My Brothers' Keeper
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Visiting the Village."Rachel feels responsible for her brother.
7 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Daniel is such a caring and thoughtful person. I like how both come from good close-knit families. Enjoyed the conversation in this post and perhaps the title should be more about that instead of the village.
I really marveled at this sentence: "Did you know that each and every one of us has dormant cancer cells in our bodies, but not all of us will have cancer?" That really explains a lot!
Thanks for sharing about this medical phenomenon. For my granddaughter, that chimera showed up early when she was a toddler.
Minor capitalization nit:
dormant all your life?" He asked. (he)
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2021
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Daniel is such a caring and thoughtful person. I like how both come from good close-knit families. Enjoyed the conversation in this post and perhaps the title should be more about that instead of the village.
I really marveled at this sentence: "Did you know that each and every one of us has dormant cancer cells in our bodies, but not all of us will have cancer?" That really explains a lot!
Thanks for sharing about this medical phenomenon. For my granddaughter, that chimera showed up early when she was a toddler.
Minor capitalization nit:
dormant all your life?" He asked. (he)
Comment Written 15-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2021
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Wow, that was indeed a great review Helen, I am so glad you enjoyed this one. I will fix that in a moment.
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Alie. Good pace in this chapter which covered an easy-going time spent between the two of them. Questions were answered about the chimera and its growth, as well as contact with the family. Realistic dialogue throughout. Marilyn
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2018
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Hi Alie. Good pace in this chapter which covered an easy-going time spent between the two of them. Questions were answered about the chimera and its growth, as well as contact with the family. Realistic dialogue throughout. Marilyn
Comment Written 08-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2018
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Thanks Marilyn for reviewing and for your kind comments. I am glad you are enjoying the story.
Comment from Heather Knight
Another interesting chapter, Aryr. I particularly enjoyed the discussion about the chimera. It's really fascinating stuff.
Thanks so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2018
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Another interesting chapter, Aryr. I particularly enjoyed the discussion about the chimera. It's really fascinating stuff.
Thanks so much for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2018
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Thank you Maria for reviewing, I always appreciate your comments.
Comment from Pantygynt
You have that rare gift inb an author, the ability to recount the normal and somehow make it interesting. I think it is possibly because although these two behave in a very normal way the circumstances are far from most people's everyday experiences and so are interesting. Readers want to empathise with either Daniel or Rachel dependent on their own gender.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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You have that rare gift inb an author, the ability to recount the normal and somehow make it interesting. I think it is possibly because although these two behave in a very normal way the circumstances are far from most people's everyday experiences and so are interesting. Readers want to empathise with either Daniel or Rachel dependent on their own gender.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Wow, make that a double wow. I thank you for the compliment, that is the nicest thing anyone has ever said. I do appreciate your review.
Comment from MelB
He pulled the two chairs together and indicted for her to sit, then handed her a mug. - indic(a)ted
Daniel and Rachel had a nice, long nap. I look forward to what happens next.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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He pulled the two chairs together and indicted for her to sit, then handed her a mug. - indic(a)ted
Daniel and Rachel had a nice, long nap. I look forward to what happens next.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Opps, thanks for catching that, I will fix it shortly. Thanks for reviewing. Mel.
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You're most welcome:)
Comment from Zue65
Te post presented the more peaceful part of Daniel and Rachel's life but definitely after this seeming calm, expect a twist of another conflict that will be confronted by the tandem. So, I will wait for the next post to find out what is in store for Daniel and Rachel. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Te post presented the more peaceful part of Daniel and Rachel's life but definitely after this seeming calm, expect a twist of another conflict that will be confronted by the tandem. So, I will wait for the next post to find out what is in store for Daniel and Rachel. Keep writing.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Thank you for your kind words and for taking the time to review.
Comment from Janilou
A good chapter. I enjoyed reading it and felt it gave some good insight into the characters.
Notes:
Why can't I just have time for me. I'll call later." She fussed.
'She fussed' feels like a speech tag which would mean...
Why can't I just have time for me. I'll call later," she fussed.
If it's not intended as a speech tag, perhaps a word or two after it?
Why can't I just have time for me. I'll call later." She fussed with her hair/the button on her sleeve
Or ? IDK. :-). Just a thought.
"I agree, I don't plan to get hung up on the why's
whys ?
Did you know that each and every one of us has dormant caner* cells in our bodies, but not all of us will have cancer?
cancer?
All the best,
Jan
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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A good chapter. I enjoyed reading it and felt it gave some good insight into the characters.
Notes:
Why can't I just have time for me. I'll call later." She fussed.
'She fussed' feels like a speech tag which would mean...
Why can't I just have time for me. I'll call later," she fussed.
If it's not intended as a speech tag, perhaps a word or two after it?
Why can't I just have time for me. I'll call later." She fussed with her hair/the button on her sleeve
Or ? IDK. :-). Just a thought.
"I agree, I don't plan to get hung up on the why's
whys ?
Did you know that each and every one of us has dormant caner* cells in our bodies, but not all of us will have cancer?
cancer?
All the best,
Jan
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, I certainly appreciate your comments and the corrections you mentioned I will get to them in a few minutes.
