Attitude Adjustment Needed
2nd Place Winner: Diamante Contest Entry40 total reviews
Comment from F Scott Hafner
I don't understand form well enough to judge compliance - but your words convey a clear and timely message that most of us could benefit from. Excellent work.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2018
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I don't understand form well enough to judge compliance - but your words convey a clear and timely message that most of us could benefit from. Excellent work.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2018
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Hello Frank,
So pleased you enjoyed my poetic offering.
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review...
Comment from RGstar
Good reflected attributes here. I like this form of short poem. Though it can be like a dictionary because of what the form demands, it can be an attractive poem, and you have done well here.
Wishing you good luck with the outcome.
Best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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Good reflected attributes here. I like this form of short poem. Though it can be like a dictionary because of what the form demands, it can be an attractive poem, and you have done well here.
Wishing you good luck with the outcome.
Best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 22-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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Hello Friend,
I enjoyed penning this particular diamante. Not as easy as they appear, but satisfying if the effect can be arrived at without seeming forced.
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review...
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
I am really becoming a fan of the Diamante poetry style. What a great topic to write about. I see apathy as a teacher every day and it's disheartening. I still strive to care and your poem is encouraging to me. Thanks. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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I am really becoming a fan of the Diamante poetry style. What a great topic to write about. I see apathy as a teacher every day and it's disheartening. I still strive to care and your poem is encouraging to me. Thanks. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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Hello Cindy,
The first time I heard the word, "apathy," I was sitting in my 9th grade English class, and my favorite teacher said, "Man's greatest sin is apathy." I have never forgotten those words or her.
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review. Feel free to share my diamante with your students; I would be honored...
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Thank you. I will do that. I teach social studies and the word apathy is used often. So glad to have you willing to share.
Comment from MelB
Hi, this is a fantastic poem that describes the divide here in America well. There are definitely those uncaring and cold and yet, some still have compassion for others.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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Hi, this is a fantastic poem that describes the divide here in America well. There are definitely those uncaring and cold and yet, some still have compassion for others.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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Hello Friend,
Thank you ever so much for your exceptional rating and thoughtful review. My favorite high school English teacher once remarked to our class that "Apathy is man's greatest sin." Her words were true then, and they surely seem to be true today...
Thank you again. I so appreciate your affirmation of my work...
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I think she was a wise woman:)
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Diamante writing prompt.
Your well structured verse shows the flip side of Apathy; Compassion.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the Diamante writing prompt.
Your well structured verse shows the flip side of Apathy; Compassion.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 22-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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Hello Sharon,
So pleased you enjoyed.
Thank you for your excellent rating and review...
Comment from Janet Foor
An excellent Diamante poem in perfect Diamante form.
I enjoyed the progression of this topic.
Excellent quote and a perfect title for this one.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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An excellent Diamante poem in perfect Diamante form.
I enjoyed the progression of this topic.
Excellent quote and a perfect title for this one.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 22-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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Hello Janet!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
I really enjoyed penning this diamante.
Comment from w.j.debi
This appears to be a perfect Diamanté from the description. You manged to balance not only word count, but syllable count as well. An excellent message too as you travel from a negative trait to a positive one.
Best of luck in the contest with this gem of a poem.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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This appears to be a perfect Diamanté from the description. You manged to balance not only word count, but syllable count as well. An excellent message too as you travel from a negative trait to a positive one.
Best of luck in the contest with this gem of a poem.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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Hello Friend,
Oh my goodness! I didn't catch the syllable count: that is pretty interesting! I believe the second line, though, is one syllable short. The most difficult line for me was the one with "ing" word = tricky buggers to make sense.
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review! So appreciated!
Comment from ameen786
Both the picture and the title says it all my friend; the Diamante is composed quite creatively with choice words/phrases reflecting the two sides of a coin. Good luck!
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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Both the picture and the title says it all my friend; the Diamante is composed quite creatively with choice words/phrases reflecting the two sides of a coin. Good luck!
Comment Written 22-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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Hello Friend,
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review. These are a bit more challenging than they appear! But I surely enjoyed the challenge! Thank you!
Comment from jppoet
I wish I could understand the opaque and convoluted galaxy of Diamante, given its complex regulations, so distant from poetry. To my eye, the above rendition is just a jumble of words with no affinity to poetry. Or do I need an attitude adjustment?
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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I wish I could understand the opaque and convoluted galaxy of Diamante, given its complex regulations, so distant from poetry. To my eye, the above rendition is just a jumble of words with no affinity to poetry. Or do I need an attitude adjustment?
Comment Written 22-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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Hmmmm...
"Just a jumble of words with no affinity to poetry?"
Yikes!
Methinks you are a "diamante in the rough."
Thanks for stopping by!
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Thanks for your reply. Please let me know who you are so I can read your other writings. Am sure you are more poetic than this jumble of words. Blessings, jppoet
Comment from Joan E.
I just watched "Jane" and can easily hear Goodall reciting her quote. I admired your using the Diamante shape for your reflections about "apathy" and its antonym, "compassion". Best wishes in the competition- Joan
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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I just watched "Jane" and can easily hear Goodall reciting her quote. I admired your using the Diamante shape for your reflections about "apathy" and its antonym, "compassion". Best wishes in the competition- Joan
Comment Written 22-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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Hello Jane!
Thank you ever so much for your excellent rating and complimentary review. Jane's words are "spot on!"
So pleased you appreciated my diamante.
