May Our Light Shine For You
Inspired by Matthew 5:16 (spaceship format)19 total reviews
Comment from robina1978
Is the artwork yours? I like it a lot and it complements your poem very well. I vaguely remember you inventing this lovely form. I think I might try it one time, if that is OK. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Is the artwork yours? I like it a lot and it complements your poem very well. I vaguely remember you inventing this lovely form. I think I might try it one time, if that is OK. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the nice review, Ine. Try one, you might find it a fun exercise.
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Beautifully said. We need to be a light in an ever darkening world so show the way to true fulfillment and happiness. The world can offer us nothing. Only God and His Son can satisfy. Roxanna
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Beautifully said. We need to be a light in an ever darkening world so show the way to true fulfillment and happiness. The world can offer us nothing. Only God and His Son can satisfy. Roxanna
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the nice review, Roxanna.
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
Very lovely! Thank you for also including the Bible verse, Matthew 5:16 to accompany your poem. After I read your poem I started humming a childhood tune, "This little light of mine, I'm gonna let it shine."
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Very lovely! Thank you for also including the Bible verse, Matthew 5:16 to accompany your poem. After I read your poem I started humming a childhood tune, "This little light of mine, I'm gonna let it shine."
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the nice review, Cindy.
Comment from Pamusart
Did you consider entering this into the Spiritual poetry contest? It is a spiritual poem urging us all to bring light to others and to the world. Your message is very clear. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Did you consider entering this into the Spiritual poetry contest? It is a spiritual poem urging us all to bring light to others and to the world. Your message is very clear. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the nice review. I appreciate it.
Comment from Air Spirit
I am unfamiliar with the format - so my input is solely based on content, message, and style. I love the message.. It was uplifting and the spiritual principles you spoke of are so important.. I just wasn't real fond of the verbiage used. I don't think the language complimented or enhanced the message - but thank you for reminding me how important it is to embrace the message and share the light/message.
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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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I am unfamiliar with the format - so my input is solely based on content, message, and style. I love the message.. It was uplifting and the spiritual principles you spoke of are so important.. I just wasn't real fond of the verbiage used. I don't think the language complimented or enhanced the message - but thank you for reminding me how important it is to embrace the message and share the light/message.
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Comment Written 27-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the your review, air. Welcome to fanstory.
Comment from rama devi
Nice poetic response to the biblical quote (nice quote), Patricia. The Representative is beautiful! The tone is sincere and prayerful. Just a couple of spag suggestions for smoother flow and grammatical accuracy (optional):
Each
day as we
walk with You, our dear Lord(,)
You're lighting our paths along the way,(; or .)
You keep our lights shining to lead others to You,
so they(,) in turn(,) will let their lights shine
so many see Your light(,or --)
then come to
You.
With above sugegstions:
Each
day as we
walk with You, our dear Lord,
You're lighting our paths along the way.
You keep our lights shining to lead others to You,
so they, in turn, will let their lights shine
so many see Your light--
then come to
You.
Blessings,
rd
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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Nice poetic response to the biblical quote (nice quote), Patricia. The Representative is beautiful! The tone is sincere and prayerful. Just a couple of spag suggestions for smoother flow and grammatical accuracy (optional):
Each
day as we
walk with You, our dear Lord(,)
You're lighting our paths along the way,(; or .)
You keep our lights shining to lead others to You,
so they(,) in turn(,) will let their lights shine
so many see Your light(,or --)
then come to
You.
With above sugegstions:
Each
day as we
walk with You, our dear Lord,
You're lighting our paths along the way.
You keep our lights shining to lead others to You,
so they, in turn, will let their lights shine
so many see Your light--
then come to
You.
Blessings,
rd
Comment Written 27-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the nice review, Rama.
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Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks a spiritual wish - may our light shine for our Lord, God's Only Son as we go clearly under His Light and when we all see Lord's Light we'll come to Lord; well worded, well done. KEEP WRITING, INSPIRE CHANGING -DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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This speaks a spiritual wish - may our light shine for our Lord, God's Only Son as we go clearly under His Light and when we all see Lord's Light we'll come to Lord; well worded, well done. KEEP WRITING, INSPIRE CHANGING -DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 27-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the nice review, Dr Al
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I love your spaceship format Patricia, and your words are faithful and nurturing. A beautiful prayer-like write for this coming weekend, enjoy your Easter, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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I love your spaceship format Patricia, and your words are faithful and nurturing. A beautiful prayer-like write for this coming weekend, enjoy your Easter, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the nice review, Dolly.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a great presentation Patricia. I enjoyed the colors, the picture, & your awesome message. Great job. Your invented format worked well with this poem. Jan
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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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This is a great presentation Patricia. I enjoyed the colors, the picture, & your awesome message. Great job. Your invented format worked well with this poem. Jan
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Comment Written 27-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the nice review, Jan.
