurels to plunge downward to begin where we began with all kinds of new strengths and wisdom. Well written.
Comment Written 04-May-2018
reply by the author on 21-May-2018
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Thank you thank you for your insightful review. Not many have nailed it such as you have. This happens to be one of my favorites, can you have favorites that you write? lol
lulube
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello - Well, what can I say. You describe this challenge so well - a really exciting well told free verse. At first I thought you were climbing a mountain. But it is a 'Waterslide' - sounds exciting. Extremely well worded - 'Bravery attacks the fear' - good personification here. The whole of this piece is well done and deserves a 6. Warm regards Dorothy xx
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018
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Hello - Well, what can I say. You describe this challenge so well - a really exciting well told free verse. At first I thought you were climbing a mountain. But it is a 'Waterslide' - sounds exciting. Extremely well worded - 'Bravery attacks the fear' - good personification here. The whole of this piece is well done and deserves a 6. Warm regards Dorothy xx
Comment Written 20-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018
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thxs for such an awesome review. I'm glad I could take you on this climb and that you enjoyed this one. I love that you like the way I word things, some say I'm too politically incorrect with the usage of words. What do they know eh? lol
lulube sorry habit
Comment from Sherman541
I would never compare my life to the highest water slide, but yet, life is so full of ups and downs, it is hard, it feels like you are not gonna make it and then you feel like you will make it and then you feel for sure you won't and Suddenly you realize you will and you did. The excitement knowing you did it makes you so proud. Sherman541
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018
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I would never compare my life to the highest water slide, but yet, life is so full of ups and downs, it is hard, it feels like you are not gonna make it and then you feel like you will make it and then you feel for sure you won't and Suddenly you realize you will and you did. The excitement knowing you did it makes you so proud. Sherman541
Comment Written 19-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018
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thxs for your entertaining comments on this poem. I really appreciate it when a review plays on my work, it means it touched another, whether positive or negative.
lulube glad you enjoyed
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you are most welcome :)
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello, there's a great sense of relief at the end when he finally does it, shrieking afterwards. Good poem with lots of great descriptions. I noticed no errors and found it a joy to read and review, Ana.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018
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Hello, there's a great sense of relief at the end when he finally does it, shrieking afterwards. Good poem with lots of great descriptions. I noticed no errors and found it a joy to read and review, Ana.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018
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thxs for your great comments in this review. I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
lulube
Comment from karenina
Oh I experienced this! Not a swimmer, but more not a wimp, I allowed myself to be nagged, challenged, dared and forced by humiliation to climb that ladder of fate. So right! Once up there, there is no "down ramp"...except to sit yourself down and give your fate up to the twists and turns of a plastic slide that's seen better days...
and at the end? Unless you have sprouted wings you are so going to slap down with a burn and sting that reminds you of a spanking of toddlerhood. Nonetheless, miraculously, there is no headless monster holding you under and you bounce up, head above water and screaming like a Viking warrior! Sucha true account I had to relive it...and now I have post traumatic near drowning syndrome...and a sudden urge to exert revenge on mean friends! LOL!
Karenina
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018
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Oh I experienced this! Not a swimmer, but more not a wimp, I allowed myself to be nagged, challenged, dared and forced by humiliation to climb that ladder of fate. So right! Once up there, there is no "down ramp"...except to sit yourself down and give your fate up to the twists and turns of a plastic slide that's seen better days...
and at the end? Unless you have sprouted wings you are so going to slap down with a burn and sting that reminds you of a spanking of toddlerhood. Nonetheless, miraculously, there is no headless monster holding you under and you bounce up, head above water and screaming like a Viking warrior! Sucha true account I had to relive it...and now I have post traumatic near drowning syndrome...and a sudden urge to exert revenge on mean friends! LOL!
Karenina
Comment Written 19-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018
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thxs for stopping by and giving me a wonderful response through your own experience. I enjoyed this review so much.
lulube
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That's because now you know you are not the ONLY one to succumb to this foolish urge to fit in and "do it!"!!!! :)
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lol We are never alone!!
lulube
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Always someonecwilling yo test our metyle!
Comment from Henry King
Humorous and very true telling of an adventure into the unknown. This free verse poem has enough rhythm and internal rhyme to make it flow very smoothly. First, this poets words put you right in the middle of the action. Yes, where were we going? It didn't matter, we were on an adventure. The striving, sweating and climbing we experienced it right then with those delightful words. Then swoosh, right down the water slide. Second, Well Done!
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018
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Humorous and very true telling of an adventure into the unknown. This free verse poem has enough rhythm and internal rhyme to make it flow very smoothly. First, this poets words put you right in the middle of the action. Yes, where were we going? It didn't matter, we were on an adventure. The striving, sweating and climbing we experienced it right then with those delightful words. Then swoosh, right down the water slide. Second, Well Done!
Comment Written 19-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018
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thxs so much for stopping by. I thoroughly enjoyed your awesome comments in your review. So glad you enjoyed it.
lulube
Comment from meeshu
very nice post, Lulube. very well constructed free verse that builds up to the climax. great language and vision has the reader thinking of Mt. Everest and not just a waterslide......great.......meeshu
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018
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very nice post, Lulube. very well constructed free verse that builds up to the climax. great language and vision has the reader thinking of Mt. Everest and not just a waterslide......great.......meeshu
Comment Written 19-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018
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I'm so glad you enjoyed it. thxs for your great comments and review.
lulube
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I liked the build up with all the fearful feelings of anticipation and trepidation and then the thrill and the success as you complete and victory is finally yours, well written and I enjoyed the story, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018
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I liked the build up with all the fearful feelings of anticipation and trepidation and then the thrill and the success as you complete and victory is finally yours, well written and I enjoyed the story, love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018
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I'm so glad you stopped by. First; for your awesome comments and review, but mostly and secondly; I need to ask you a few things about Tenerife.
How expensive is it to stay there for a week or two? In a hotel or kitchenette type of room, at a 2-3 star place? What is the money comparison to the American dollar or English pound? what is the best airport to land at that will be central for me to travel about on a bus?
I'm almost positive, that I want to make it a part of my visit over there in June when my daughter has her baby. I want to take a lot of photos of plants and birds and beaches. Is it cheaper to fly from England or Madrid to Venerife?
Sorry for asking so many questions, but you are the only one I've ever met from there
lulube nnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn
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Well if you are flying to Tenerife from England, you will need to book with Ryanair, they are the best and the cheapest, also EasyJet fly direct to Tenerife. You need the south airport which is the best part of the island for tourists with the best weather. It is very inexpensive to stay in Tenerife and the food is also very cheap. It is the euro here, so go on line and see how the exchange rate is Dollar to Euro. They do not take the English pound here, but you can exchange any currency over here without a problem. The island is very friendly and your best best is to stay in Los Cristianos or Costa Adeje, two of the best and easiest places to get to. The beaches are fine, the flowers and trees are beautiful and the weather is gorgeous most of the time. I can recommend H10 hotel which is pretty central, Arona Grande and You should find some self catering accommodation without any problem on-line. Good luck, love Dolly x x x
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Dolly, thxs so much for all the info. It's always best to get info. from someone that lives where you want to visit. Sounds like the right place to sum up my life's travels, for I don't expect to be able to fund any more trips abroad.
One more thing, my daughter has reservations for me travelling by myself, what is your opinion for me being in Tenerife by myself? I can console her with your opinion.
lulube
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You will be perfectly safe on your own in Tenerife, it is one of the safest places on the planet! Obviously you have to exercise caution wherever you go on your own. I live here on my own and travel on my own too. Tenerife is full of elderly holiday makers! Many Brits retire here too! Best of luck, and let me know when you plan to visit? love Dollyx
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thxs for the confidence and I will let you know when I'm leaving here for England. I have just looked into another isl. La Palma it looks interesting. Maybe a quiet week to do some writing there and a week in Tenerife. I'll definitely let you know, maybe we can do a lunch?
lulube
