Results! (Long as they Self-Serve)
5-7-5 Hilarious Bon Mot9 total reviews
Comment from Cheryl Baker
I enjoyed your poem. It made me laugh. I enjoyed the rhyme which is consitent for each line. The syllable count is correct for the contest. I particularly like the presentation. Foe me that yellow background with the brown print is so easy to read and looks so good. That picture is so appropriate.
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I enjoyed your poem. It made me laugh. I enjoyed the rhyme which is consitent for each line. The syllable count is correct for the contest. I particularly like the presentation. Foe me that yellow background with the brown print is so easy to read and looks so good. That picture is so appropriate.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2018
Comment from Bill Schott
This 1-6-1, Results! (Long as they self-serve), uses the eight syllables and uni-rhyme lines to remind me of Trump's daughter's comment that if people think that your product does something it doesn't do, and their ignorance profits you, let them think whatever they want.
(This is a gross paraphrase of what she said, though the message is the same. If what they wrongly believe helps you, don't correct them. )
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This 1-6-1, Results! (Long as they self-serve), uses the eight syllables and uni-rhyme lines to remind me of Trump's daughter's comment that if people think that your product does something it doesn't do, and their ignorance profits you, let them think whatever they want.
(This is a gross paraphrase of what she said, though the message is the same. If what they wrongly believe helps you, don't correct them. )
Comment Written 10-Apr-2018
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
A very compelling poem. I love that you've said so much in such few words! What a great topic for your 1-6-1. This is a great entry for the contest. Good luck to you.
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A very compelling poem. I love that you've said so much in such few words! What a great topic for your 1-6-1. This is a great entry for the contest. Good luck to you.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2018
Comment from victor 66
There are still so many "snake oil peddlers out there that the only difference is that they've become so much more sophisticated. The really clever "snake oil peddlers" can stil convince you that you need something that you don't. Nothing has really changed, has it? Good Luck.
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There are still so many "snake oil peddlers out there that the only difference is that they've become so much more sophisticated. The really clever "snake oil peddlers" can stil convince you that you need something that you don't. Nothing has really changed, has it? Good Luck.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2018
Comment from Mrs. KT
Wait!
You mean those false eyelashes that I purchased that promised to give me an alluring set of eyelashes but only gave me an eye infection, should be pitched?
You've got that right!
Love your 1/6/1 offering. In this day and age of quick fixes and gimmicks, your message is "spot on!"
diane
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Wait!
You mean those false eyelashes that I purchased that promised to give me an alluring set of eyelashes but only gave me an eye infection, should be pitched?
You've got that right!
Love your 1/6/1 offering. In this day and age of quick fixes and gimmicks, your message is "spot on!"
diane
Comment Written 09-Apr-2018
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is good entry for the 1-6-1 Poetry writing prompt.
Your short verse has a clear message. Well pitched.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
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I think this is good entry for the 1-6-1 Poetry writing prompt.
Your short verse has a clear message. Well pitched.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 09-Apr-2018
Comment from Henry King
I like the poem. It does tell a story. It does make a reader think. That's what a good poet does. This poem did not meet the requirements of a 1 6 1 poem. The second line has five syllables. Even with poetic license, lies, is one syllable. Change it to lying then add an, s , to make. Then you have six syllables in the second line.
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I like the poem. It does tell a story. It does make a reader think. That's what a good poet does. This poem did not meet the requirements of a 1 6 1 poem. The second line has five syllables. Even with poetic license, lies, is one syllable. Change it to lying then add an, s , to make. Then you have six syllables in the second line.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2018
Comment from Gloria ....
What is really interesting about your post is the top line on the ad: Man proposes but God disposes and then Reverend Shine, snake oil.
A most amusing one sixty one. Your rhymes perfect and the instruction worth a shot.
To order and a wonderful entry to the contest. Best of luck to you. :)
Gloria
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What is really interesting about your post is the top line on the ad: Man proposes but God disposes and then Reverend Shine, snake oil.
A most amusing one sixty one. Your rhymes perfect and the instruction worth a shot.
To order and a wonderful entry to the contest. Best of luck to you. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 09-Apr-2018
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This made me smile and of course there are many advertisements out there to dupe us into buying! Lies told about the miracles of products! He he he, this is a fun write, love Dolly x
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This made me smile and of course there are many advertisements out there to dupe us into buying! Lies told about the miracles of products! He he he, this is a fun write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-Apr-2018
