A Language Primer
3-5-3 contest10 total reviews
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
How Michael I'll give you the 5 for the dramatic presentation wow and I know these things happen but you make it look so real and although things like this happen every day and that's what makes your style so intriguing yet likeable to me. I like what I've seen so far. But there's The one with ombre about the guns. It is just All Black now is this what you are intending to present?
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How Michael I'll give you the 5 for the dramatic presentation wow and I know these things happen but you make it look so real and although things like this happen every day and that's what makes your style so intriguing yet likeable to me. I like what I've seen so far. But there's The one with ombre about the guns. It is just All Black now is this what you are intending to present?
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
Comment from Debbie Pope
What a powerful way to use 14 syllables. I think that I just read the winner of this competition. You say everything with your few words. And, the images and title add so much. By the way, I love the title. When I chose to read it, I knew from the title that I would like the poem. At the time, I did not know just how clever it would prove to be. I believe, however, that I would switch the DON'T and the STOP. The way that it reads, it's too much like DON'T STOP to a cursory reader. Good luck in the competition. I'll be looking for your win.
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What a powerful way to use 14 syllables. I think that I just read the winner of this competition. You say everything with your few words. And, the images and title add so much. By the way, I love the title. When I chose to read it, I knew from the title that I would like the poem. At the time, I did not know just how clever it would prove to be. I believe, however, that I would switch the DON'T and the STOP. The way that it reads, it's too much like DON'T STOP to a cursory reader. Good luck in the competition. I'll be looking for your win.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2018
Comment from Bill Schott
This three-five-three, A Language Primer, has the proper format and makes the point that sexual assault is not lovemaking. It's brutality, fed by the same demons as homicide, and destroys.
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This three-five-three, A Language Primer, has the proper format and makes the point that sexual assault is not lovemaking. It's brutality, fed by the same demons as homicide, and destroys.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2018
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello, well this was very gripping, and what a message. I agree it's no, no other side. You have only used a few words but the poem speaks volumes. I saw no errors, and the picture suited the poem. Thanks for sharing your writing, this is a good entry from the prompt, Ana.
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Hello, well this was very gripping, and what a message. I agree it's no, no other side. You have only used a few words but the poem speaks volumes. I saw no errors, and the picture suited the poem. Thanks for sharing your writing, this is a good entry from the prompt, Ana.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2018
Comment from kittykct
I think it flowed well as well as can be with the limited amount of syllables allowed. Always a challenge. A good picture and relevant subject in our times and the past, unfortunately. Kitty
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I think it flowed well as well as can be with the limited amount of syllables allowed. Always a challenge. A good picture and relevant subject in our times and the past, unfortunately. Kitty
Comment Written 03-Apr-2018
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
Powerful! Powerful! What a heart-wrenching poem to share. This is a solid contender for the 3-5-3 writing prompt and the contest. I wish you the best of luck on this. I am sure many will understand how important this message is.
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Powerful! Powerful! What a heart-wrenching poem to share. This is a solid contender for the 3-5-3 writing prompt and the contest. I wish you the best of luck on this. I am sure many will understand how important this message is.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2018
Comment from Pamusart
This is a good entry for the contest. Good public service announcement. Agree with the message completely. Hopefully the metro movement will change things. I am a chess player and an ex smoker. I was the only female among 200'or more players in the tournament. I ran into all kinds of sexism. One time, I was in the middle of a game and went outside to smoke. Chess requires immense concentrating and critical thinking. I was analyzing the game in my head when this male chess player I knew as an acquaintance walked over. He told me that if I did not have sex with him, he would kill himself. No male chess player has to deal with that. It is Germaine to the metoo movement. Good luck
In the contest. Thank you for sharing
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This is a good entry for the contest. Good public service announcement. Agree with the message completely. Hopefully the metro movement will change things. I am a chess player and an ex smoker. I was the only female among 200'or more players in the tournament. I ran into all kinds of sexism. One time, I was in the middle of a game and went outside to smoke. Chess requires immense concentrating and critical thinking. I was analyzing the game in my head when this male chess player I knew as an acquaintance walked over. He told me that if I did not have sex with him, he would kill himself. No male chess player has to deal with that. It is Germaine to the metoo movement. Good luck
In the contest. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 03-Apr-2018
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Write a 3-5-3 writing prompt.
Your message is powerful and well presented.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
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I think this is a good entry for the Write a 3-5-3 writing prompt.
Your message is powerful and well presented.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 03-Apr-2018
Comment from William Ross
Great on the 3,5,3.. no means no, and don't means don't there is no other meaning or side of story. Good luck and have a great day.
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Great on the 3,5,3.. no means no, and don't means don't there is no other meaning or side of story. Good luck and have a great day.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2018
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A poignant and powerful poem of words here that as you say are crystal clear and there is no mistake made in rape, the guilty know that, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
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A poignant and powerful poem of words here that as you say are crystal clear and there is no mistake made in rape, the guilty know that, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Apr-2018
