One Hundred Steps
Contest Entry: She was determined...40 total reviews
Comment from Fabiha_N
This is a very well-written poem! It has a nice flow to each line, and I think you incorporated the required words really well into this poem. It tells a delightful story about a woman who, even in her condition, strived to see the beautiful garden lilacs. This story paints a clear picture in my mind, and it's overall very nicely done.
Great work :)
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
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This is a very well-written poem! It has a nice flow to each line, and I think you incorporated the required words really well into this poem. It tells a delightful story about a woman who, even in her condition, strived to see the beautiful garden lilacs. This story paints a clear picture in my mind, and it's overall very nicely done.
Great work :)
Comment Written 10-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
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Hello Friend,
So pleased you enjoyed! My mother surely loved to garden, and her lilacs were stunning. She is never more than a thought away...
Thank you for your thoughtful and positive review!
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
What a lovely poem which offers so much hope to others who
also have their own 'they'.
Spring is the season of rebirth so it's understandable that all things
seem possible.
I really like the way the poem has been composed and formatted
and ends with a promise to self to do it all again another day.
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
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What a lovely poem which offers so much hope to others who
also have their own 'they'.
Spring is the season of rebirth so it's understandable that all things
seem possible.
I really like the way the poem has been composed and formatted
and ends with a promise to self to do it all again another day.
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 10-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
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Hello Shirley!
I just hope when I get to be my mother's age, "They" are nowhere to be found!
But I do hope I retain her fighting spirit!
Thank you ever so much for your positive and complimentary review! So appreciated!
Comment from Tootie
This is beautiful. I enjoyed this story and also your comments. Thank you for this. We think because someone's health and capabilities are failing that they don't have these desires to live anymore and enjoy what they once enjoyed. Sometimes (many times) we overprotect and believe we're doing what's best for someone. I wasn't sure how this poem was going to end. It kept me reading. Well-written, flows well. Excellent!
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
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This is beautiful. I enjoyed this story and also your comments. Thank you for this. We think because someone's health and capabilities are failing that they don't have these desires to live anymore and enjoy what they once enjoyed. Sometimes (many times) we overprotect and believe we're doing what's best for someone. I wasn't sure how this poem was going to end. It kept me reading. Well-written, flows well. Excellent!
Comment Written 10-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
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Hello Catherine,
Thank you ever so much for your thoughtful and complimentary review. My mother fought so hard to live, but in the end, she hurt too much...But her spirit truly lives on in the love and beauty she shared with so many...
Thank you again!
Comment from Susan Burger
This is such a lovely entry for the Use These Words Contest. I like that it was a memory of your mother and her garden. You wove the eight required words throughout your story in such a beautiful way. Good work. Best of luck in the competition!
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
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This is such a lovely entry for the Use These Words Contest. I like that it was a memory of your mother and her garden. You wove the eight required words throughout your story in such a beautiful way. Good work. Best of luck in the competition!
Comment Written 10-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
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Hello Susan,
So pleased you enjoyed my offering, Susan.
Thank you for your positive and complimentary review...I can still see my mom navigating her gardens...
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello, this is like a story within a poem, just as you say in your notes. A very personal story with lots of lovely imagery. I hope it does well in the contest and best of luck, Ana.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
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Hello, this is like a story within a poem, just as you say in your notes. A very personal story with lots of lovely imagery. I hope it does well in the contest and best of luck, Ana.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
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Hello Ana!
Thank you ever so much for your positive and complimentary review!
Much appreciated!
Comment from ServantOfGod
Thank you very much for sharing with us this beautiful piece. Its very well-written and I can feel your heartfelt feelings in it as you thought about your mother. Here's to wishing you all the best in the future.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
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Thank you very much for sharing with us this beautiful piece. Its very well-written and I can feel your heartfelt feelings in it as you thought about your mother. Here's to wishing you all the best in the future.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
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Hello ServantOfGod,
So very pleased you enjoyed my poetic offering.
Thank you for your positive and complimentary review!
Comment from N.K. Wagner
One Hundred Steps is a poem of strength of will and determination. This elderly woman is determined to enjoy her garden's gifts despite her growing infirmity. A beautiful tribute to those who age but never grow old. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
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One Hundred Steps is a poem of strength of will and determination. This elderly woman is determined to enjoy her garden's gifts despite her growing infirmity. A beautiful tribute to those who age but never grow old. :) Nancy
Comment Written 10-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
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Hello Nancy,
So pleased you enjoyed my poem.
Thank you for your complimentary and positive review!
Comment from TPAC
I found this write to be an enchanting read, a story of struggle, a heart willingness to achieve. I, suffered such as a child, having myself to confront those steps. I won. Hope they continue their victories.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
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I found this write to be an enchanting read, a story of struggle, a heart willingness to achieve. I, suffered such as a child, having myself to confront those steps. I won. Hope they continue their victories.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
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Hello TPAC!
Thank you ever so much for your positive and complimentary review.
I am glad you were able to relate to my mother's experience...
Comment from robina1978
An excellent photo that complements your poem perfectly, sorry I have no six left. Your memories bubbled up with these words, about your mother who suffered from arthritis, Parkinson's disease and eventually dementia. You wrote this lovely poem about her using the assigned words for a prompt. A very good entry for the prompt. I will try and look out for you.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
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An excellent photo that complements your poem perfectly, sorry I have no six left. Your memories bubbled up with these words, about your mother who suffered from arthritis, Parkinson's disease and eventually dementia. You wrote this lovely poem about her using the assigned words for a prompt. A very good entry for the prompt. I will try and look out for you.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
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Hello robina!
So very pleased you enjoyed my offering!
Thank you for your complimentary and positive review...
Comment from RGstar
When I saw the flowers, the layout , I said, I am sure I will be in for a good read...and I was. I am not sure how to categorise it, a poem, free verse or prose...perhaps story poem as more an account, but beautiful it was, the perfect imagery bringing a smile at the end, as I was hoping, all the way through, there would be no mishap with a twist.
Good luck in the competition.
My best wishes.
RGstar.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
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When I saw the flowers, the layout , I said, I am sure I will be in for a good read...and I was. I am not sure how to categorise it, a poem, free verse or prose...perhaps story poem as more an account, but beautiful it was, the perfect imagery bringing a smile at the end, as I was hoping, all the way through, there would be no mishap with a twist.
Good luck in the competition.
My best wishes.
RGstar.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
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Hello Friend,
I think I was channeling the style and spirit of Walt Whitman ...or a vain attempt. To be truthful, with the words given me, this is how my memory found itself come alive on the page. I would characterize my offering as a story poem, too. A story of a very courageous woman who refused to be defeated - for as long as she was able - by old age and disease...Thank you for your complimentary and positive review...
