Precious Gems
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Sand"Na-po-wri-mo
9 total reviews
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This is an excellent poem that describes the many places that sand can get. This is cute and I like the cute, fun, and lighthearted nature of this. Thanks for sharing this well written poem. Well done.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2018
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This is an excellent poem that describes the many places that sand can get. This is cute and I like the cute, fun, and lighthearted nature of this. Thanks for sharing this well written poem. Well done.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2018
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Dear Jeffrey, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from Teri7
Donna, This is a very well written and beautiful poem you have penned for your book. The descriptive words you used made for a beautiful thought for me. Art work went well with your words! Great job! love, Teri
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
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Donna, This is a very well written and beautiful poem you have penned for your book. The descriptive words you used made for a beautiful thought for me. Art work went well with your words! Great job! love, Teri
Comment Written 10-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
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Dear Teri, Thank you for your comments and review. Donna
Comment from karenina
You had me at the beach photo! I love sand, shells, waves, . tiny tasting lips, you name it! No place on earth r e l e be a ME of a 'll stress than the sea!
Karenina
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
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You had me at the beach photo! I love sand, shells, waves, . tiny tasting lips, you name it! No place on earth r e l e be a ME of a 'll stress than the sea!
Karenina
Comment Written 10-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
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Dear Karenina, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
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You are welcome!
Comment from Debbie Pope
You do an excellent job of describing the sand of the beach. The dark, water washed and the light sun drenched is exactly right. And it does crinkle through toes. Simply a beautiful depiction of the beach.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
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You do an excellent job of describing the sand of the beach. The dark, water washed and the light sun drenched is exactly right. And it does crinkle through toes. Simply a beautiful depiction of the beach.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2018
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Dear Debbie, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from Marisela Contona
This is a beautiful piece.Your descriptions are beautiful, and peaceful. You have amazing structure, format, and flow. Your image, and color choice works great.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018
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This is a beautiful piece.Your descriptions are beautiful, and peaceful. You have amazing structure, format, and flow. Your image, and color choice works great.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018
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Dear Marisela, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Dark, water-washed sand,
Light, sun-drenched sand
I scoop sand-splattered shells into the palm of my hand ...a beautifully rhymed poem with so much lovely descriptiv writing. Very well done this is truly marvelous. Kindest regards, Meia x
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018
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Dark, water-washed sand,
Light, sun-drenched sand
I scoop sand-splattered shells into the palm of my hand ...a beautifully rhymed poem with so much lovely descriptiv writing. Very well done this is truly marvelous. Kindest regards, Meia x
Comment Written 10-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018
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Dear Meia, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from Sharon Haiste
Your lovely verse describes sand from several aspects.
Nicely done.
And the picture that you have posted here is a good match.
Well done and thank you for sharing this with us.
Sharon
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018
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Your lovely verse describes sand from several aspects.
Nicely done.
And the picture that you have posted here is a good match.
Well done and thank you for sharing this with us.
Sharon
Comment Written 10-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018
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Dear Sharon, Thank you for your comments and review. Dove
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks in a free flow of thoughts in rhymes about love of sand and hate of cleaning sand off the body when the poet goes to the sea beaches; well said, well done. Keep Writing Inspire Changing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018
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This speaks in a free flow of thoughts in rhymes about love of sand and hate of cleaning sand off the body when the poet goes to the sea beaches; well said, well done. Keep Writing Inspire Changing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 10-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018
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Dear Alcreator, Thank you for comments and review. Dove
Comment from Katya
Sweet poem. It has good sound, and a pleasant flow of richly tactile imagery. I definitely feel like I'm on the beach. Well done!
The picture, though? It would be better to find one that shows sand, in my opinion. Or something gritty anyway. This one looks like glue, paint, or mastic--maybe plaster or clay?--and hasn't at all the same tactile reference as the poem. Just sayin'
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018
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Sweet poem. It has good sound, and a pleasant flow of richly tactile imagery. I definitely feel like I'm on the beach. Well done!
The picture, though? It would be better to find one that shows sand, in my opinion. Or something gritty anyway. This one looks like glue, paint, or mastic--maybe plaster or clay?--and hasn't at all the same tactile reference as the poem. Just sayin'
Comment Written 10-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018
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Dear Katya, Thanks for your comments and review. Dove The picture was entitled "Tides" and it reminded me of the water half wetting the sand, half leaving it dry. I looked under "sand" in Fan Art. I'm sorry the picture displeased you. Dove
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It's a pleasing picture. It just isn't sand. I'm a sculptor, and I work with these materials all the time, so maybe I'm over-sensitive. I think I would have had the same reaction encountering the picture in a gallery. Thank you for telling me how you found it.
