Perennials of War
Viewing comments for Chapter 71 "Chapter Einundzwanzig part vier"Is Anderson a gallant knight? Can he recover Shan
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Comment from judiverse
Definitely worth six stars! Anderson is a prince. So far he's done nothing to indicate that he'll ever be knocked off that white horse. Despite all Shana's hesitation, he's still going to care for her, but it's up to her to resolve her feelings about the Jew-gentile issue. She has been brought up in such a traditional family. Maybe her father will finally comes to grips with the fact that Shan's capable of making her own decisions. I think that by going to Texas with Anderson, Shana has decided to decide. Great story, and excellent work with characterization in this part. judi
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
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Definitely worth six stars! Anderson is a prince. So far he's done nothing to indicate that he'll ever be knocked off that white horse. Despite all Shana's hesitation, he's still going to care for her, but it's up to her to resolve her feelings about the Jew-gentile issue. She has been brought up in such a traditional family. Maybe her father will finally comes to grips with the fact that Shan's capable of making her own decisions. I think that by going to Texas with Anderson, Shana has decided to decide. Great story, and excellent work with characterization in this part. judi
Comment Written 02-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
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Thank you for the kind review. Anderson has his work cut out for him and Shana is afraid of disappointing her father.
Comment from Beck Fenton
As always, I find myself ready to nudge Shana aside and ravish Anderson myself. No small feat for a septuagenarian.
I'll mind my manners and give her a chance to see if Anderson is the one and I'll be enjoying the ride right alongside her.
Keep posting more, please!
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
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As always, I find myself ready to nudge Shana aside and ravish Anderson myself. No small feat for a septuagenarian.
I'll mind my manners and give her a chance to see if Anderson is the one and I'll be enjoying the ride right alongside her.
Keep posting more, please!
Comment Written 02-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
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You had me laughing at this review. Thank you for making my day. LOL
Comment from apky
The reader was really pulled in by the various scenes in this chapter.
It was moving to see the feelings and connection between Shana and her family, including the grandmother who is the owner of the painting that is the cause of Anderson and Shana meeting, and the dangers lurking over her head. I'd missed this part of the book and now I understand a lot more than I did when I jumped aboard and started reading your story.
Well done.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
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The reader was really pulled in by the various scenes in this chapter.
It was moving to see the feelings and connection between Shana and her family, including the grandmother who is the owner of the painting that is the cause of Anderson and Shana meeting, and the dangers lurking over her head. I'd missed this part of the book and now I understand a lot more than I did when I jumped aboard and started reading your story.
Well done.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
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I need to become a fans of yours. I am sooooo sorry I have not done that. PLease forgive me. Thank you for the kind review,
Comment from rtobaygo
Good morning, Barbara
Enjoyed the continuation. The flow dialogue and characters interactions were spot on, Love the interaction between Anderson and Shana, how they guard their true feelings towards one another, which at times places them in awkward situations Well done.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
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Good morning, Barbara
Enjoyed the continuation. The flow dialogue and characters interactions were spot on, Love the interaction between Anderson and Shana, how they guard their true feelings towards one another, which at times places them in awkward situations Well done.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
Comment Written 02-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
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Their feelings for each other are going to cause more strife. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Barbara,
So Benjamin initially has the wrong end of the stick but accepts the situation, sort of...
Benjamin stood and went to his daughter. - you don't really need to say he stood as it would be inferred by the 'went to'.
I noticed in a previous chapter and again here that you do a lot of talking about people's eyes meeting, or as a device for emotion.
[Anderson's eyes met Benjamin's / Benjamin stared at his daughter / His eyes met Eliana's / Benjamin's eyes met Anderson's / Eliana's eyes widened / Shana's eyes met his / as tears welled in her eyes / moved her head so their eyes met.
it may be something that would be picked up on. Maybe look for some other alternative interactions.
your well-being is more valuable - wellbeing can be a single word.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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Hi Barbara,
So Benjamin initially has the wrong end of the stick but accepts the situation, sort of...
Benjamin stood and went to his daughter. - you don't really need to say he stood as it would be inferred by the 'went to'.
I noticed in a previous chapter and again here that you do a lot of talking about people's eyes meeting, or as a device for emotion.
[Anderson's eyes met Benjamin's / Benjamin stared at his daughter / His eyes met Eliana's / Benjamin's eyes met Anderson's / Eliana's eyes widened / Shana's eyes met his / as tears welled in her eyes / moved her head so their eyes met.
it may be something that would be picked up on. Maybe look for some other alternative interactions.
your well-being is more valuable - wellbeing can be a single word.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2018
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I needed time to make the corrections and not make bigger mistakes. Thank you for the help. I appreciate. I will attempt to not have them look at each other so much.
Comment from Sankey
Great chapter and pleased the parents are prepared to let her go and be safe. I suspect we are either at the end or getting very close. Hoping there is still more. No spags.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
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Great chapter and pleased the parents are prepared to let her go and be safe. I suspect we are either at the end or getting very close. Hoping there is still more. No spags.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
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Thank you for the kind family.
Comment from Marisela Contona
I like this it flows nice. You have good word choses. Keep writing, you have great skill. I look forward to reading more of your work
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
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I like this it flows nice. You have good word choses. Keep writing, you have great skill. I look forward to reading more of your work
Comment Written 01-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb
I like Anderson is finally reveals some of his loving emotions for Shana ,now what I'm hoping for Shana to keep exploring their realinship and for goodness sake go with him or not
Gert
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
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Hello Barb
I like Anderson is finally reveals some of his loving emotions for Shana ,now what I'm hoping for Shana to keep exploring their realinship and for goodness sake go with him or not
Gert
Comment Written 01-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
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I hope so too. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome Barb
Gert
Comment from Sasha
Excellent work with this chapter and done with such style and grace. I cannot imagine Shana not beginning to have feelings for Anderson... I have them and he doesn't even know I exist. I enjoyed this chapter very much.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
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Excellent work with this chapter and done with such style and grace. I cannot imagine Shana not beginning to have feelings for Anderson... I have them and he doesn't even know I exist. I enjoyed this chapter very much.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
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Thank you for the generous review.
Comment from royowen
A very sensitively written and intuitive chapter, that's the way a man should love a woman, a tight rein on her security, and light hold on her heart. I love the way you handled this episode Barbarw, a good feel to it. Well done, blessings, Roy
Typo "You(r) family loves you, and wants the best for you."
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
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A very sensitively written and intuitive chapter, that's the way a man should love a woman, a tight rein on her security, and light hold on her heart. I love the way you handled this episode Barbarw, a good feel to it. Well done, blessings, Roy
Typo "You(r) family loves you, and wants the best for you."
Comment Written 01-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
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Thank you for the generous review. I wanted it to come across that way and was afraid I didn't make it.
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Well done Barbara
