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An imagined silly poet situation19 total reviews
Comment from Marge Setzer
I read this through twice and may have to go back again to catch all the creative phrasing. The rhyming within sentences was the most fun for me. At first I didn't realize it was happening, but when I did, I made sure to look for it. I think this poem was masterfully created, and yes, it was a delight to read. I did wonder about the dialogue. Sometimes you used quotation marks and sometimes you didn't - i.e. the third line of the poem, and again the line, "I notice that you're typing there...," and later in I said, "Just hold your horses there..." I'm still smiling at the way you put this poem together. Very creative. I'll look forward to more. Marge
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2018
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I read this through twice and may have to go back again to catch all the creative phrasing. The rhyming within sentences was the most fun for me. At first I didn't realize it was happening, but when I did, I made sure to look for it. I think this poem was masterfully created, and yes, it was a delight to read. I did wonder about the dialogue. Sometimes you used quotation marks and sometimes you didn't - i.e. the third line of the poem, and again the line, "I notice that you're typing there...," and later in I said, "Just hold your horses there..." I'm still smiling at the way you put this poem together. Very creative. I'll look forward to more. Marge
Comment Written 15-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2018
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Thanks so much Marge, for your wonderful review and stars! Most of all, it's truly a pleasure to meet you and I hope you will stay tuned! All the best always! HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
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You're welcome. I hope to see more of your work in the future.
Comment from Pantygynt
This is surely the strangest thing I have read all day. I suppose it should be classified as a prose poem or maybe a poprose since there is more poetry in the first part than there is in the second.
I could actually imagine this argument developing, as some people can be very quick to take offense if criticized and then quickly things start to escalate.
It makes one think twice about using a computer in a place like a library.
"Soon I turned as asked..." Did you mean "and asked?" That seems to make more sense to me.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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This is surely the strangest thing I have read all day. I suppose it should be classified as a prose poem or maybe a poprose since there is more poetry in the first part than there is in the second.
I could actually imagine this argument developing, as some people can be very quick to take offense if criticized and then quickly things start to escalate.
It makes one think twice about using a computer in a place like a library.
"Soon I turned as asked..." Did you mean "and asked?" That seems to make more sense to me.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Yes indeed, you have caught an oversight here as that is what I meant to write! Thanks so much for catching that and you might imagine...I was really out there in dream-world when this one popped out so I hope you at least had some fun with the overall obscurity of it all! Thanks always! Vance PS: btw, no alcohol involved and I only do doctor-prescribed drugs! Vance
Comment from royowen
I love your fabulous sense of humour and occasion dear Vance, most inventive and a very imaginative post. You ate a very clever man, and God has blessed you with a wonderful predisposition in blessing others, and especially me. Well done, dear friend, excellent job, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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I love your fabulous sense of humour and occasion dear Vance, most inventive and a very imaginative post. You ate a very clever man, and God has blessed you with a wonderful predisposition in blessing others, and especially me. Well done, dear friend, excellent job, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Thanks brother Roy , for another uplifting and encouraging review and stars! I hope you know what a gift it is for me to know you are out there with wonderful messages of your works and reviews! blessings always! Vance
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You too Bro.
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Dearest Brother Roy! your words are always a blessing and a inspiration that brings so much joy to me...and I'm sure many others! Thanks forever! Vance
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My pleasure bro. Vance
Comment from Ginnygray
A well penned poem telling a story of a thief trying to steal another's computer! The owner's complaint of the person's annoying tapping of his pen on the desk sitting behind him caused a confrontation between them. The man pulled a gun and told the owner that he was stealing his computer upon which the owner comes up with such an unbelievable story of theft protection in the computer that the thief believes about the computer removing his head that he took the owner's advice and threw the computer down and ran before the police came!
Quite a creative story giving the reader a fun read! Thank you for your poem!
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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A well penned poem telling a story of a thief trying to steal another's computer! The owner's complaint of the person's annoying tapping of his pen on the desk sitting behind him caused a confrontation between them. The man pulled a gun and told the owner that he was stealing his computer upon which the owner comes up with such an unbelievable story of theft protection in the computer that the thief believes about the computer removing his head that he took the owner's advice and threw the computer down and ran before the police came!
Quite a creative story giving the reader a fun read! Thank you for your poem!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Hi ginny, and thanks for the lovely and uplifting review! Glad to know you enjoyed it and hope you will stay tuned in case I Lose my mind again and have another wild dream like this one! Blessings always! Vance
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written story/poem about disturbances when we try to write a masterpiece of poetry. My favorite music in the background usually work for me to dim some distracting noises.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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A very well-written story/poem about disturbances when we try to write a masterpiece of poetry. My favorite music in the background usually work for me to dim some distracting noises.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Thanks Sandra, for your always delightful reviews and generous stars! Much appreciated always! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Vance;
I'm so glad this was an imagined event. Can you imagine how long the police would keep someone suspected of having a bomb in their laptop? Or even someone who said there was a bomb in their laptop?
Great writing. Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Hi, Vance;
I'm so glad this was an imagined event. Can you imagine how long the police would keep someone suspected of having a bomb in their laptop? Or even someone who said there was a bomb in their laptop?
Great writing. Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Thanks Patty for the great review and stars and yes, tangling with the cops over an explosive laptop would not be fun but who know what's comin in the next nightmare...dream? have a wonderful day! Vance
Comment from apky
Hello Vance,
You certainly let your imagination take off with this poem. In any case, I smiled the whole time as I read the words especially when I got the to the fluke.
It may be a silly ditty, but your rhyme and the words made it a fun piece.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Hello Vance,
You certainly let your imagination take off with this poem. In any case, I smiled the whole time as I read the words especially when I got the to the fluke.
It may be a silly ditty, but your rhyme and the words made it a fun piece.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Thanks so much apky, for you delightful review and stars..always so much appreciated and a joy to hear from you! Vance
Comment from robina1978
Indeed a difficult dilemma if your computer does not work. I can relate to you writing you slapped it on your knee. Oh, I see now, you only imagines it. I know in my country someone put it outside her window. When she came back it was gone.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Indeed a difficult dilemma if your computer does not work. I can relate to you writing you slapped it on your knee. Oh, I see now, you only imagines it. I know in my country someone put it outside her window. When she came back it was gone.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Thanks robina, for the lovely review and stars! Always a delight to hear from you...in all ways! Vance
Comment from judiverse
Fun that you got the rhyme in this. The individual you encountered certainly didn't have a very poetic soul. How nice to have a laptop programed only to rhyme. I like the use of sync and blink together. Lots of fun with this. It is kind of free-wheeling and jovial. It would be an interesting read-aloud piece. It reminds me of how in years past I used to write on the bus when I was traveling to and from Boston. (Got quite a bit of writing done despite distractions. judi
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Fun that you got the rhyme in this. The individual you encountered certainly didn't have a very poetic soul. How nice to have a laptop programed only to rhyme. I like the use of sync and blink together. Lots of fun with this. It is kind of free-wheeling and jovial. It would be an interesting read-aloud piece. It reminds me of how in years past I used to write on the bus when I was traveling to and from Boston. (Got quite a bit of writing done despite distractions. judi
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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thanks so much judiverse, for your lovely review and stars! It is always a delight to hear from you...in ALL ways!! Vance
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Hi, Vance, and you're very welcome. It was entertaining to read--good for early morning. judi
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Thanks Judi, for the great review and stars and always a joy to hear from you! Vance
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You're quite welcome. Have a wonderful day. judi
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Thanks again Judi..always my joy to hear from you! Vance
Comment from Pamusart
It definitely was a delight. I am having a strange thought. Is the cash a metaphor for your poetic mind? Sometimes people rob us of our thoughts, our concentration. Then, it is hard and frustrating to write. To me, money is secondary to almost all else as long as I have enough to have a roof, good, car. This was a gun little ditty. Rhymes well. Clear message. Smooth flow. Thank you for sharing. Thought detective is good. About thirty years ago, I started a novel. I had the thought police arresting people for their thoughts and there were soy datellites spying on everyone in the sky. I think I predicted the future. Thank you for sharing. Was really fun to read. More like a story. Would have been a good entry in the Share a Story poem contest
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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It definitely was a delight. I am having a strange thought. Is the cash a metaphor for your poetic mind? Sometimes people rob us of our thoughts, our concentration. Then, it is hard and frustrating to write. To me, money is secondary to almost all else as long as I have enough to have a roof, good, car. This was a gun little ditty. Rhymes well. Clear message. Smooth flow. Thank you for sharing. Thought detective is good. About thirty years ago, I started a novel. I had the thought police arresting people for their thoughts and there were soy datellites spying on everyone in the sky. I think I predicted the future. Thank you for sharing. Was really fun to read. More like a story. Would have been a good entry in the Share a Story poem contest
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Thanks so much Pamusart, for your truly lovely and uplifting review! I really enjoyed doing this silly work and I'm delighted to know you found it amusing! Glad to hear from you and hope you will stay tuned! Vance
