A motel called home
Dreams can deliver or bury us19 total reviews
Comment from Pamusart
"Tears cried early
take the longest to dry. ". I like that. At least, it seems so. Maybe because your cheeks stay wet as more come. Another passage that it would not let me copy was about the neon and machupichu. Other nice imagery. Smooth flow. Nice ending. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2018
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"Tears cried early
take the longest to dry. ". I like that. At least, it seems so. Maybe because your cheeks stay wet as more come. Another passage that it would not let me copy was about the neon and machupichu. Other nice imagery. Smooth flow. Nice ending. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 15-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2018
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I am so happy you found enjoyment in the reading. Thank you for your encouraging review.
Comment from frogbook
This is so original and very cleverly worded. A very impactful and strong last line. I had to read it over several times I was so impacted by the description. A great work.
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This is so original and very cleverly worded. A very impactful and strong last line. I had to read it over several times I was so impacted by the description. A great work.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2018
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks a viewpoint that dreams can deliver or bury us; a dream feeling one may carry it as real or not; well written, well done. B A CHANGE INSPIRER-WRITER -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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This speaks a viewpoint that dreams can deliver or bury us; a dream feeling one may carry it as real or not; well written, well done. B A CHANGE INSPIRER-WRITER -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Thank you for commenting.
Comment from JanPerry
Hello Sergeant Floyd. The reason for my four on here is my lack of understanding of your meaning about this poem.
You could include a small author's notes at the end to explain to us why
dreams can bury us. Why was the cab driver a little rascal?
Just a few questions as to your line of thinking. What relevance has the machu pichu to a cab driver?? The correlation is vague. There is no connection here.
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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Hello Sergeant Floyd. The reason for my four on here is my lack of understanding of your meaning about this poem.
You could include a small author's notes at the end to explain to us why
dreams can bury us. Why was the cab driver a little rascal?
Just a few questions as to your line of thinking. What relevance has the machu pichu to a cab driver?? The correlation is vague. There is no connection here.
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Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Introduced to movies as a child actor I assume he aspired to stardom or at least magically thought about it. Over the years the magic waned and his life was not the stuff of stardust.
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That's a good story
Comment from friartuck
Thanks for a very poignant poem, containing excellent imagery! Although I am not Roman Catholic, I think the most powerful lines of the whole poem was, "Did his rosary break in the dark
scrambling the pearly beads of Glory Be
across decades of yellow linoleum?"
That single image brought the whole thing to a shattering completion, with the kind of unmistakable warning it carried.
An excellent job, and would have rated a six, if I had one left!
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Thanks for a very poignant poem, containing excellent imagery! Although I am not Roman Catholic, I think the most powerful lines of the whole poem was, "Did his rosary break in the dark
scrambling the pearly beads of Glory Be
across decades of yellow linoleum?"
That single image brought the whole thing to a shattering completion, with the kind of unmistakable warning it carried.
An excellent job, and would have rated a six, if I had one left!
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Thank you for your sympathetic and right on read. Hitting cords of emotion is like hearing angels sing.
Comment from prettybluebirds
Well, I'm not sure I get the meaning of this poem, but it is interesting and intriguing. I love the artwork and it is perfect for the subject of your writing. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Well, I'm not sure I get the meaning of this poem, but it is interesting and intriguing. I love the artwork and it is perfect for the subject of your writing. Nicely done.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Thank you for your comments.
Comment from His Grayness
I found this very uncommon subject and work to be really well presented from the outset with excellent artwork. From that fine opening, the delivery of the poetic work came forth with equally excellent delivery to which I have no suggestion for improvement in any way. My thanks to this author for a fine read! HIS GRAYNESS; VAnce
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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I found this very uncommon subject and work to be really well presented from the outset with excellent artwork. From that fine opening, the delivery of the poetic work came forth with equally excellent delivery to which I have no suggestion for improvement in any way. My thanks to this author for a fine read! HIS GRAYNESS; VAnce
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Thank you. Sometimes my inspiration is the common place and sometimes the out of place but I find both extraordinary.
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Yes, you do have to be careful what you wish for, and the person in your poem seems to have made some bad choices he has to live with. I noticed no errors and thanks for sharing your poetry, Ana.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Yes, you do have to be careful what you wish for, and the person in your poem seems to have made some bad choices he has to live with. I noticed no errors and thanks for sharing your poetry, Ana.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Maybe as a child the world chose for him and he could not escape it's gravity.
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Yes, are we predestined? Big question.
Comment from Sherman541
How sad to have fame so early and so much of it, only to die broke and alone in a hotel room, later in life. So sad the things that life has to offer, but then again when it is time, and only God knows when we will go to be with God and then our lives, if we believe, can be Fantastically Wonderful with God in Heaven.
Where everything we need is free and we need never worry again. Sherman541
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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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How sad to have fame so early and so much of it, only to die broke and alone in a hotel room, later in life. So sad the things that life has to offer, but then again when it is time, and only God knows when we will go to be with God and then our lives, if we believe, can be Fantastically Wonderful with God in Heaven.
Where everything we need is free and we need never worry again. Sherman541
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Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Your prayer is my prayer to. Peace in heaven. May Abba, our Father bless everyone.
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