The Pool
A Reverie44 total reviews
Comment from Aussie
I am a fisher-woman from way back. Your descriptive words hit the right notes with me. A Reverie and fiction too? I wondered about how the sword took him away? This sounds medieval? Anyway, I loved it - so there! :-) XX
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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I am a fisher-woman from way back. Your descriptive words hit the right notes with me. A Reverie and fiction too? I wondered about how the sword took him away? This sounds medieval? Anyway, I loved it - so there! :-) XX
Comment Written 14-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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Thanks for your lovely response and for the sixth star, Kay. Much appreciated, as always. Best wishes Tony.
Comment from dragonpoet
The words provide a strong image of a fish leaping out of the pond in the picture to let the hunting heron see and catch it. I like the metaphors used in this of the beak being a lance and how the death in nature coincides with the death of a loved one.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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The words provide a strong image of a fish leaping out of the pond in the picture to let the hunting heron see and catch it. I like the metaphors used in this of the beak being a lance and how the death in nature coincides with the death of a loved one.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 14-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Thanks, Joan. I very much appreciate your comments about the imagery in this, and your award of six stars. Most affirming! Best wishes, Tony
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My pleasure. It was well worth the rating.
Joan
Comment from johnwilson
This poem is so eloquent, applying all the magic, included spot-on rhyming, of great poetry. It seems, Tony, you get better and better with age, like the best of wines. This piece shines for me! I feel honored to read it for free!
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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This poem is so eloquent, applying all the magic, included spot-on rhyming, of great poetry. It seems, Tony, you get better and better with age, like the best of wines. This piece shines for me! I feel honored to read it for free!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Very many thanks, Clem. Such a generous review and most affirming. I always appreciate your reviews for their content and this one has the added bonus of an accolade of stars. Most kind! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from frogbook
This is quite melancholy. a tale of loss told in beautifully described phrasing. Very descriptive and smooth. Full of emotion-the most important element for a poem by my account.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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This is quite melancholy. a tale of loss told in beautifully described phrasing. Very descriptive and smooth. Full of emotion-the most important element for a poem by my account.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Many thanks for your review, JoAnn, and comments about the emotional content of my poem. I agree with you that poems that reach a reader on an emotional level are the most worthwhile. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. Memories of the past cone to us at the most unexpected moments. While we enjoy a beautiful day in nature, something trigger the mind about a day in the past when our loved one was still with us.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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A very well-written poem. Memories of the past cone to us at the most unexpected moments. While we enjoy a beautiful day in nature, something trigger the mind about a day in the past when our loved one was still with us.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Thank you very much for your kind review, Sandra. Much appreciated, as always. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
This is so beautiful Tony and I read and reread it several times. Capturing a moment in your first stanza is so well done and pure poetry. I forgot to observe the rhyme - it could have been in free verse, it would have been just as lovely. It is what you wrote, not how you did it. But, of course, it did rhyme and the iambic pentameter is spot on. The first stanza I just loved. You used some lovely metaphor - 'stirs up the muddied depths of memory.' I found the whole poem very moving. Once in a while I read a poem and think 'I wish I had written that' - I feel that way about this one of yours. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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This is so beautiful Tony and I read and reread it several times. Capturing a moment in your first stanza is so well done and pure poetry. I forgot to observe the rhyme - it could have been in free verse, it would have been just as lovely. It is what you wrote, not how you did it. But, of course, it did rhyme and the iambic pentameter is spot on. The first stanza I just loved. You used some lovely metaphor - 'stirs up the muddied depths of memory.' I found the whole poem very moving. Once in a while I read a poem and think 'I wish I had written that' - I feel that way about this one of yours. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 14-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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High praise indeed! To say that this is a poem that you wish you had written, coming from such a fine poet as yourself, is a most generous and affirming thing to say. Thank you, Dorothy, both for your comments and for the six stars. Extremely generous. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A beautiful poem Tony and a gorgeous photo you've used to enhance this presentation. Lovely descriptions of what's happening in the pool and with the emotions of the person. Lovely read,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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A beautiful poem Tony and a gorgeous photo you've used to enhance this presentation. Lovely descriptions of what's happening in the pool and with the emotions of the person. Lovely read,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 14-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Very many thanks, Valda, for your lovely comments about this one and for the six stars,
Comment from Gloria ....
I really love the photograph, Tony. Some beautiful images too, the mayfly moments I can relate very well too, and splash of fish.
Oh, and what an ending to such a serene scene. It reminds me of life. lol
Very nicely written and my pleasure to review.
Gloria
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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I really love the photograph, Tony. Some beautiful images too, the mayfly moments I can relate very well too, and splash of fish.
Oh, and what an ending to such a serene scene. It reminds me of life. lol
Very nicely written and my pleasure to review.
Gloria
Comment Written 14-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Thanks, Gloria. Glad you enjoyed this one. I was paying particular attention to the euphony of vowel sounds in an attempt to mirror the tranquility of the pond. All the best, Tony
Comment from closetpoetjester
To share in something simple like this is such a joy and reminds me that these interactions and occurances are happening all around us all the time.
If I could just spend my days observing these things and writing about them all, well I think I would be in my perfect Eutopia.
Okay, maybe some additional things...a nice picnic rug, a pillow, a couple of cats, some chocolate and cheese haha.
Simple observations become more, oh so much more when astutely recorded by the talents of the nature watcher whose ability with the pen (and qwerty) defy gravity...somewhat like those ballerina legs tete a tetting in concentric circles that lap the pond shore.
I liked the ballet line and the skimming dancer in poetic mid iambic step.
Soooooooooooooooooooooo good you are.
Sixer for you, my clever Aussie mate.
Cheers P
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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To share in something simple like this is such a joy and reminds me that these interactions and occurances are happening all around us all the time.
If I could just spend my days observing these things and writing about them all, well I think I would be in my perfect Eutopia.
Okay, maybe some additional things...a nice picnic rug, a pillow, a couple of cats, some chocolate and cheese haha.
Simple observations become more, oh so much more when astutely recorded by the talents of the nature watcher whose ability with the pen (and qwerty) defy gravity...somewhat like those ballerina legs tete a tetting in concentric circles that lap the pond shore.
I liked the ballet line and the skimming dancer in poetic mid iambic step.
Soooooooooooooooooooooo good you are.
Sixer for you, my clever Aussie mate.
Cheers P
Comment Written 14-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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How kind of you, P., to comment on the gravity defying properties of my qwerty on this occasion! I appreciate your sending it to soar among a sextet of stars. Your suggested list of what is needed to make the occasion more enjoyable echo my sentiments almost entirely, (a nice picnic rug, a pillow, a couple of cats, some chocolate and cheese). However, I would perhaps exchange the two cats for a bottle of fine wine and a can of insect spray. The cats could be employed to hunt for snakes in the grass.
Comment from sunnilicious
This was a very nice poem. Well thought out with strong visual imagery. Creative. Good alliterations sprinkled. Good flow of rhythm and rhymes. Nice work.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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This was a very nice poem. Well thought out with strong visual imagery. Creative. Good alliterations sprinkled. Good flow of rhythm and rhymes. Nice work.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Very many thanks, Sunnilicious, for your kind comments about the imagery in this, and the alliteration and flow. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
