Remembering
Dreams don't always come true24 total reviews
Comment from frogbook
What a lovely description of memories and a sad end to some well described dreams. Superbly written with emotional highs and lows. in a cleverly rhymed poem.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
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What a lovely description of memories and a sad end to some well described dreams. Superbly written with emotional highs and lows. in a cleverly rhymed poem.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
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Thanks for great review.
Comment from N. Rabwar
I decided to write the review because the ending is so unexpected and poignant. Life is so filled with surprises. I never could have foreseen the drastic changes that happened in my life In the past three years. I never heard of the word "scumping" before this poem, so I learned something new as well.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
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I decided to write the review because the ending is so unexpected and poignant. Life is so filled with surprises. I never could have foreseen the drastic changes that happened in my life In the past three years. I never heard of the word "scumping" before this poem, so I learned something new as well.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
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Thank you so much for reviewing. Scrumping means stealing from fruit trees. It must be an English expression..Take care Jen.
Comment from Artasylum
Jennitorre... what a wrenching poem this is... the thought of this great dreamer ending up solitary in a wheel chair with only the ability to star. your artwork is beautiful... love the color choices... i had so much hope for this boy. yours, diana
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
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Jennitorre... what a wrenching poem this is... the thought of this great dreamer ending up solitary in a wheel chair with only the ability to star. your artwork is beautiful... love the color choices... i had so much hope for this boy. yours, diana
Comment Written 17-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
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Thank you so much for the review Diana. Much appreciated.
Comment from Sylvana Brannon
Beautiful yet sad at the same time. Perhaps melancholic is the right description for it. I've recently been having some similar thoughts myself, about dreams that will never materialise, so perhaps that's why I related so well to this poem.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
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Beautiful yet sad at the same time. Perhaps melancholic is the right description for it. I've recently been having some similar thoughts myself, about dreams that will never materialise, so perhaps that's why I related so well to this poem.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
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Thank you so much for your great review. I really appreciate it.
Comment from Susan Burger
This is a beautiful entry for the Rhyming Poetry Contest. The picture you chose is lovely. I would like to be looking from that window remembering also. However, not from a wheelchair.
You paint a lovely picture with your flowing words and well crafted rhymes. And you leave us with a surprised twist at the end.
Well done. Good luck in the competition!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
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This is a beautiful entry for the Rhyming Poetry Contest. The picture you chose is lovely. I would like to be looking from that window remembering also. However, not from a wheelchair.
You paint a lovely picture with your flowing words and well crafted rhymes. And you leave us with a surprised twist at the end.
Well done. Good luck in the competition!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
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Thank you so much Susan for your great review. Much appreciated.
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello, I had to scroll up and see if this was real. I notice it is general fiction, and that's good because I felt really floored by the ending. So sad!! I like this entry, beautiful imagery before we find out he can only be a spectator and is bound to the wheelchair.
Great original entry and best of luck, Ana.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
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Hello, I had to scroll up and see if this was real. I notice it is general fiction, and that's good because I felt really floored by the ending. So sad!! I like this entry, beautiful imagery before we find out he can only be a spectator and is bound to the wheelchair.
Great original entry and best of luck, Ana.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
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Thank you so much Ana for your great review.
Comment from Angela Post
I enjoyed all the hopes and dreams in the poem. I think you did a good job with a rapid shift of emotion near the end of the poem that was also hinted at in the opening lines.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
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I enjoyed all the hopes and dreams in the poem. I think you did a good job with a rapid shift of emotion near the end of the poem that was also hinted at in the opening lines.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
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Thank you so much Angela for your great review.
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Friend,
Memories and regrets.
Whew!
I have had my share of those.
Your poem speaks of an individual who, at the end of his life, is filled to the brim with memories, but also harbors many regrets. Solid, sound, and important message told in well-executed rhyming verse...
Made me sad...
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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Hello Friend,
Memories and regrets.
Whew!
I have had my share of those.
Your poem speaks of an individual who, at the end of his life, is filled to the brim with memories, but also harbors many regrets. Solid, sound, and important message told in well-executed rhyming verse...
Made me sad...
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 16-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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Thanks Diane for your great review.
Comment from Swampfox1
This is a good one for the contest. This is so sad of a poem, the ending that is, that I passed it up the first time. So very sad to hear of someone in a wheelchair feeling sorry for themselves. Gee, put a 350 chevy on that wheelchair and go back to viewing the countryside. It hits the reader like a ton of bricks. Is this really you, is this about you, is it even true?
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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This is a good one for the contest. This is so sad of a poem, the ending that is, that I passed it up the first time. So very sad to hear of someone in a wheelchair feeling sorry for themselves. Gee, put a 350 chevy on that wheelchair and go back to viewing the countryside. It hits the reader like a ton of bricks. Is this really you, is this about you, is it even true?
Comment Written 16-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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Thank you for your comments. This poem is purely fictional.take care and have a nice night. Jen.
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You're welcome. Purely fictional , that is sad to put someone in a wheel chair and not state the reason the person is in there. Why not add the reason the person is in there, and take it from there.
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So sorry you think that but I didn't think it was necessary as the poem wasn't about the details of his disability.
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But the disability changes the poem suddenly, from reading what the person has done, the experiences, some of the joys to suddenly being sad and disgruntled and making the world feel sorry for him or her.
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That's life.
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I guess
Comment from karenina
Oh my. Life is so unfair. Of co u Rae so many ways to be successful and happy....but first to sweep up the shattered dreams of a life planned out.
Karenina
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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Oh my. Life is so unfair. Of co u Rae so many ways to be successful and happy....but first to sweep up the shattered dreams of a life planned out.
Karenina
Comment Written 16-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
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Thanks for reading and reviewing.
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Welcome..
