Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written Monchielle. A great subject that seems to flow well and naturally from the start to end. It will be hard to top this poem. I have to start thinking. Lol.

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018

Thank you for the lovely compliment. You can do it, I know.

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

My word, I thought maybe he'd been snoozing on the cat again.

What a neat form. The rhyme scheme itself looks like some kind of foreign song. Anyway a most entertaining poem, Yvonne. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018

Thank you. So you saw my cartoon? lol

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Oh my, after all that word - you have to go to work inside? You're so fastidious and hardworking! I think I'd be more like the guy in the hammock except it's too cold to be outside very long. Thanks for introducing me to another new form!

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018

I didn't say WHEN I'd get to the inside. lol. Thanks.

Comment from joycetreasures

Excellent

Damommy - Nice job especially with all the requirements for this Monchielle poem, requiring four five-line stanzas where the first line repeats in each verse. Each line within the stanzas consist of six syllables, and lines three and five rhyme. WOW! nicely done and you certainly met all specifications.

It definitely is a nice humorous poem. Your message was clear saying a lot do, then you will start on the inside (funny). Good job! Also, I love the imagery. Thanks

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018

Thank you, Joyce. Appreciate it.

Comment from Artasylum

Excellent

Hey Damommy... When last I looked today... my fingers are slowing down... they've been used to explore fanstory right side up and downside down. This is such a fun read. as always looking forward. yours, diana

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018

I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for your lovely comments, Diana.

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Hello
Smiles first time I've seen a Monchielle poem
I like the positive attitude of the home owner , love the efficient way of watering his posies.
Gert

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018

Thank you. You've made my day brighter.

reply by Gert sherwood on 13-Apr-2018

You are welcome damommy
Gert

reply by Gert sherwood on 13-Apr-2018

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very well written and very true poem for us today too! You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery with your words and the art work. Best wishes in the contest. love, Teri

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018

Thank you, Teri.

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Hi Yvonne. I like this poetry form and I'm enthralled with your topic. Maybe you can come to my house when you're done? Great job here. Your poem is interesting, light, and rhymes well. Marilyn

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018

Thanks you, Marilyn. When I get done???? It'll never happen. lol

Comment from jaded831

Excellent

You created a poem reflecting our laziness. Your poem reminds us of the bad side of our personality or the good side, depending how you look at it. We all need down time, but there should be a limit. You made me laugh, so you get a thumbs up.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018

I'm happy I made you laugh. Thanks for saying so.

Comment from Mel E. Furnish

Excellent

Very lovey little piece you have shared here! I have enjoyed reading it, thank you for sharing! I like the structure you have used here. Keep up the good work!

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018

Thank you. I appreciate your review and comments.