Alcohol
Be cautious when intoxicated.11 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This naani, Alcohol, uses twenty-five syllables in these four lines to restate the obvious warning to anyone who drinks and tends to unload. Some things unload but don't ever reload.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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This naani, Alcohol, uses twenty-five syllables in these four lines to restate the obvious warning to anyone who drinks and tends to unload. Some things unload but don't ever reload.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Thank you Bill.
Comment from BeasPeas
A good caution. There are some who cannot handle even a drop and others who can enjoy alcohol, taking it or leaving it. In any case, alcohol does loosen the brain and the tongue. Best to not overdo it. Marilyn
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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A good caution. There are some who cannot handle even a drop and others who can enjoy alcohol, taking it or leaving it. In any case, alcohol does loosen the brain and the tongue. Best to not overdo it. Marilyn
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Many thanks Marilyn.
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Many thanks Marilyn.
Comment from kathleenspalding
Oh, too true! Excellent Naani Poem conveys sound advice using very few words. Great use of artwork and color for a pleasing visual presentation. Great job!
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Oh, too true! Excellent Naani Poem conveys sound advice using very few words. Great use of artwork and color for a pleasing visual presentation. Great job!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Thank you for your kind review.
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You're welcome
Comment from Debbie Pope
Now that is one wise naani poem. When people talk about the harmful effects of alcohol, this problem is seldom mentioned. Oh, but it's definitely a problem. Not for me though, It puts me to sleep, at the table, at the bar. I am a source of amusement, not of anger, But, as to your poem, nice job. Concise and powerful.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Now that is one wise naani poem. When people talk about the harmful effects of alcohol, this problem is seldom mentioned. Oh, but it's definitely a problem. Not for me though, It puts me to sleep, at the table, at the bar. I am a source of amusement, not of anger, But, as to your poem, nice job. Concise and powerful.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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It is a problem but not for me either. Don't like the taste. Thanks for reading and reviewing Debbie.
Comment from rspoet
You've written a fine naani poem and entry for the contest
with the correct syllable count.
and an excellent message to be careful what you say
and don't drive when drunk, either.
Excellent picture for the poem.
Nicely done
Good luck in the contest
RS
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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You've written a fine naani poem and entry for the contest
with the correct syllable count.
and an excellent message to be careful what you say
and don't drive when drunk, either.
Excellent picture for the poem.
Nicely done
Good luck in the contest
RS
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Naani Poetry writing prompt.
You've told a strong truth here. Alcohol does loosen the tongue and no we can't take it back.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the Naani Poetry writing prompt.
You've told a strong truth here. Alcohol does loosen the tongue and no we can't take it back.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Thank you so much for readi g and reviewing.
Comment from Alexander Vasa
The Italians have a saying, 'there's truth in wine'. This poem reminded me of that, but there's nothing quite like a nice red with dinner or a cold pint on a hot day. I noticed no errors and enjoyed your writing. Ana.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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The Italians have a saying, 'there's truth in wine'. This poem reminded me of that, but there's nothing quite like a nice red with dinner or a cold pint on a hot day. I noticed no errors and enjoyed your writing. Ana.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Well said, it also loosen the brain and can make you a complete idiot. More people are in prison due to alcohol and drugs than any thing else. Very sad. It is a killer in more ways than one, but that's probably not the point of your poem. I'll get off my soap box now. =} Well done. Roxanna
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Well said, it also loosen the brain and can make you a complete idiot. More people are in prison due to alcohol and drugs than any thing else. Very sad. It is a killer in more ways than one, but that's probably not the point of your poem. I'll get off my soap box now. =} Well done. Roxanna
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Many thanks
Comment from Sherman541
Alcoholics, are the nicest meanest more aggravating people you will ever meet. Over drinking especially when you are not used to drinking, does allow for the mouth to run loose, to loose. Well said, nice visual. Good Luck and Best Wishes in the Contest! Sherman541
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Alcoholics, are the nicest meanest more aggravating people you will ever meet. Over drinking especially when you are not used to drinking, does allow for the mouth to run loose, to loose. Well said, nice visual. Good Luck and Best Wishes in the Contest! Sherman541
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Many thanks
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you are welcome :)
Comment from Wetbelly01
I'd say this piece is perfect for the 'Naani Poetry' contest.
And the words are SO true!
Didn't see any problems at all.
My compliments... And good Luck in the contest!
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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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I'd say this piece is perfect for the 'Naani Poetry' contest.
And the words are SO true!
Didn't see any problems at all.
My compliments... And good Luck in the contest!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Many thanks
