Honeymoon widow
a contest entry14 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This senryu about the theme recently married, Honeymoon Widow, uses seventeen syllables and jams internal rhyme and double entendre into a tight space.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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This senryu about the theme recently married, Honeymoon Widow, uses seventeen syllables and jams internal rhyme and double entendre into a tight space.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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I am giggling my friend, love the subtle humor in your review; thank you.
Comment from sunnilicious
Oh my goodness, viagra is more widespread that I knew about. Well, this is definitely a sad but funny look at the topic. Creative. Good visual imagery. Nice work. Great picture.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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Oh my goodness, viagra is more widespread that I knew about. Well, this is definitely a sad but funny look at the topic. Creative. Good visual imagery. Nice work. Great picture.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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Hello sunniilicious, my friend I am glad you like the write; thank you very much.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hahahaha!
Loved the word play in your senryu and that picture is priceless, heh-heh.
I hope there are more people like me who have a sense of humor and you don't take too much flak for it.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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Hahahaha!
Loved the word play in your senryu and that picture is priceless, heh-heh.
I hope there are more people like me who have a sense of humor and you don't take too much flak for it.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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So far so good my friend, no flak yet and I hope not; I sincerely appreciate your visit and thank you very much for your time and the encouraging review.
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I hope my vote and the accompanying comment on cojones helps as well.
You're very welcome.
~Dean :)
Comment from Katie Solis
Nice job. I enjoyed your double entendres in the last line. Good work on fitting a story into a five-seven-five senryu. Poor wife. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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Nice job. I enjoyed your double entendres in the last line. Good work on fitting a story into a five-seven-five senryu. Poor wife. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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Hi Katie, I am glad you stopped by and like the write; appreciate your time and the wonderful review; thank you very much.
Comment from William Ross
hahaha wife took it quite hard good one. Great job and great humor on this. I think to many guys use this that don't really need it. good luck on this and have a great day
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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hahaha wife took it quite hard good one. Great job and great humor on this. I think to many guys use this that don't really need it. good luck on this and have a great day
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Hello William, I appreciate your time and am pleased that you like the write; thank you very much.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I see you added a warning since I read this last night 3-4. Your words follow the format of the senyru well. The picture is a good match for your words.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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I see you added a warning since I read this last night 3-4. Your words follow the format of the senyru well. The picture is a good match for your words.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Hello Jan, I appreciate your time and am pleased that you like the write; thank you very much.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks a recently married wife became a widow at honeymoon where husband died at Viagra overdosed; well worded, well done. Thank you for sharing this with us. Good luck with the contest. KEEP WRITING, INSPIRE CHANGING. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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This speaks a recently married wife became a widow at honeymoon where husband died at Viagra overdosed; well worded, well done. Thank you for sharing this with us. Good luck with the contest. KEEP WRITING, INSPIRE CHANGING. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Hello friend, I thank you for your time and the wonderful review.
Comment from robina1978
A lovely picture that complements your tiny poem very well, even more than that. Dot on syllable count. It made me laugh out loud. How you come up with this: a Viagra overdose. Best wishes for the prompt. One tip: the title should be Senryu (just wed, already).
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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A lovely picture that complements your tiny poem very well, even more than that. Dot on syllable count. It made me laugh out loud. How you come up with this: a Viagra overdose. Best wishes for the prompt. One tip: the title should be Senryu (just wed, already).
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Hi Robina, I am glad that you like the write, thank you very much.
Comment from dragonpoet
It is sarcastic in that a newly married man shouldn't need viagra at all. I like the use of hard as a pun for her sadness and for what the penis should have been on the honeymoon without viagra. Unless this was a second marriage of middle aged people.
Hope this senryu did well
Keep writing
dragonoet
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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It is sarcastic in that a newly married man shouldn't need viagra at all. I like the use of hard as a pun for her sadness and for what the penis should have been on the honeymoon without viagra. Unless this was a second marriage of middle aged people.
Hope this senryu did well
Keep writing
dragonoet
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Hello dragonpoet, I appreciate your time and the thoughtful review, thank you very much.
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You are so very welcome.
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Comment from jenintorre
Absolutely love it. Hilarious and what a fabulous picture. Very, very funny. You will surely do well in the competition. This is my kind of entry. Good luck. Best wishes .Jen.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Absolutely love it. Hilarious and what a fabulous picture. Very, very funny. You will surely do well in the competition. This is my kind of entry. Good luck. Best wishes .Jen.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Hello again, my friend, I am pleased that you stopped by and thank you very much for your generous review.
