The Bee
A bit of a buzz63 total reviews
Comment from rjuselius
haha. tihs is an entertaining piece of poetry dear tony! i love the way you have made even a miniscule little bee as one of the most important small insects.
thank you for sharing!
blessings and a huge hug!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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haha. tihs is an entertaining piece of poetry dear tony! i love the way you have made even a miniscule little bee as one of the most important small insects.
thank you for sharing!
blessings and a huge hug!
rebekka x
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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I appreciate the sixth star, Rebekka, for this tale of my heroic rescue operation! Thanks, too, for your words of encouragement about the poem. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Pantygynt
Stood the church clock at ten to three as well? This is a lovely sonnet, Tony, and one that records your good deed for the day. Itis also a triumph of close observation as no detail is omitted. This is a magnificent example of an English sonnet. Would you do my forthcoming sonnet class the honour of joining us as a guest speaker on the writing of sonnets? I have done this before with Mark Valentine on the subject of parody and Tom Reischel on Rhyme and Metre. It is good for them to experience another writer's views apart from my own on the subject
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
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Stood the church clock at ten to three as well? This is a lovely sonnet, Tony, and one that records your good deed for the day. Itis also a triumph of close observation as no detail is omitted. This is a magnificent example of an English sonnet. Would you do my forthcoming sonnet class the honour of joining us as a guest speaker on the writing of sonnets? I have done this before with Mark Valentine on the subject of parody and Tom Reischel on Rhyme and Metre. It is good for them to experience another writer's views apart from my own on the subject
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
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Thanks for this stirling review, Jim, and for the six stars and invitation to take part in your sonnet class. I'd be delighted to do so, if I'm able to fit in with your times. When is the class? I certainly wouldn't class myself as an expert in sonnet writing, but I have enjoyed experimenting with the different forms. I'm just about to post one in hexameter, that has a few deliberate deviations from regular iambic rhythm. I fully expect to be lambasted for it!
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The class runs on Tuesdays and Fridays from 27th April till 29th May with no class on 15th May. One hour's duration from 2200 to 2300 BST (1700 -1800 EDT). We will be looking at the English sonnets first so 4th or 8th April would be ideal if you could make it.
Comment from Heather Knight
This is a lovely poem, Tony. I love your attention to detail and how you turn something so small into a beautiful post.
I love the last two lines. The truth is they made me smile.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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This is a lovely poem, Tony. I love your attention to detail and how you turn something so small into a beautiful post.
I love the last two lines. The truth is they made me smile.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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I appreciate the sixth star, Maria, for this tale of my heroic rescue operation! Thanks, too, for your words of encouragement about the poem. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Mark Valentine
Love this. It points out how the smallest of things can be a compelling story - the last couplet gives the poem a "circle of life" feel to it. The scarcity of bees adds a layer of social relevance to it. So creative and well-written!
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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Love this. It points out how the smallest of things can be a compelling story - the last couplet gives the poem a "circle of life" feel to it. The scarcity of bees adds a layer of social relevance to it. So creative and well-written!
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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I appreciate the sixth star, Mark, for this tale of my heroic rescue operation! Thanks, too, for your words of encouragement about the poem. No bees = no honey! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Michael Steinert
Sometimes I just want a poem to brighten my day, and make me feel good, and this entry did just that. The color scheme was perfect and the rhyming scheme well suited for the subject. The ending -to honey for my tea. Really ends it perfectly.
Have a great day!
Mike
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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Sometimes I just want a poem to brighten my day, and make me feel good, and this entry did just that. The color scheme was perfect and the rhyming scheme well suited for the subject. The ending -to honey for my tea. Really ends it perfectly.
Have a great day!
Mike
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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I appreciate your review, Michael, of this tale of my heroic rescue operation! No bees = no honey. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Pamusart
Very nice, Tony. Your combination of bee with drunk made me think of my poem where the first line is "Like drunken bees, buzzing too profusely"
Small world. I have rescued bees and spiders and other insects from pools. But I won't rescue a poisonous insect like a black widow or scorpion. I am deathly allergic to bees. But they do not want to sting. They do it to decent the hive. I rescued the bee that was drowning and watched it recover as you did and then fly away. I could not just let it drown while I watched as it struggle for its life. Bees are good peeps. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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Very nice, Tony. Your combination of bee with drunk made me think of my poem where the first line is "Like drunken bees, buzzing too profusely"
Small world. I have rescued bees and spiders and other insects from pools. But I won't rescue a poisonous insect like a black widow or scorpion. I am deathly allergic to bees. But they do not want to sting. They do it to decent the hive. I rescued the bee that was drowning and watched it recover as you did and then fly away. I could not just let it drown while I watched as it struggle for its life. Bees are good peeps. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2018
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I appreciate your review, Pam, of this tale of my heroic rescue operation! No bees = no honey. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks how the poet tries to save the bee; she struggles for survival and started making buzzing sound; poet sees and thinks of her honey services; well said, well done. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018
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This speaks how the poet tries to save the bee; she struggles for survival and started making buzzing sound; poet sees and thinks of her honey services; well said, well done. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018
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Many thanks for dropping by to review, Dr Alcreator. Appreciated. All the best, Tony
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am deathly allergic to bee stings. That being said, I understand the importance of bees to pollination. I even gave my husband as a present one year a place for bees to live. He has numerous fruit trees. I enjoyed reading your poem and I use honey in my hot tea.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018
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I am deathly allergic to bee stings. That being said, I understand the importance of bees to pollination. I even gave my husband as a present one year a place for bees to live. He has numerous fruit trees. I enjoyed reading your poem and I use honey in my hot tea.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018
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Many thanks for dropping by to review, Barbara. Appreciated. Bee allergy can be a real curse. I sympathise! All the best, Tony
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Tony, such a simple story turned into a fine sonnet. Good descriptive piece which created a mental image in the reader's mind. Good enjambment maintained throughout, good abab rhyme and iambic pentameter perfect. I could not actually detect the volta, but maybe it is in the final couplet. Nice ending - 'as home I trudge - to honey for my tea.' And is there honey still for tea LOL! Good read of a perfect piece of writing, as usual. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018
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Hi Tony, such a simple story turned into a fine sonnet. Good descriptive piece which created a mental image in the reader's mind. Good enjambment maintained throughout, good abab rhyme and iambic pentameter perfect. I could not actually detect the volta, but maybe it is in the final couplet. Nice ending - 'as home I trudge - to honey for my tea.' And is there honey still for tea LOL! Good read of a perfect piece of writing, as usual. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018
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Many thanks for dropping by to review, Dorothy. Appreciated. Yes, I think I must have had Rupert Brooke's poem in the back of my mind with that last line! All the best, Tony
Comment from William Ross
a great written sonnet style on the honey bee who survived after drying off in the sun. Thanks for the share and have a great day.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018
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a great written sonnet style on the honey bee who survived after drying off in the sun. Thanks for the share and have a great day.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2018
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Many thanks for dropping by to review, William. Appreciated. All the best, Tony
