A Garden Stroll
A rhymed poem about childhood17 total reviews
Comment from johnwilson
This poem is embodies all that I love within this mode of writing; while rhyming is not my forte, I love it when it works. You can write free verse or rhyme. This is exceptional! The way you describe childhood is beyond words for me. And, the bit of sorrow at the end (though you don't feel that way) is the truth of life!
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This poem is embodies all that I love within this mode of writing; while rhyming is not my forte, I love it when it works. You can write free verse or rhyme. This is exceptional! The way you describe childhood is beyond words for me. And, the bit of sorrow at the end (though you don't feel that way) is the truth of life!
Comment Written 18-Mar-2018
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem about childhood, A Garden Stroll, is so well done. From the boundless imagination of fantasy, to the closeness of good friends, our lives are made wonderful by our attitudes and actions. Nice.
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This poem about childhood, A Garden Stroll, is so well done. From the boundless imagination of fantasy, to the closeness of good friends, our lives are made wonderful by our attitudes and actions. Nice.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2018
Comment from MissMerri
A beautifully written poem about childhood, in perfect meter and solid rhymes. Though full of considerable hyperbole, this is balanced nicely by the whimsical air and lighthearted mood felt from beginning to end. The closing quatrain sums up the past and brings it neatly into the present. I enjoyed reading this very much. I suppose you don't need any luck for this one. Your skill and talent will carry it.
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A beautifully written poem about childhood, in perfect meter and solid rhymes. Though full of considerable hyperbole, this is balanced nicely by the whimsical air and lighthearted mood felt from beginning to end. The closing quatrain sums up the past and brings it neatly into the present. I enjoyed reading this very much. I suppose you don't need any luck for this one. Your skill and talent will carry it.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2018
Comment from cailinraine8
This is really beautiful and very well written... the colours are intense and within these words we can imagine the delightful child and then also sympathize with the slowing down that age brings. Very good work.
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This is really beautiful and very well written... the colours are intense and within these words we can imagine the delightful child and then also sympathize with the slowing down that age brings. Very good work.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2018
Comment from mvbrooks
What a wonderfully whimsical way to recall your youth. This would make a great entry into any book of poetry read to children. It's fun and it invites the reader to come, play along.
That it ends with the narrator looking back and still enjoying the imaginative journey is a nice way to validate the childhood dream.
editing note:
line 7 ends with both a period and a comma --need to remove the period.
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What a wonderfully whimsical way to recall your youth. This would make a great entry into any book of poetry read to children. It's fun and it invites the reader to come, play along.
That it ends with the narrator looking back and still enjoying the imaginative journey is a nice way to validate the childhood dream.
editing note:
line 7 ends with both a period and a comma --need to remove the period.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2018
Comment from donette1914
what can i say but brilliant and outstanding of this mans childhood to a child into a old man wow amazing and i love the artwork well done!!!!
comment made by donette1914 on the date of march 16th 2016
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what can i say but brilliant and outstanding of this mans childhood to a child into a old man wow amazing and i love the artwork well done!!!!
comment made by donette1914 on the date of march 16th 2016
Comment Written 16-Mar-2018
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
What a great entry for the contest. Beautifully written with a striking presentation. "A Garden Stroll" ... you stroll your reader through the garden from youth to old age, and the memories brought back along the way. Good luck in the contest with this wonderful entry. I think your poem will fare well. ~~ Connie
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What a great entry for the contest. Beautifully written with a striking presentation. "A Garden Stroll" ... you stroll your reader through the garden from youth to old age, and the memories brought back along the way. Good luck in the contest with this wonderful entry. I think your poem will fare well. ~~ Connie
Comment Written 16-Mar-2018
Comment from Gloria ....
Author both sections then and now are written to delight. I'm especially fond of the leaping up to land on Mars. That illustrates the sheer joy of youthful exuberance.
Then to walking in gardens with dear old friends.
Great job and best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2018
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Author both sections then and now are written to delight. I'm especially fond of the leaping up to land on Mars. That illustrates the sheer joy of youthful exuberance.
Then to walking in gardens with dear old friends.
Great job and best wishes to you in the contest.
Gloria
Comment Written 16-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2018
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Wow. You've made my day with you're surprising review. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this. It did come out as I wished it to, which makes it all the more satisfying that it resonates with you. Thanks so very much. Smiles :)) Anon
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Mystery Writer,
Simply lovely and reminiscent of my own childhood. Those days do seem so simple now. My childhood friends and I played from sun up to sundown - whether it was baseball, jacks, tag, or running up to "Sullivan's Hill" and enjoying a picnic amid the 200+ year old graves...Your poem encapsulates those very cherished by-gone days that are still...and always will be... treasured! Thank you!
diane
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Hello Mystery Writer,
Simply lovely and reminiscent of my own childhood. Those days do seem so simple now. My childhood friends and I played from sun up to sundown - whether it was baseball, jacks, tag, or running up to "Sullivan's Hill" and enjoying a picnic amid the 200+ year old graves...Your poem encapsulates those very cherished by-gone days that are still...and always will be... treasured! Thank you!
diane
Comment Written 15-Mar-2018
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Childhood writing prompt.
Your story of your childhood memories is well told.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
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I think this is a good entry for the Childhood writing prompt.
Your story of your childhood memories is well told.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 15-Mar-2018
