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A Monchielle for Potlatch25 total reviews
Comment from Thomas Bowling
When you finish your chores you get a feeling of accomplishment. Even something as simple as sweeping the driveway gives satisfaction. It's what pride of ownership is all about. When I drive through my neighborhood, I can tell which homes are owned and which ones are rented.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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When you finish your chores you get a feeling of accomplishment. Even something as simple as sweeping the driveway gives satisfaction. It's what pride of ownership is all about. When I drive through my neighborhood, I can tell which homes are owned and which ones are rented.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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So true. But it never ends. I get one thing done and there are two waiting.
Comment from judiverse
There's always more work to be done, isn't there? I have lots of chores that need doing, but here I am pecking away on the keyboard. (What I'd rather be doing.) You mention mowing the grass and sweeping the driveway. After you feel satisfaction at doing those chores, you think of things that need to be don inside. Excellent rhyme throughout. Great idea. Your first stanza is lovely but my thought is it doesn't fit in with rest of the stanzas about chores to be done. judi
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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There's always more work to be done, isn't there? I have lots of chores that need doing, but here I am pecking away on the keyboard. (What I'd rather be doing.) You mention mowing the grass and sweeping the driveway. After you feel satisfaction at doing those chores, you think of things that need to be don inside. Excellent rhyme throughout. Great idea. Your first stanza is lovely but my thought is it doesn't fit in with rest of the stanzas about chores to be done. judi
Comment Written 13-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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The first stanza was the what I saw before I saw what had to be done. You're right. Work never ends. Thanks, Judi.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
haha so tired is he after doing all those chores? What a great challenge poem for potlatch. It read smoothly with a fun theme & great examples. I really like the 'birds mocking cat below.' The picture is a perfect pairing of words + picture. No time to rest, huh? Now he has to tackle the inside. Great job. Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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haha so tired is he after doing all those chores? What a great challenge poem for potlatch. It read smoothly with a fun theme & great examples. I really like the 'birds mocking cat below.' The picture is a perfect pairing of words + picture. No time to rest, huh? Now he has to tackle the inside. Great job. Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 13-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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The story of my life. Never get around to it all. Oh, well. It will be there when I'm ready.
Thanks for a wonderful review. A six on Friday? Awesome. I really appreciate it.
Comment from William Ross
Nicely done on the potlatch with this fun humorous piece, works out very well with the rhyming and meter. Thanks for the share and have a great day.
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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Nicely done on the potlatch with this fun humorous piece, works out very well with the rhyming and meter. Thanks for the share and have a great day.
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Comment Written 13-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Thanks, William. I hope it gave you a chuckle.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is a fun and well penned submission for the Potlatch Poetry challenge.
Well done. Fun and funny, and oh so true.
Thank you for sharing this one with us.
Sharon
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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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This is a fun and well penned submission for the Potlatch Poetry challenge.
Well done. Fun and funny, and oh so true.
Thank you for sharing this one with us.
Sharon
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Comment Written 13-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Work never gets done, but I always find time for FanStory. LOL
Thanks for reviewing.
