A Potpourri of Poetic Curiosities
Viewing comments for Chapter 64 "The Cave"A collection of poems showcasing unusual words
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Comment from tony bronk
:The cave you crave." An somehow, for some reason to me, an alluring poem of nestling comfort away from the storm into a place of dark cold refuge but safe, into warm, safe arms, that matter just to the protagonist!Excellent adventure in a poem. Tony
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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:The cave you crave." An somehow, for some reason to me, an alluring poem of nestling comfort away from the storm into a place of dark cold refuge but safe, into warm, safe arms, that matter just to the protagonist!Excellent adventure in a poem. Tony
Comment Written 07-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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Thank you very much, Tony. I appreciate the kind review - Craig
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a stunning poem, certainly deserving "Six Stars," but I have none till next week - suffice it to say, I found this work exceptional in both rhyme and smooth rhythm and thoroughly enjoyed my read. I also found your notes both interesting and informative. Thank you...
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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In my opinion, a stunning poem, certainly deserving "Six Stars," but I have none till next week - suffice it to say, I found this work exceptional in both rhyme and smooth rhythm and thoroughly enjoyed my read. I also found your notes both interesting and informative. Thank you...
Comment Written 07-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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Thanks very much for the lovely review, and the virtual six award, Eve. I'm glad you enjoyed it, Craig
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You are very welcome indeed, Craig, my pleasure I assure you...Eve
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I like this. I like the way that it flows from beginning to end and the rhyming aspect of it. The artwork is spot on and compliments your poem well. Thanks for sharing your well written poem.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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I like this. I like the way that it flows from beginning to end and the rhyming aspect of it. The artwork is spot on and compliments your poem well. Thanks for sharing your well written poem.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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Thank you, Jeffrey, for the very kind words. They're much appreciated. Craig
Comment from jdrhye
It's quite a lovely poem. I love the word prompt....how clever and creative! The imagery is beautifully articulated. The poem is well written and executed. It's descriptive and displays a voice on its own. Thank you for sharing.
J
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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It's quite a lovely poem. I love the word prompt....how clever and creative! The imagery is beautifully articulated. The poem is well written and executed. It's descriptive and displays a voice on its own. Thank you for sharing.
J
Comment Written 07-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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Thank you very much for the lovely comments, you are very kind. Craig
Comment from RGstar
Nicely done CD. In the line and language of sonnet, you deliver nicely, with your underline meaning catered for by strong metaphor that is beautiful expressed.
Really liked the end couplet that beings it back to love.
Well done, and good luck.
My best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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Nicely done CD. In the line and language of sonnet, you deliver nicely, with your underline meaning catered for by strong metaphor that is beautiful expressed.
Really liked the end couplet that beings it back to love.
Well done, and good luck.
My best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 07-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the very kind words, RG. They're much appreciated. Craig
Comment from Pamusart
Nice ending. Well written. You had me thinking that the protagonist was really out there in rough seas. But is is a metaphor for drifting through life alone in a dangerous society. Thank you for sharing this
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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Nice ending. Well written. You had me thinking that the protagonist was really out there in rough seas. But is is a metaphor for drifting through life alone in a dangerous society. Thank you for sharing this
Comment Written 07-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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Thanks very much for the kind comments. Yep, all a metaphor until the last couplet. Much appreciation - Craig
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
As rudderless, I head toward the cliffs,
surrounded by sharp rocks on ev'ry side;
my heart's staccato beats play tuneless riffs--
from nature's wrath there is nowhere to hide.
I am obsessed with water and especially the ocean. I feel it cleanses me deeply. I loved this poem and it is a great write plus your notes were interesting kindest regards and well done Meia x
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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As rudderless, I head toward the cliffs,
surrounded by sharp rocks on ev'ry side;
my heart's staccato beats play tuneless riffs--
from nature's wrath there is nowhere to hide.
I am obsessed with water and especially the ocean. I feel it cleanses me deeply. I loved this poem and it is a great write plus your notes were interesting kindest regards and well done Meia x
Comment Written 06-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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Thanks very much for the kind comments, Meia. I love the ocean too, though not so much the beach. Sand is pretty, and that's about where its appeal ends. Most grateful - Craig
Comment from --Turtle.
When tempests rage, my vessel's tossed on seas
(I really like the tempest/tossed... vessels/seas, sounds in the start of this set of the poem. Starts strong and gives a tone of powerful nature images along with emotional tension)
From nature's wrath there is nowhere to hide.
(This set continues the analogy of nature and sea, and on the sidelines I take it as a placeholder for life, the uncertainty and frustration and overwhelming aspects that come with human emotions)
into the peaceful refuge that I crave.
(a shelter from this in a physical sense, can visualize the difference of the chaos on the outside of a cave versus the storms or wide openness outside to the elements)
the comfort and the warmth your arms provide.
(I like this because it moves the description of a zawn from just a physical hole in a cave into much more, ending a poetic journey with a sense of a sigh... a hug.)
Nice job with this.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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When tempests rage, my vessel's tossed on seas
(I really like the tempest/tossed... vessels/seas, sounds in the start of this set of the poem. Starts strong and gives a tone of powerful nature images along with emotional tension)
From nature's wrath there is nowhere to hide.
(This set continues the analogy of nature and sea, and on the sidelines I take it as a placeholder for life, the uncertainty and frustration and overwhelming aspects that come with human emotions)
into the peaceful refuge that I crave.
(a shelter from this in a physical sense, can visualize the difference of the chaos on the outside of a cave versus the storms or wide openness outside to the elements)
the comfort and the warmth your arms provide.
(I like this because it moves the description of a zawn from just a physical hole in a cave into much more, ending a poetic journey with a sense of a sigh... a hug.)
Nice job with this.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Thanks so much for yet another great review, Turtle. Yes, everything up until the closing couplet is a metaphor for those nasty things life throws our way from time to time. I really appreciate the time you take to get into each piece, and decipher what's really being said. And of course, the lovely comments and great catches you seldom miss. Most grateful, Craig
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Good sonnet. The word you used sent me on a dictionary tour. Sure enough, every one of them I checked online had the word, with its meaning. Here is my concern. Not with ZAWN, but with the latest Scrabble Dictionary published by Merriam Webster.
You guessed it. ZAWN is not in the new edition. It's not a new word, though, so it should have been in the 4th edition, and here it's still missing in the 5th. Why, I want to know. They've added some really stupid slang that is too new to be included. They've added some 6000 words, but not a tried-and-true, been-around-a-while, actual word found in many standard dictionaries. We Scrabble players need more words with Z. Why ignore this one?
Does your book give a clue? Is it usually capitalized? Do some minority groups find the word offensive.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Good sonnet. The word you used sent me on a dictionary tour. Sure enough, every one of them I checked online had the word, with its meaning. Here is my concern. Not with ZAWN, but with the latest Scrabble Dictionary published by Merriam Webster.
You guessed it. ZAWN is not in the new edition. It's not a new word, though, so it should have been in the 4th edition, and here it's still missing in the 5th. Why, I want to know. They've added some really stupid slang that is too new to be included. They've added some 6000 words, but not a tried-and-true, been-around-a-while, actual word found in many standard dictionaries. We Scrabble players need more words with Z. Why ignore this one?
Does your book give a clue? Is it usually capitalized? Do some minority groups find the word offensive.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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No clues I'm afraid. Other than that it is a word from the Cornish language, which the English tried to kill off in the 18th century. But they didn't totally succeed, and there are several hundred speakers of it today. I don't think that helps much.
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
A very nice sonnet introducing the word "zawn". A person would be very happy to find a "zawn" when trapped in a storm at sea.
"threaten to reduce my transport into driftwood skis" ... love this line, Craig. What a great image this creates to convey the magnitude of the storm. Love your reference to "Neptune" as well. Well done! ~~ Connie
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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A very nice sonnet introducing the word "zawn". A person would be very happy to find a "zawn" when trapped in a storm at sea.
"threaten to reduce my transport into driftwood skis" ... love this line, Craig. What a great image this creates to convey the magnitude of the storm. Love your reference to "Neptune" as well. Well done! ~~ Connie
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Thanks very much for the lovely comments, Connie. It's a strange sounding word to me, but it comes from the (almost) dead Cornish language, apparently. Much appreciated - Craig
