My Brothers' Keeper
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Waiting."Rachel feels responsible for her brother.
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Comment from lyenochka
I'm so happy that both Rachel and Daniel confessed their commitment to each other. I like it because it's not mushy or overly sentimental but so direct and confident in their feelings for each other. And you bring this up during a time of crisis as Gray is going through surgery. That makes sense, it's in these times that priorities become clearer. Great job with this chapter.
There were several places which could use a comma but I don't like commas so I won't mention them unless you want me to list them.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2021
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I'm so happy that both Rachel and Daniel confessed their commitment to each other. I like it because it's not mushy or overly sentimental but so direct and confident in their feelings for each other. And you bring this up during a time of crisis as Gray is going through surgery. That makes sense, it's in these times that priorities become clearer. Great job with this chapter.
There were several places which could use a comma but I don't like commas so I won't mention them unless you want me to list them.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much Helen for reading, reviewing and your great comments. It's okay about the commas. Hugs and smiles!
Comment from MelB
A good conversation between the two characters and one they needed to have. I hope Gray is going to be okay. I love that they both were praying for him.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2018
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A good conversation between the two characters and one they needed to have. I hope Gray is going to be okay. I love that they both were praying for him.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2018
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Thank you Mel for reviewing, I really appreciate your kind and observant comments.
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You're most welcome.
Comment from Mabaker
I sense a great story coming along just fine, Alie. You describe two young people falling in love, and that is always a beautiful theme. I will read every chapter. Poor old Gray hurt and now in the hands of a great surgeon Love U Anne
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
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I sense a great story coming along just fine, Alie. You describe two young people falling in love, and that is always a beautiful theme. I will read every chapter. Poor old Gray hurt and now in the hands of a great surgeon Love U Anne
Comment Written 17-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
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Thank you Anne for reading and reviewing. Awww your comments as so very kind, I am glad you enjoy it. Luv u Alie.
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Alie. You have settled a few questions here that a reader may have regarding solidifying Daniel and Rachel's relationship. Your characters broached the topic of "mommy" and "daddy" through the vehicle of Gray's accident Many times people DO find each other serendipitously. The whole relationship takes off quickly as if it has a life of its own. I think this was an important chapter and a good conversation for them to have. Marilyn
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
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Hi Alie. You have settled a few questions here that a reader may have regarding solidifying Daniel and Rachel's relationship. Your characters broached the topic of "mommy" and "daddy" through the vehicle of Gray's accident Many times people DO find each other serendipitously. The whole relationship takes off quickly as if it has a life of its own. I think this was an important chapter and a good conversation for them to have. Marilyn
Comment Written 16-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
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Wow, thank you Marilyn for the wonderful comments and of course reviewing.
Comment from Pantygynt
Sometimes it takes a shared crisis to bring people together and have them understand they were meant for each other. That seems to have happened here, meanwhile we wait hoping for a happy outcome as far as both Gray's future and theres is concerned.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
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Sometimes it takes a shared crisis to bring people together and have them understand they were meant for each other. That seems to have happened here, meanwhile we wait hoping for a happy outcome as far as both Gray's future and theres is concerned.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and of course for reviewing.
Comment from Blue Hendrix
Good job. Story has a nice even tone and it also has good characters. Looking forward to the what happens next. Can't wait to read more of your work.!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
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Good job. Story has a nice even tone and it also has good characters. Looking forward to the what happens next. Can't wait to read more of your work.!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
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Thank you for reviewing and for your kind comments, both are very much appreciated.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks about waiting, good news, surgery is over, now everything upon God's hand, Gray will be fine; well said, well done. Keep Writing Inspire Changing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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This speaks about waiting, good news, surgery is over, now everything upon God's hand, Gray will be fine; well said, well done. Keep Writing Inspire Changing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 16-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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Thank you for reading and reviewing and for you kind comments and encouragement.
