This Time - That Time 2
Viewing comments for Chapter 39 "Joe is Angry!"Veronica is sent back again
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Comment from apky
I like Rosie's stubborn nature, standing up for her rights, sto to speak. And I like the way Joe formulates his: Hear me out, please.
There's something so sweet in their relationship and the way they argue with each other is so adorable. Really civilized, if you take into account how we today throw curses and glasses at each other in an argument. Or evenfists.
Well done, Sandra.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018
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I like Rosie's stubborn nature, standing up for her rights, sto to speak. And I like the way Joe formulates his: Hear me out, please.
There's something so sweet in their relationship and the way they argue with each other is so adorable. Really civilized, if you take into account how we today throw curses and glasses at each other in an argument. Or evenfists.
Well done, Sandra.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018
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Absolutely! I think the difference between the lower-classes to the upper-class (apart from the wealth) is that where Rosie can give Joe a good talking to, whereas the upper-class women like Gwendolyn, had to do as they were told. Hmm, I would want both, the money and being able to shout back! lol. Thank you so much, Aki, for your lovely review. Joe and Rosie married for love, not because they were told to, and that's what makes their relationship so good. (Do you really throw glasses??? LOL) Thank you so very much for the 6!! Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
Well, not really, but I've seen my sister-in-law smash many a baccarat crystal snifters - and she is a countess!
Comment from rwilliam
WOW, WOW, WOW! What a fun chapter. I really liked the way you had to 'pull teeth' to get the whole idea out to his wife. That's great writing. I found myself wanting to tell her to shut up and listen. Tee hee.
This story is coming along so nicely. Just wonderful. :-)
P.S. That picture is perfect!
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018
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WOW, WOW, WOW! What a fun chapter. I really liked the way you had to 'pull teeth' to get the whole idea out to his wife. That's great writing. I found myself wanting to tell her to shut up and listen. Tee hee.
This story is coming along so nicely. Just wonderful. :-)
P.S. That picture is perfect!
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018
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What a wonderful review, Rebecca! Thank you so much. I love the 'pull teeth' expression, I might 'borrow' that! lol. Thank you so much for the 6 stars, my friend. You are always so encouraging with you reviews. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from frogbook
Yea! That was a good story how everything came around the right way. Good place to leave the story for the reader to be waiting for more.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018
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Yea! That was a good story how everything came around the right way. Good place to leave the story for the reader to be waiting for more.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018
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Thank you, Joanne, for your lovely review. Now to work on Sir John! Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra. xxx
Comment from Joy Graham
Hi Sandra,
I enjoy your dialect. It makes it all so real. I didn't realize the albino boy was Sir John's nephew. I thought Gwendolyn was his wife. It makes better sense now that I know. I hope the plan works out as I can't wait to read about the chocolate making.
In your list of characters you have, Gwendolyn and Gwendolyne. Which is it?
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Hi Sandra,
I enjoy your dialect. It makes it all so real. I didn't realize the albino boy was Sir John's nephew. I thought Gwendolyn was his wife. It makes better sense now that I know. I hope the plan works out as I can't wait to read about the chocolate making.
In your list of characters you have, Gwendolyn and Gwendolyne. Which is it?
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Joy xx
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Thank you, Joy! I never noticed that I'd added an e on the end of Gwendolyn. It shouldn't have one. I've removed it now. The story of Gwendolyn and Francis' father starts in part 19.... It's quite a sad story. The father doesn't even know he has a son. There is another part where Joe was inside Veronica's son, Michael, in her time, and he'd never tasted chocolate until Michael had some. Later, when Veronica realises what has happened, she teaches Joe how to make chocolate. (this is while he is an 18 month old Michael! lol. The recipe is in that part. It's good, too! I found it on Google. Do you know, when I start explaining things, I can't believe how much I've read and written about that time. Thanks for another lovely review, my friend. Sandra xxx
Comment from Swampfox1
The dialect is sort of hard to contend with when I first started reading the chapter but gradually got used to it. That was the biggest thing. It takes a while to get used to it and it certainly makes the reading go a little slower at first. The story is good. I like the layout. With the dialect, it is hard to determine if there are any errors or not so I will say there aren't. Good job. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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The dialect is sort of hard to contend with when I first started reading the chapter but gradually got used to it. That was the biggest thing. It takes a while to get used to it and it certainly makes the reading go a little slower at first. The story is good. I like the layout. With the dialect, it is hard to determine if there are any errors or not so I will say there aren't. Good job. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Yes, I can understand you finding it difficult, We have several different dialects in England, and some I find difficult to fathom. Going back two hundred years, it took me ages to research some of the Cornish dialect, even though I have family living in Cornwall and the dialect hasn't changed overly much. Thank you for persevering with the story, and for the review. I appreciate that. Sandra xx
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You're welcome. I appreciate the research you did I know that can be very painstaking to do. I do research also and it isn't too easy , at times.
Comment from karenina
Your writing is easy on the reader...things flow evenly and even your dialect is not a distraction once one is immersed in the story at hand. Congrats on having a seal of quality....I'm new but hear these are quite prestigious nd not at all an easy "get"---
Good for you!
Karenina
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Your writing is easy on the reader...things flow evenly and even your dialect is not a distraction once one is immersed in the story at hand. Congrats on having a seal of quality....I'm new but hear these are quite prestigious nd not at all an easy "get"---
Good for you!
Karenina
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Thank you so much, Karenina, (such a lovely name.) I'm so pleased you enjoyed my story, And thanks for the congrats! That is so nice of you. xxx Sandra
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I'm newish...I was reading about the levels one can achieve....and I know getting this prestige is no cakewalk!---Karenina
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It is hard, but worth striving for. The SoQ I received was for my children's illustrated book with thirteen stories all in rhyme. It was picked up by a publisher after I received this award. Some of the stories are in my portfolio. Hedgerow Capers. xxx
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It is hard, but worth striving for. The SoQ I received was for my children's illustrated book with thirteen stories all in rhyme. It was picked up by a publisher after I received this award. Some of the stories are in my portfolio. Hedgerow Capers. xxx
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Congrats! How nice to have a publisher pick you up! Will you remember us when you're Oprah's book club pick? She SHOULD select a
children's book you know!--Karenina
Comment from royowen
O wow! That was hard work, and I'll bet it was hard work navigating your writing skills around that conversation between Joe andvRosie, of course, the though of Rosie being somewhere near her mum and prospects of making some money with the chocolate gives a hopeful aura. Plus the character Rosie has a soft heart really, well done, Sandra, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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O wow! That was hard work, and I'll bet it was hard work navigating your writing skills around that conversation between Joe andvRosie, of course, the though of Rosie being somewhere near her mum and prospects of making some money with the chocolate gives a hopeful aura. Plus the character Rosie has a soft heart really, well done, Sandra, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Hi, Roy. I'm glad you could see Rosie's softer side, because that is one of her finer characteristics, which I hope to bring out more, soon. Thank you so much, for this lovely review, my friend, I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. Big hugs. Sandra xxxx
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Welcome Sandra,
Comment from JDRBAR
Good, good, good. This is gonna get interesting. I've only known one albino in my lifetime. Little girl. Both parents black. Her hair was curly of course, but softer curls and a red cast to her hair. I can't remember her eyes. You'd think I would, wouldn't you?
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Good, good, good. This is gonna get interesting. I've only known one albino in my lifetime. Little girl. Both parents black. Her hair was curly of course, but softer curls and a red cast to her hair. I can't remember her eyes. You'd think I would, wouldn't you?
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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The child's eyes were probably pale blue, which is probably why you never noticed them.Brown eyes are the common colour for dark people. The reddish tint is also due to the albino in her. It's quite interesting researching these things for the story. Back in 1846, albino's were regarded as something evil. I'm sure in earlier years they would have been cast as witches. Thank you so much, my friend, for the lovely review.I'm so pleased you enjoyed this part. Big hugs, my friend. xxx Sandra
Comment from Artasylum
Hey sandramicthell... I love timetraveller tales that bounce to different dimensions. great read. fast read. and looking forward to future travels. yours, diana
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Hey sandramicthell... I love timetraveller tales that bounce to different dimensions. great read. fast read. and looking forward to future travels. yours, diana
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Hi, thank you so much for your lovely review, Diana. I'm so pleased you enjoyed the read, Sandra xxx
Comment from aryr
The amount of dialogue was just fine Sandra. It was indeed needed to have the chapter flow comfortably for reading. I thought for sure things would come to blow in the beginning with Rosie refusing to listen and Joe determined to make her. After she realized the whole plan she was pleased but also determined to go with him in the morning to see Sir John. You did a great job plotting this out, it created a hint of suspense and a whole lot of anticipation. Very well done, thanks for sharing, my friend.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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The amount of dialogue was just fine Sandra. It was indeed needed to have the chapter flow comfortably for reading. I thought for sure things would come to blow in the beginning with Rosie refusing to listen and Joe determined to make her. After she realized the whole plan she was pleased but also determined to go with him in the morning to see Sir John. You did a great job plotting this out, it created a hint of suspense and a whole lot of anticipation. Very well done, thanks for sharing, my friend.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Thank you so much, Alie. Sometimes I do worry that people might find it too much, but it is needed or it would sound wrong. I'm so pleased you are fine with it. Sir John's turn next!! LOL. Big hugs, my friend. Sandra xxx
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LOL, go get him. You are so welcome Sandra, it is coming along very well my friend.
