Tough Love
Both emotional and physical scars.3 total reviews
Comment from Fridayauthor
This is an interesting story about a hostile teenager and an attempt at tough love.
While I enjoyed the tale, it was difficult to know the boy whose attitude was so belligerent. It spoke of years of trouble, and not an impromptu act.
...found out from God knows where,
should be...
found out God knows where,
or,
found out from God knows who,
There are paragraph breaks needed after...
unfortunately right.
and...
my husband's arms.
...and
a breaking voice.
Thank you.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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This is an interesting story about a hostile teenager and an attempt at tough love.
While I enjoyed the tale, it was difficult to know the boy whose attitude was so belligerent. It spoke of years of trouble, and not an impromptu act.
...found out from God knows where,
should be...
found out God knows where,
or,
found out from God knows who,
There are paragraph breaks needed after...
unfortunately right.
and...
my husband's arms.
...and
a breaking voice.
Thank you.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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Thank you for taking the time to read and then to review. I really appreciate you comments and suggestions. I will make those corrections shortly. Again thanks.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Stories About Scars writing prompt.
Your story is well told and interesting. It is hard to be tough with our kids, but it's a must if we want to teach them about life.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the Stories About Scars writing prompt.
Your story is well told and interesting. It is hard to be tough with our kids, but it's a must if we want to teach them about life.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 06-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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Thank you for reviewing and for your kind comments and of course your good luck wishes.
Comment from Susan Burger
I agree, I don't think this needed tagging for the few cuss words. Your story is one I think many parents face with at least one of their teenagers. I agree with your method and know how difficult it is to stand by such a hard decision.
Your son may carry a visible scar, and you an emotional one; however I think in the end it was worth it. I am sure you all learned from this situation.
You wrote a good story here for the Scars Contest. The only thing I see is a couple of words that are misspelled. The first is sargent - should be sergeant. And the last is hostel instead of hostile. Other than that this is a good story and I wish you well in the competition!
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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I agree, I don't think this needed tagging for the few cuss words. Your story is one I think many parents face with at least one of their teenagers. I agree with your method and know how difficult it is to stand by such a hard decision.
Your son may carry a visible scar, and you an emotional one; however I think in the end it was worth it. I am sure you all learned from this situation.
You wrote a good story here for the Scars Contest. The only thing I see is a couple of words that are misspelled. The first is sargent - should be sergeant. And the last is hostel instead of hostile. Other than that this is a good story and I wish you well in the competition!
Comment Written 06-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I really appreciate your comments. I will make those corrections in just a few minutes, thanks for noticing them. And thank you for the good luck wishes.
