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Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks how Professor Jam-mayka, cybernetic jellyfish expert, realized, his creation rose from the saline tank, that he had finally bridged the span between marine life and technology, and Schmelly has started duplicating himself, unending to the cause of losses; well said, well done, KEEP WRITING, INSPIRE CHANGING -DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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This speaks how Professor Jam-mayka, cybernetic jellyfish expert, realized, his creation rose from the saline tank, that he had finally bridged the span between marine life and technology, and Schmelly has started duplicating himself, unending to the cause of losses; well said, well done, KEEP WRITING, INSPIRE CHANGING -DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thanks, ALD
Comment from Swampfox1
Very good indeed. A jelly fish android. An evil one at that, and one that kills to get enery. The world is in danger. Did you prepare for that? It flows very well, it reads well and it held my interest, I found no mistake. Your German accent is almost there. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Very good indeed. A jelly fish android. An evil one at that, and one that kills to get enery. The world is in danger. Did you prepare for that? It flows very well, it reads well and it held my interest, I found no mistake. Your German accent is almost there. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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German through a jaw wired shut. : )
Comment from royowen
I think this probably reflects our modern technology, we could be creating an anomaly in our delving into things beyond our ken to understand. A most imaginative creation here Bill, I must admit I've often thought of this, man can be quite arrogant in his progress. Well done, an excellent post my friend, like the name Schmelly, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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I think this probably reflects our modern technology, we could be creating an anomaly in our delving into things beyond our ken to understand. A most imaginative creation here Bill, I must admit I've often thought of this, man can be quite arrogant in his progress. Well done, an excellent post my friend, like the name Schmelly, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thanks, Roy, for the excellent review. Bill
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Most welcome
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hey Bill, you have the beginnings of a good fantasy fiction here, as Shmelly could multiply and end up giving 'aliens' a run for there money. I liked your story, it is original and entreating. I especially like the way you can capture someone's idiosyncrasies in one sentence:
"Schmelly! Wazzit zat zu az doone?" screamed the jaw-wired scientist. Just great!!
Thanks for sharing your story. Ana.
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Hey Bill, you have the beginnings of a good fantasy fiction here, as Shmelly could multiply and end up giving 'aliens' a run for there money. I liked your story, it is original and entreating. I especially like the way you can capture someone's idiosyncrasies in one sentence:
"Schmelly! Wazzit zat zu az doone?" screamed the jaw-wired scientist. Just great!!
Thanks for sharing your story. Ana.
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Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thanks, Ana. I'm finishing up my jellyfish worlds and I just need one more. Then -- I'll need you to tell me what animal to do next.
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I've got my thinking hat on, Ana.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Well, it may be short, Bill, but you covered a lot of action with your words. I was engaged from start to finish. I like the made-up names. The action seems believable, too. Your picture is awesome & perfect for your well-chosen words that made this story fun to read. Thanks for sharing. Jan
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Well, it may be short, Bill, but you covered a lot of action with your words. I was engaged from start to finish. I like the made-up names. The action seems believable, too. Your picture is awesome & perfect for your well-chosen words that made this story fun to read. Thanks for sharing. Jan
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Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thanks, Jan, for the positive review. Bill
