Comment from Deb Kincaid

Excellent

I especially liked your choices to use "dread invading" and "severed our souls." Overall, too, the poem captures the suffering of not knowing the future of the relationship.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018

Thanks for the read and the encouraging comments.

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

I think this is a good entry for the Emotions writing prompt.
You clearly tell your tale of suffering the loss of a loved one.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018

Thanks much for the read and the review.

Comment from Katya

Excellent

Oooo! This character is in a bad way! KNOWS the woman is in the arms of her lover and still can't get free of her! Oh dear.
The writing is good, the sound enjoyable, the rhyme and meter handled well, the images progressing from the sound of a whine to the echo of a scream--I like the whole thing. Good good.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018

Thanks much for the read, the review and the encouraging words.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

An emotional write of turmoil and sadness when the one you love leaves and may not return, I have been there and your write is filled with the pain we suffer, good rhymes, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018

Thanks for the read, Dolly, the rating and the kind words.