Echoing Memories of Regret
Free Verse: When You and I Were We47 total reviews
Comment from LIJ Red
Ya should not have told sis her new dress made her fanny look like a bus. It is sad when siblings grow apart, sometimes hard to understand. Nice art, excellent poem.
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Ya should not have told sis her new dress made her fanny look like a bus. It is sad when siblings grow apart, sometimes hard to understand. Nice art, excellent poem.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
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Hah!
Oh my goodness, LIJRED! Now there's a thought! Way to make me smile! Thank you!
And thank you for the excellent rating!
Made my day!
Comment from dragonpoet
Until the very last line I thought this was about a marriage that started well and slowly changed and broke. It is somewhat sadder to know that is was sisters that lost love and trust. I think commpasses in the second line should be compass.
I like that each stanza had alliteration in it. It makes the flow smoother and creates
more of a poetic feel.
Good luck in the contest and keep writing
dragonpoet
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Until the very last line I thought this was about a marriage that started well and slowly changed and broke. It is somewhat sadder to know that is was sisters that lost love and trust. I think commpasses in the second line should be compass.
I like that each stanza had alliteration in it. It makes the flow smoother and creates
more of a poetic feel.
Good luck in the contest and keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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Hello Friend,
Thank you for stopping by and your excellent rating and thoughtful review.
Two sisters = two compasses = :)
Thank you!
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You're welcome. It is what we are here to do.
I appreciate the clarification.
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Comment from Janet Foor
Wow! This is beautiful and full of vivid imagery and definitely full of emotion. Excellent artwork and presentation.
Lovely descriptions, good use of alliteration..
Very nicely done.
Blessings
Janet
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Wow! This is beautiful and full of vivid imagery and definitely full of emotion. Excellent artwork and presentation.
Lovely descriptions, good use of alliteration..
Very nicely done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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Hello Janet!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
Comment from Thomas Bowling
I used to live my life in black and white. All or nothing. Everything had to fit in perfect slots. Round or square there were no oblongs or odd shapes. It was neat, organized, and boring as hell. I finally discovered a world of color and shapes that I didn't know existed.
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I used to live my life in black and white. All or nothing. Everything had to fit in perfect slots. Round or square there were no oblongs or odd shapes. It was neat, organized, and boring as hell. I finally discovered a world of color and shapes that I didn't know existed.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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Hello Thomas,
Yup.
Black and white are good for ... zebras!
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review.
Comment from Irish Rain
I love this. I like the emotions expressed in the reflections, how they were so alike, but not, and drifted apart, and now...just memories. I love this!!!
Blessings...
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I love this. I like the emotions expressed in the reflections, how they were so alike, but not, and drifted apart, and now...just memories. I love this!!!
Blessings...
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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Hello Irish Rain,
So pleased you enjoyed my poem!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
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You're most welcome!!
Comment from rjuselius
Wow this is a complementary piece of poetry dear anonymous! Your words sink in like a drowning battleship.
Thanks for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings and a hearty hug!
Rebekka x
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Wow this is a complementary piece of poetry dear anonymous! Your words sink in like a drowning battleship.
Thanks for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings and a hearty hug!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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Hello Rebekka,
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
Blessing and a hearty hug to you as well!
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 'Emotions' writing prompt.
Your verse clearly paints several emotions.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
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I think this is a good entry for the 'Emotions' writing prompt.
Your verse clearly paints several emotions.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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Hello Sharon!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review.
Comment from antonieta
I enjoyed reading your poem, which follows well the writing prompt. As you say it is stream of consciousness in a free verse poem. I liked that: "You and I
were no longer
We."
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I enjoyed reading your poem, which follows well the writing prompt. As you say it is stream of consciousness in a free verse poem. I liked that: "You and I
were no longer
We."
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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Hello antonieta,
So pleased my poem resonated with you!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review...
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about emotions that can make us happy or sometimes cry. When we are unable to show emotion we feel dead inside either way bad or good emotions.
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A very well-written poem about emotions that can make us happy or sometimes cry. When we are unable to show emotion we feel dead inside either way bad or good emotions.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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Hello Sandra,
So pleased my poem resonated with you!
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review.
Comment from Rasmine
Hello, :)
I wish you all the luck in the contest!
I really liked this stanza:
Still, I hear the echoing laughter of regret
when memory pays me a visit
bearing a kaleidoscope
of Christmas pine-scented boughs,
summer's wide open meadows,
or magical midnight stories told under a canopy
of Amish quilted comforters piled high
in a make-believe ship that was always headed
due north and beyond, sailing high
upon a starlit sky of imaginative wonder,
and lovingly guided by compasses
of unwavering sisterly certitude...
Very good descriptions.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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Hello, :)
I wish you all the luck in the contest!
I really liked this stanza:
Still, I hear the echoing laughter of regret
when memory pays me a visit
bearing a kaleidoscope
of Christmas pine-scented boughs,
summer's wide open meadows,
or magical midnight stories told under a canopy
of Amish quilted comforters piled high
in a make-believe ship that was always headed
due north and beyond, sailing high
upon a starlit sky of imaginative wonder,
and lovingly guided by compasses
of unwavering sisterly certitude...
Very good descriptions.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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Hello Rasmine,
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you for your excellent rating and review!
