The perfect line
A Kyrielle contest entry14 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This kyrielle, The Perfect Line, has the right format and seems to have gotten from beginning to end with no problems that can't be erased and replaced.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
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This kyrielle, The Perfect Line, has the right format and seems to have gotten from beginning to end with no problems that can't be erased and replaced.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
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Hi Bill, Thanks for reading my perfect line I am pleased and surprised to tell you it came in equal second place so that was a great thrill. Many Cheers for your support Christine
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent Kyrielle poem and entry for the contest
with a solid repeat line and very good rhymes.
The endless search for the perfect line,
perhaps you've finally found it. Time will tell.
The art work is a bit distracting to me, but the poem is excellent.
Best wishes in the contest.
RS
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
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This is an excellent Kyrielle poem and entry for the contest
with a solid repeat line and very good rhymes.
The endless search for the perfect line,
perhaps you've finally found it. Time will tell.
The art work is a bit distracting to me, but the poem is excellent.
Best wishes in the contest.
RS
Comment Written 01-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
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Hi RS, Thanks for your review and sorry for the artwork but I loved it and thought it may be OK but I realise it was a bit distracting so won't do that again LOL. I was pleased to gain an equal second with other entries so that was a lovely surprise so thanks for your best wishes they worked Cheers Christine
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
Writer I certainly hope so too that you penned the
perfect line. Nice poem beautiful writings nice picture to accommodate it nice reading I enjoyed it and I thank you so much for sharing and if you find out that you have not been the perfect line and keep on trying until you get it LOL
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
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Writer I certainly hope so too that you penned the
perfect line. Nice poem beautiful writings nice picture to accommodate it nice reading I enjoyed it and I thank you so much for sharing and if you find out that you have not been the perfect line and keep on trying until you get it LOL
Comment Written 01-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
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Hi Mary, Thank you and it turns out this made second place with some others so close and I will kepp trying they are fun and challenging LOL but have also entered the April daily poem contest so will be busy for the next 29 days. hope I can do it Cheers Christine
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I hope you do too. You deserve it. Now dont stress yourself out.
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I hope you do too. You deserve it. Now dont stress yourself out.
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I hope you do too. You deserve it. Now dont stress yourself out.
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I hope you do too. You deserve it. Now dont stress yourself out.
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I hope you do too. You deserve it. Now dont stress yourself out.
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I hope you do too. You deserve it. Now dont stress yourself out.
Comment from Angela Post
I think you've penned the perfect line!
It is quite an adorable kyrielle that you have written.
It was easy to read and felt like I was following a train of thought.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
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I think you've penned the perfect line!
It is quite an adorable kyrielle that you have written.
It was easy to read and felt like I was following a train of thought.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
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Hi Angela, Thanks for your review and I am pleased to tell you it came equal second so that was a bonus, I enjoyed fhe challenge and it is a nice poetry style to write Cheers Christine
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Kyrielle poem with a perfect repeating line that keeps the poem together while you searching for more perfect lines. We cab depend on the Muse to help us out.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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A very well-written Kyrielle poem with a perfect repeating line that keeps the poem together while you searching for more perfect lines. We cab depend on the Muse to help us out.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Hi Sandra, Thanks so much and yes ot is fun to try these styles and hopefully it will do OK Oh for the Perfect line LOL Cheers my friend Christine
Comment from Sugarray77
This is a great entry for the Kyrielle poetry contest. You developed a good verse with a cute lilt and cadence. It flowed well and met the syllable count. Well done.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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This is a great entry for the Kyrielle poetry contest. You developed a good verse with a cute lilt and cadence. It flowed well and met the syllable count. Well done.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Hi Sugarray77 Thank you for your review it was fun to have a go so who knows Cheers
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 'Write a Kyrielle' writing prompt.
Your verse about writing the perfect line within your poem is clever and well done.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the 'Write a Kyrielle' writing prompt.
Your verse about writing the perfect line within your poem is clever and well done.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 30-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Hi Sharon Thanks so much for your review I enjoy these challlenges and hope it meets requirements A bit of fun to try Cheers
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello!
Creative and fun! These strict syllabic forms of poetry are so challenging, and you have met that challenge...except with the following line: 'You know my memory's getting slow." This line contains 9 syllables. Easy fix. And still plenty of time to do so...
Best Wishes!
diane
I readjusted my score...but look at this line: Well (We'll)? write them down before they go, I believe you are chatting with your Muses, so I'm thinking, "We'll"...Please accept my apologies if I misread the line...
Take Care!
diane
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Hello!
Creative and fun! These strict syllabic forms of poetry are so challenging, and you have met that challenge...except with the following line: 'You know my memory's getting slow." This line contains 9 syllables. Easy fix. And still plenty of time to do so...
Best Wishes!
diane
I readjusted my score...but look at this line: Well (We'll)? write them down before they go, I believe you are chatting with your Muses, so I'm thinking, "We'll"...Please accept my apologies if I misread the line...
Take Care!
diane
Comment Written 30-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Hi Mrs KT Thanks for your review and picking up that syllable I have made a change and hopefully it now is correct Cheers
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Wonderful!
Best wishes!
diane
Comment from meeshu
very good Kyrrielle. should do well in the contest.
as writers love to talk and write about writing.
great symmetry in your rhymes and use of last line
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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very good Kyrrielle. should do well in the contest.
as writers love to talk and write about writing.
great symmetry in your rhymes and use of last line
Comment Written 30-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Hi meeshu Thank you for you review I do aporeciate your time and comnents Cheers
Comment from Swampfox1
That picture you posted is like super distracting and I can not read because of the flashing twisting rolling lines. Good luck in the contest. I think you stand a good chance. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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That picture you posted is like super distracting and I can not read because of the flashing twisting rolling lines. Good luck in the contest. I think you stand a good chance. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Hi Swampfox1 Thank you for your review and I am sorry fir the distracting visual lines I have used I hope my words made up for that and thanks fir your comments much appreciated Cheers
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you're welcome.