Haiku(as winter snow melts)
Haiku poem17 total reviews
Comment from cailinraine8
Love the picture, the color, the words... very nice job of telling the recurring story of spring where all life rejuvenates. Very pretty and uplifting. Good luck with the contest!
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Love the picture, the color, the words... very nice job of telling the recurring story of spring where all life rejuvenates. Very pretty and uplifting. Good luck with the contest!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Thanks for such an encouraging review zanya
Comment from karenina
I think I've read a lot of these for this contest. Yours is by far the best. I have nothing to do with votes....but if positive reviews and cheerleading helps let me run and get my Haiku Pom Poms! --Karenina
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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I think I've read a lot of these for this contest. Yours is by far the best. I have nothing to do with votes....but if positive reviews and cheerleading helps let me run and get my Haiku Pom Poms! --Karenina
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Yes indeed --this one made me chuckle -what a lovely lighthearted touch to this review me ------I love that image of Haiku Pom Poms --there's a theme for future Haiku..!!!!!!zanya
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I Plan on marketing them before every haiku contest on site! (I'm KIDDING but....) Smiles, Karenina
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You can look for them on E=Bay starting next month....(oh I'm joshin'!)---smile, Karenina
Comment from ameen786
The challenge in these syllable restricted poems is the choice of words as well as the phrasing; you did great in both with a perfect picture choice to enhance the theme; thanks for sharing and good luck.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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The challenge in these syllable restricted poems is the choice of words as well as the phrasing; you did great in both with a perfect picture choice to enhance the theme; thanks for sharing and good luck.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Most encouraging review zanya
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written haiku and the smelting snow works together in the seasonal rhythm into the transition from one season to the next a never ending cycle year after year.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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A very well-written haiku and the smelting snow works together in the seasonal rhythm into the transition from one season to the next a never ending cycle year after year.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Great review --thanks for reading zanya
Comment from Fabiha_N
I think this is a great entry for the haiku contest. It's well-written, and nicely worded too. Spring is nearing, and it's definitely evident that the snow and ice is beginning to melt because of all the slush! Great work on this :)
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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I think this is a great entry for the haiku contest. It's well-written, and nicely worded too. Spring is nearing, and it's definitely evident that the snow and ice is beginning to melt because of all the slush! Great work on this :)
Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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great review -thanks for reading zanya
Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku, As Winter Snow Melts, uses seventeen syllables to have us notice the new life which hastens to push the weak pieces of remaining ice off. Nice.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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This haiku, As Winter Snow Melts, uses seventeen syllables to have us notice the new life which hastens to push the weak pieces of remaining ice off. Nice.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Thanksf for reading zanya
Comment from JDRBAR
as winter snow melts
tiny green shoots appear
seasonal rhythm
The second line only has six syllables. Shouldn't it be seven? Otherwise, I think this is very nice.
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as winter snow melts
tiny green shoots appear
seasonal rhythm
The second line only has six syllables. Shouldn't it be seven? Otherwise, I think this is very nice.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
Comment from tony bronk
I like how you ended with your third line very much. I believe in the third line in these haikus and you did very well by bringing ing it in from outside the playhouse leaving it still having meaning. A very beautiful poem, too! Outstanding! Tony
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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I like how you ended with your third line very much. I believe in the third line in these haikus and you did very well by bringing ing it in from outside the playhouse leaving it still having meaning. A very beautiful poem, too! Outstanding! Tony
Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Wow --what a superb review and 6 twinkling stars --thanks for the vote of confidence zanya
Comment from RGstar
Lovely. Beautifully said, Zanya. The imagery is a s clear as your words depict. Pristine and clear. A lovely thing for a Sunday morning.
Have a nice day.
RGstar
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Lovely. Beautifully said, Zanya. The imagery is a s clear as your words depict. Pristine and clear. A lovely thing for a Sunday morning.
Have a nice day.
RGstar
Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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An enlightening review --thanks for reading zanya
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good Haiku Poetry writing prompt entry.
Well done, well said. Your verse of spring is clear.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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I think this is a good Haiku Poetry writing prompt entry.
Well done, well said. Your verse of spring is clear.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 10-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2018
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Thanks for reading zanya
