Comment from Poetic Friend

Exceptional

Well-said, Estory. This poem reminds me of the Book of Genesis.

As you creatively indicated, what really matter is the spirit on earth and beyond.

This is a thought-provoking and memorable poem.

Thank you for sharing it.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018

Thanks again for this six star review and all your comments supporting this poem. It is very much a Garden of Eden kind of image, but also a romantic one, though a bit convoluted. Here, the pastoral is supplanted by the orchestrated designs of man, which are worn away by nature. So it is a poem of the triumph of the natural, and the failure of man to wall it in, shape it. estory

Comment from Sugarray77

Excellent

This is a very good sonnet that you have written. Just a note on the presentation. It would look better if you had a space line between the first and second stanza. The theme and sentiment were very good as were the author's notes. Well done!!

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018

Thanks so much for the excellent review and all the wonderful comments and suggestions. Glad you enjoyed it estory

Comment from Artasylum

Excellent

story... I am not much for exact punctuation or poetry form... although I am thirsting to learn... I am in love with words and yours were perfectly sewn into the fabric of the circle of life. Beautifully written. yours, diana

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018

Thanks so much for the excellent review and your wonderful comments supporting this poem and I am glad you enjoyed it estory

Comment from Pamusart

Excellent

This is beautiful, estory. I really liked the ending. Like all good poets, you build up to your ending with each stanza. That is what I try to do. Besides the ending, this is my favorite part. Thank you for sharimg

"Yet the long, slow waves of time break them down,
Tower by tower, wall by stubborn wall;
Buttresses, gables, roofs brought to the ground,
Cracked, crumbled, worn, broken by their fall. "

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018

Thanks so much for the excellent review and for all your comments supporting this little poem. Glad you liked it, and found that stanza so moving. estory

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

Well said.
I like how you describe the building of man's worth as clay bricks that can then be torn down.
Our arrogance tells us that we are above nature, we are not.
Thank you for sharing this.
Sharon

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018

Thanks for the excellent review and all your encouraging comments supporting this poem. Glad you enjoyed it and got what I was trying to say estory

Comment from Harry Smith

Excellent

I like this style of writing poetry. The poem has lots and lots of imagery and it is easy to read and understand which makes it a joy to read.

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018

Thanks so much for the wonderful comments supporting this poem and for telling me what you liked about it estory

Comment from karenina

Excellent

So wise and true...
So sad we cannot see it, how little our footprint in nature is worth compared to
God's intentions....
The message may not ever get through our thick heads, one can only pray....

Karenina

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Apr-2018

Thanks so much for the excellent review and for all your comments supporting this piece. Glad you enjoyed it. Hubris! Beware of hubris! estory