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Viewing comments for Chapter 32 "Scene at a Dentist Office (Part 1)"Pons and Ned meet at different locations
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Comment from Spitfire
Again, you capture the language of an unschooled hillbilly.
Also the lifestyle when it comes to caring for teeth.
Check for notes for evil Eddie's interruptions.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Again, you capture the language of an unschooled hillbilly.
Also the lifestyle when it comes to caring for teeth.
Check for notes for evil Eddie's interruptions.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Are you referring to the characters in my notes? What?s with that?
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Looks as if the problem was fixed.
Comment from Susanjohn
HAHA I should tell you..I'm a Dental Hygienist...love this!.. ( on a side note..I had a patient use Ajax to whiten his teeth!) oh boy! enjoyed reading :-)
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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HAHA I should tell you..I'm a Dental Hygienist...love this!.. ( on a side note..I had a patient use Ajax to whiten his teeth!) oh boy! enjoyed reading :-)
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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His that patient Ned?
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lol no..but a kiss'in cousin ;-p
Comment from lyenochka
Well, I hope that Ned HAS teeth still with that kind of dental care. I'm not sure why the dog would ever get a driver's license. But priorities are like that in some families. Another humorous one, Bill.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Well, I hope that Ned HAS teeth still with that kind of dental care. I'm not sure why the dog would ever get a driver's license. But priorities are like that in some families. Another humorous one, Bill.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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I think Ned may be not in-tel-e-gant.
Comment from Ulla
Hahahaha, oh dear. So Ned has never been to a dentist. Dear oh dear. I loved it. The conversation is priceless and the implication is awesome. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Hahahaha, oh dear. So Ned has never been to a dentist. Dear oh dear. I loved it. The conversation is priceless and the implication is awesome. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Thanks, Ulla.
Comment from damommy
Hilarious! The dog went first because he was older, and could have got a driver's license. LOL.
I guess the same toothbrush for all. Eeeew!
That Ned is something else. Always good for a laugh.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Hilarious! The dog went first because he was older, and could have got a driver's license. LOL.
I guess the same toothbrush for all. Eeeew!
That Ned is something else. Always good for a laugh.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Thanks, da
Comment from nomi338
I swear Ned seems to get dumber by the day. I cannot believe that there is anyone under the sun so dumb that the light of day misses him. For him to gain insight he would need a surgeon to surgically implant it and even then his body might reject it as something foreign and unnatural.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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I swear Ned seems to get dumber by the day. I cannot believe that there is anyone under the sun so dumb that the light of day misses him. For him to gain insight he would need a surgeon to surgically implant it and even then his body might reject it as something foreign and unnatural.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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I may need counseling.
Comment from Jo-Anne Hemming
Very easy to visualize this scene. We can see the expression on the face of Pons and can conjure up a picture of Ned with no trouble. I stumbled a bit in reading Ned's words but that would not be a problem if one was hearing the dialogue. Great characters.
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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Very easy to visualize this scene. We can see the expression on the face of Pons and can conjure up a picture of Ned with no trouble. I stumbled a bit in reading Ned's words but that would not be a problem if one was hearing the dialogue. Great characters.
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Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Thanks, Jo-Anne
Comment from judiverse
This is fun, and a great topic, as no one likes going to the dentist. If Ned hasn't graced a dentist's office before, how does he happen to get a notice about a checkup? Funny comments about Barksalot, his having his own room and his age. Pons is such a good straight man. He asks those leading questions, and Ned's answers are always comical. Love Ned's last comment. Dental care back in the day was on an as-need basis, the need usually being a terrible toothache. Ned was lucky if he didn't have that happen. Excellent setting for the two characters. judi
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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This is fun, and a great topic, as no one likes going to the dentist. If Ned hasn't graced a dentist's office before, how does he happen to get a notice about a checkup? Funny comments about Barksalot, his having his own room and his age. Pons is such a good straight man. He asks those leading questions, and Ned's answers are always comical. Love Ned's last comment. Dental care back in the day was on an as-need basis, the need usually being a terrible toothache. Ned was lucky if he didn't have that happen. Excellent setting for the two characters. judi
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Good point about the notice. I?ll make that work better.
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You're very welcome. judi
Comment from apky
All right, I still had a most wonderful read and weekend laugh of the week. You're simpl genius with these two - no other word for it. Unfortunately I'm out of sixes already.
But I'm sure many will still have one to give you - this is outstanding.
BTW, what exactly is meant in these last lines?
Pons: I hope you don't have any cavities.
Ned: Shouldn't. I took a shurer and doused my sweaty places wit rubbin' alkeyhall.
What's a "shurer" here, and how did Ned interpret "cavities" to mean?
Have a grand weekend, Bill.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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All right, I still had a most wonderful read and weekend laugh of the week. You're simpl genius with these two - no other word for it. Unfortunately I'm out of sixes already.
But I'm sure many will still have one to give you - this is outstanding.
BTW, what exactly is meant in these last lines?
Pons: I hope you don't have any cavities.
Ned: Shouldn't. I took a shurer and doused my sweaty places wit rubbin' alkeyhall.
What's a "shurer" here, and how did Ned interpret "cavities" to mean?
Have a grand weekend, Bill.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Shure = shower
He may have interpreted the word as ?scabies? , a rash caused by scratching at mites burrowing in the skin.
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Priceless! Thanks for the enlightenment, Bill.
Comment from bmethner
Good use of dialogue and dialect to create the humor in your piece. It frames an interesting story to be told. The dog's name made me smile. Ned's character develops beautifully through his conversation with Pons
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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Good use of dialogue and dialect to create the humor in your piece. It frames an interesting story to be told. The dog's name made me smile. Ned's character develops beautifully through his conversation with Pons
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Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Thanks, B.
