Both her and I
Past and present reflections5 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This mirror poem, Both Her and I, is a fun poem to read as it follows the rhyme through the rationalization that the mirror reflects the present, but also reminds us that we were great, are great, and will be great to the end. Nice.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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This mirror poem, Both Her and I, is a fun poem to read as it follows the rhyme through the rationalization that the mirror reflects the present, but also reminds us that we were great, are great, and will be great to the end. Nice.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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Thank you for such a nice review and taking time to read.
Comment from BeasPeas
When we're young we don't care what the mirror reflects as youth doesn't think about growing up or growing old. It only comes later in life when we start to notice the changes and wonder where time has gone. Your poem is composed well. It's thoughtful and interesting. Marilyn
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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When we're young we don't care what the mirror reflects as youth doesn't think about growing up or growing old. It only comes later in life when we start to notice the changes and wonder where time has gone. Your poem is composed well. It's thoughtful and interesting. Marilyn
Comment Written 06-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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Thank you for such a great review, I really appreciate it.
Comment from Katie Solis
What a beautiful poem, and beautiful sentiment. If everyone could say this when looking in the mirror the world will be such a better place. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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What a beautiful poem, and beautiful sentiment. If everyone could say this when looking in the mirror the world will be such a better place. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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Thank you so much for your kind words, I appreciate you taking time to read and review.
Comment from Wabigoon
I like this rumination before an imaginary mirror. At least you don't see a Picasso reflection there as in his paintings! I have one thing I noted that throws things off a bit for me:
with a heart just like (me.) I certainly expected "mine" here but I can see, because you use "mine" in the next stanza with a rhyme why you didn't want to use it twice. Still, it's not "right."
That aside, a good effort.
Thanks
Wabigoon/Jeff
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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I like this rumination before an imaginary mirror. At least you don't see a Picasso reflection there as in his paintings! I have one thing I noted that throws things off a bit for me:
with a heart just like (me.) I certainly expected "mine" here but I can see, because you use "mine" in the next stanza with a rhyme why you didn't want to use it twice. Still, it's not "right."
That aside, a good effort.
Thanks
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Thank you for your great suggestions, if you go back and read it you will see I took your advice.Thanks so much for taking time to read and review my poem, I really appreciate it.
Comment from jlsavell
author, your mirror poem is beautiful. Yes, we all often look in the mirror and often fret over the march of time, The ending of your work speaks volumes.. well done..
jlsavell
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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author, your mirror poem is beautiful. Yes, we all often look in the mirror and often fret over the march of time, The ending of your work speaks volumes.. well done..
jlsavell
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Thank you so much for such a great review, I really appreciate it.
