Haiku and Senryu Suites
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "The Ourobouros"Book of Haiku, Senryu & Lanturne Suites
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Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The work reminisces the existence of a nexus between the observed friction in variables and the prevalence of entropy in any given system.
The work highlights how this ambiguity of breaking and building predispose order and chaos.
The work earns its texture through the use of rhymes oxymoron, assonance and alliteration.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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The work reminisces the existence of a nexus between the observed friction in variables and the prevalence of entropy in any given system.
The work highlights how this ambiguity of breaking and building predispose order and chaos.
The work earns its texture through the use of rhymes oxymoron, assonance and alliteration.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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A distinct pleasure to receive your wonderful review. Very detailed information, And accurately stated.
A pleasure to write with you here
Blessings,
Brother Badger
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Keep on flourishing!
Comment from Pamusart
I am really having to think about this one. It would help if I knew what it who an Ourobouros is. Without knowing that, the poem does not make sense. Maybe add a note? Thank you for sharing. Or maybe you defined it in the last phrase. Your poem is chaotic which is what you are trying to portray. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2018
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I am really having to think about this one. It would help if I knew what it who an Ourobouros is. Without knowing that, the poem does not make sense. Maybe add a note? Thank you for sharing. Or maybe you defined it in the last phrase. Your poem is chaotic which is what you are trying to portray. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 23-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2018
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Thank you honey really appreciate your comments. In my portfolio, there is a piece title d,
,"Ouroburos : ,Fact or Fiction?"
And it has a detailed explanation I went back in included the notes with this to explain the Ouroburos.
Thank you so much for your comments pleasure and then under to write with you here.
Blessings Brother Badger
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Thank you
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
An unusual write with chaos and order having a conflict of interest at the crux of this poem. The artwork sends a shiver, a bit like a strange phenomena unhinging your foundations. Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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An unusual write with chaos and order having a conflict of interest at the crux of this poem. The artwork sends a shiver, a bit like a strange phenomena unhinging your foundations. Love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Thanks again, I really appreciate your time and perspective
Brother Badger
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello, lovely word choices, I liked your poem and the artwork you've chosen to accompany it is beautiful in a confronting sort of way. I have no suggestion for improvement, I found your writing quite complex, but for me personally, it spoke of the interplay between order and disorder. A flammable variable in most systems, whether it's technologies, or animals and plants. This dynamic allows for anomalies to occur, '...the friction in between...' and in these anomalies is the opportunity for evolution and change. Probably way off the mark, but poetry speaks to different people in a variety of ways. I liked thinking about yours and thanks for sharing it, Ana.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Hello, lovely word choices, I liked your poem and the artwork you've chosen to accompany it is beautiful in a confronting sort of way. I have no suggestion for improvement, I found your writing quite complex, but for me personally, it spoke of the interplay between order and disorder. A flammable variable in most systems, whether it's technologies, or animals and plants. This dynamic allows for anomalies to occur, '...the friction in between...' and in these anomalies is the opportunity for evolution and change. Probably way off the mark, but poetry speaks to different people in a variety of ways. I liked thinking about yours and thanks for sharing it, Ana.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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You have given me a very nice and detailed review, and actually pointed out some connections that I was not aware of.
I really appreciate your detailes review.
Blessings,
Brother Badger
