FAMILY TIES.
Viewing comments for Chapter 43 "Penny's Pennies.""ALL IN THE FAMILY."
7 total reviews
Comment from Lance S. Loria
A very nicely written poem with a positive sentiment regarding sharing. Congratulations on the contest award. No edits or adjustments necessary.
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A very nicely written poem with a positive sentiment regarding sharing. Congratulations on the contest award. No edits or adjustments necessary.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2019
Comment from Ogden
Your entry is the only one that entertains, while expressing the authors own worthy values, as well as those of her good samaritan.
Good luck in the voting!
Don (Ogden)
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Your entry is the only one that entertains, while expressing the authors own worthy values, as well as those of her good samaritan.
Good luck in the voting!
Don (Ogden)
Comment Written 02-Apr-2018
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
Well thanks for sharing your penny. You are so generous and thoughtful I really love this piece. It does show a heart of giving and compassion and the rhyme is truly excetional. Thanks for sharing
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Well thanks for sharing your penny. You are so generous and thoughtful I really love this piece. It does show a heart of giving and compassion and the rhyme is truly excetional. Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 01-Apr-2018
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
This is a very sweet rhyming poem. It was a good one to use for a Sunday school lesson with children. Could teach a great lesson of giving. Good luck to you on the contest.
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This is a very sweet rhyming poem. It was a good one to use for a Sunday school lesson with children. Could teach a great lesson of giving. Good luck to you on the contest.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
Comment from Liberty Justice
Six Stars 6******for you, dear poet because your story is so amusing and entertaining. It seems to have a moral to the story that you appreciate everything people do for you and you are caring and giving person. Whats name of your book and where is this book sold? WELL DONE. lol liberty justice
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Six Stars 6******for you, dear poet because your story is so amusing and entertaining. It seems to have a moral to the story that you appreciate everything people do for you and you are caring and giving person. Whats name of your book and where is this book sold? WELL DONE. lol liberty justice
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Hi lady Lib. It's me again, rhonnie69. Thank you for your shinning stars. Lib, I've promised, and I intend to buy your book. I'm just waiting and anticipating for money to visit me, which is rarely. Lib, just check at the bottom of my profile page. There you'll find information on my book. Here's lovin' ya' back. Your fan: Rhonnie.
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Thanks rhonnie60. You are
such a good pen pan fan
story friend. lol liberty justice
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Find a penny, pick it up and all day you'll have good luck. Pennies from heaven here in your lovely write, and thank you for the penny, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Find a penny, pick it up and all day you'll have good luck. Pennies from heaven here in your lovely write, and thank you for the penny, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Hello again Dolly: Thank you for your encouraging review, as usual. Yes, Dolly, there will be pennies from heaven for you and me. Make sure your umbrella is upside down. Rhonnie.
Comment from MercurySeven
What a sweet, fun write. It would make a lovely children's verse, perhaps for Sunday School. I found the rhyming pleasant, the repetition of "A penny for..." didn't get old--quite the opposite, I liked it even more by the end--and you included just enough personal touches to keep the format fresh. I read the contest rules and as far as I'm concerned this is a very good entry. It's certainly an imaginative approach, and it suits the Good Samaritan theme perfectly. My only suggestion would be to remove the comma in these lines. They don't need the punctuation, and the lines would flow that tiny bit better without, IMO.
A penny for the family, that lives next door.
A penny for the policeman, who works at the jail.
A penny for the mailman, who brings us our mail.
A penny for the electrician, who works on our wires.
Thanks for the enjoyable read. I hope you place well in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
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What a sweet, fun write. It would make a lovely children's verse, perhaps for Sunday School. I found the rhyming pleasant, the repetition of "A penny for..." didn't get old--quite the opposite, I liked it even more by the end--and you included just enough personal touches to keep the format fresh. I read the contest rules and as far as I'm concerned this is a very good entry. It's certainly an imaginative approach, and it suits the Good Samaritan theme perfectly. My only suggestion would be to remove the comma in these lines. They don't need the punctuation, and the lines would flow that tiny bit better without, IMO.
A penny for the family, that lives next door.
A penny for the policeman, who works at the jail.
A penny for the mailman, who brings us our mail.
A penny for the electrician, who works on our wires.
Thanks for the enjoyable read. I hope you place well in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
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Hello MercurySeven: Thank you for your helpful tip. I took advantage of your advise. I edited this poem as you suggested concerning removal of my use of unneeded commas. You were right. Now those lines read smoother. A helping hand; is always grand. Thank you, MercurySeven. rhonnie69.
