A Joyful Perspective
A Rock in the river shares her joy to see children again.6 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
I love the idea you propose in your poem.
When I was a kid I remember watching a programme where animated and in animated object could talk ..I found it fascinating and I still do....silent observers of mankind.
A rock in the river or at the sea shore would have quite a lot to say of those that tread daily it's back ...Playing , maybe fishing , maybe just ( in the case of a sea rock ) standing to watch the sunrise or sunset with a lover.
My favourite line you wrote:
They have been absent
For lonely decades
My joy
Had washed away
I'm addict to sad moments ,events , phrases and these verses are drenched in tears.
Pa.thanks again for your vote for my poem on Music!
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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I love the idea you propose in your poem.
When I was a kid I remember watching a programme where animated and in animated object could talk ..I found it fascinating and I still do....silent observers of mankind.
A rock in the river or at the sea shore would have quite a lot to say of those that tread daily it's back ...Playing , maybe fishing , maybe just ( in the case of a sea rock ) standing to watch the sunrise or sunset with a lover.
My favourite line you wrote:
They have been absent
For lonely decades
My joy
Had washed away
I'm addict to sad moments ,events , phrases and these verses are drenched in tears.
Pa.thanks again for your vote for my poem on Music!
Comment Written 18-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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I'm so glad you enjoyed this poem. I enjoyed writing it because it was my fav0orite rock as a child. It was in the brook right behind our house. We were the children of the children who in the long past had played there. We seemed to have older parents in our neighborhood, so it must have been at least twenty years for the rock to sit there waiting. It seems most everything I write is a bit at least dunked in tears. So enjoy some of the others. The mailbox on it great too.
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
A cool refreshing River with the rocks beneath that often entertain little kids that come running over them hoping not to fall over there slippery surface and yet they see so many that run through the water over the rocks for different . There are some for fun and maybe some for survival if they're being . Very good writer and very creative, very refreshing artwork as well.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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A cool refreshing River with the rocks beneath that often entertain little kids that come running over them hoping not to fall over there slippery surface and yet they see so many that run through the water over the rocks for different . There are some for fun and maybe some for survival if they're being . Very good writer and very creative, very refreshing artwork as well.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Thank you for my affirming review. You have followed through on my thought which is one of my intents in this writing. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Beck Fenton
I love the images your poem evokes. A couple of nit-picks... "A rock share(s)"
and I would look at using something other than but in either the 5th or 7th line as not to repeat.
Rocks do have the ability to comfort and heal. I love this writing of yours!
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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I love the images your poem evokes. A couple of nit-picks... "A rock share(s)"
and I would look at using something other than but in either the 5th or 7th line as not to repeat.
Rocks do have the ability to comfort and heal. I love this writing of yours!
Comment Written 22-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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Thank you ...I worked on your suggestions & even caught a few more.
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That's working it! Yay!
Comment from Swampfox1
I like your poem. My favorite passage is: "My joy
Had washed away
The familiar laughter
Giggling
Tumbling "
Good luck in the contest.
It makes me stop and think and I like that. I did not find any errors. I do not yet see any need for improvement.
I do find it a bit somber but perhaps rocks are somber.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2018
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I like your poem. My favorite passage is: "My joy
Had washed away
The familiar laughter
Giggling
Tumbling "
Good luck in the contest.
It makes me stop and think and I like that. I did not find any errors. I do not yet see any need for improvement.
I do find it a bit somber but perhaps rocks are somber.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2018
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Thank you for your expression of appreciation for my favorite lines. I guess rocks are sometimes somber with all that they see but they most times seem to be able to let things wash over them.
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True that, and good point.
Comment from friartuck
Okay, rocks are not supposed to be capable of reasoning. They have no facility for memory, no recollection of past events, none at all.
But this one does! There is a thing called anthropomorphization - Disney did it, and it mostly ended up all treacly and wasn't really fun at all. But you have avoided all that, and your rock seems solid (pun intended).
That, to my way of thinking, is the way a rock would recall things, and you nailed it!
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2018
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Okay, rocks are not supposed to be capable of reasoning. They have no facility for memory, no recollection of past events, none at all.
But this one does! There is a thing called anthropomorphization - Disney did it, and it mostly ended up all treacly and wasn't really fun at all. But you have avoided all that, and your rock seems solid (pun intended).
That, to my way of thinking, is the way a rock would recall things, and you nailed it!
Comment Written 21-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2018
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I love PUns. I enjoyed your humorous review. Thank you
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
You have done a lovely job writing this poem from a different perspective. I like to think of inanimate objects having feelings and how nature impacts their world. What a great contest entry. Good luck.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2018
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You have done a lovely job writing this poem from a different perspective. I like to think of inanimate objects having feelings and how nature impacts their world. What a great contest entry. Good luck.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2018
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Thank you for your expression of appreciation of nature as I depicted it.
