My Brothers' Keeper
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Nutrition and Conversation"Rachel feels responsible for her brother.
4 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Oh, though I'm happy she's rescued by the best possible person in the world, I'm sad that she is preparing to go. This has been a life change experience. I would think a relationship between the two should be blossoming...
reply by the author on 26-May-2021
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Oh, though I'm happy she's rescued by the best possible person in the world, I'm sad that she is preparing to go. This has been a life change experience. I would think a relationship between the two should be blossoming...
Comment Written 26-May-2021
reply by the author on 26-May-2021
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Thank you so very much Helen for reading, reviewing and your great comments. I will never tell, lol. Hugs.
Comment from BeasPeas
I like how your story is evolving. Your two characters introduced so far are developing nicely and we get to know them quickly through circumstances. Of course, Gray was a hit right from the start. I like how you have filled in the background information for your story through the conversation. Nice Job. Marilyn
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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I like how your story is evolving. Your two characters introduced so far are developing nicely and we get to know them quickly through circumstances. Of course, Gray was a hit right from the start. I like how you have filled in the background information for your story through the conversation. Nice Job. Marilyn
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thank you Marilyn, I am glad that you are enjoying the story. I agree Gray is rather special.
Comment from Pantygynt
This raised a point I had never considered before. Native Americans have there tribe so presumably have tribal loyalties. as I understand it the tribes were nomadic and so if their peregrinations straddled the border some could end up as US citizens and some as Canadian dependent presumably on place of birth and the "nationality" of their parents. How on earth do authorities in both countries sort this administrative nightmare out? This question is in no way intended as a criticism of this story. I am genuinely interested in the answer.
"Now that you are done your soup," Should this not be "Now that you are done with your soup"?
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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This raised a point I had never considered before. Native Americans have there tribe so presumably have tribal loyalties. as I understand it the tribes were nomadic and so if their peregrinations straddled the border some could end up as US citizens and some as Canadian dependent presumably on place of birth and the "nationality" of their parents. How on earth do authorities in both countries sort this administrative nightmare out? This question is in no way intended as a criticism of this story. I am genuinely interested in the answer.
"Now that you are done your soup," Should this not be "Now that you are done with your soup"?
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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That is a great question. Many years ago, long before my time each tribe had to be registered and any birth or deaths. It has been ongoing since it was first introduced I believe in the late 1800s. Until 9-11-2001 A high number of natives were able to switch back and forth between countries, after of course it all changed. I for one am glad that I don't have to be in the immigration office trying to figure it out. I was smart enough to get my American nursing license and my green card when I came over, we shall see if I ever decide to become a citizen, for now I am happy being a Canadian living her legally. Thanks for catching that slip and will make the change in a moment. Thanks for the question and the review.
Comment from Sylvia Kennedy
You exhibited s good effort in your literary writing composition. I appreciate your choice of topics. I am an Eskimo, and many Native American Indians are Original Alaskan Eskimos, but are not exhibiting the force to use with dignity and respect our proper Ethnicity. Now, as to grammar, you have several run-on sentences, and you are not separating properly name or topics which can and did confuse me, as your reader. When you employ yourself to correct your clarity of expressly differentiating your topics and characters, separately, you will have unCONFOUNDED, HA, HA, HA me.
Happy Easter.
SK
AKA
KLUTZY BLOSSOMS
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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You exhibited s good effort in your literary writing composition. I appreciate your choice of topics. I am an Eskimo, and many Native American Indians are Original Alaskan Eskimos, but are not exhibiting the force to use with dignity and respect our proper Ethnicity. Now, as to grammar, you have several run-on sentences, and you are not separating properly name or topics which can and did confuse me, as your reader. When you employ yourself to correct your clarity of expressly differentiating your topics and characters, separately, you will have unCONFOUNDED, HA, HA, HA me.
Happy Easter.
SK
AKA
KLUTZY BLOSSOMS
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thank you for reviewing and your kind comments, I am glad that you hold strong to your heritage, that is so important. I will re-read and see about breaking this up a little.
