Summer Daydream
Ekphrastic poem based on a painting.31 total reviews
Comment from A. Willow Bends
Great job! I like the flow, the creativity, the imagination, the pic chosen. You did a very nice job with this. The length is good. It didn't go on too long, but long enough to pull in the reader and keep them there. Great Job!
Wendy
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Great job! I like the flow, the creativity, the imagination, the pic chosen. You did a very nice job with this. The length is good. It didn't go on too long, but long enough to pull in the reader and keep them there. Great Job!
Wendy
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Thank you Wendy for catching so well the spirit of this writing..
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
This is a great entry for the free verse contest, mystery writer. Is she alien, is she a mermaid or some other creature that has morphed into a human? These are the questions that you place into your reader's mind.
"Or maybe I am just a flimsy defiance of
of your well taught methodical mind:
seed-birth-growth-end" ... (my favorite stanza).
"earthly beiing" ... being
I love your fantasy write. It never ceases to amaze me how artwork can immediately inspire a great write, as is the case here.
Good luck in the contest with this very well written, imaginative poem. I so enjoyed it. ~~ Connie
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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This is a great entry for the free verse contest, mystery writer. Is she alien, is she a mermaid or some other creature that has morphed into a human? These are the questions that you place into your reader's mind.
"Or maybe I am just a flimsy defiance of
of your well taught methodical mind:
seed-birth-growth-end" ... (my favorite stanza).
"earthly beiing" ... being
I love your fantasy write. It never ceases to amaze me how artwork can immediately inspire a great write, as is the case here.
Good luck in the contest with this very well written, imaginative poem. I so enjoyed it. ~~ Connie
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Thank you for this very inspirational review...it incites me to put attention to that spark of imagination that visits me once in a while. Thanks!
Comment from linsbm
So nicely presented in your vivid illusion, how well verbal was the language in your fantasy. It can be real, and true in fact. I find this poem an interesting read and falls in the category of fantasy poem. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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So nicely presented in your vivid illusion, how well verbal was the language in your fantasy. It can be real, and true in fact. I find this poem an interesting read and falls in the category of fantasy poem. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Thank you for reading my work and your kind words.
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You're welcome
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is a good entry for the Free Verse writing contest.
Your verse has a clear story describing the picture very well.
Well done, and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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This is a good entry for the Free Verse writing contest.
Your verse has a clear story describing the picture very well.
Well done, and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Thank you, Sharon..
Comment from apky
Flimsy mind indeed.
You did a marvellous job of this poem - Whitman or not. I thoroughly enjoyed the read, the clever nuances, that play with conformity as well as the conjurations of the mind, where it's a thin line between conformity and conjurations.
Excellent!
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Flimsy mind indeed.
You did a marvellous job of this poem - Whitman or not. I thoroughly enjoyed the read, the clever nuances, that play with conformity as well as the conjurations of the mind, where it's a thin line between conformity and conjurations.
Excellent!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Thank you, apky. I wish, I wish I could fly, sometimes. :-)
Comment from tfawcus
Much that is beautiful and deeply significant to us is only half-seen, ephemeral and barely understood. That delicious borderline between fantasy and reality that is, as you so aptly say "just a flimsy defiance" of logic and scientific analysis.
"But the more you analyze it, mortal,
The less enthralled you will be"
Some things are just to be enjoyed; the shapes in clouds, half seen shadows on a summer's day, sunlight on water.
Poetry does not explain these things, but it does sometimes open our eyes to them, as you do here.
Very much enjoyed!
Earthly beiing (being)
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Much that is beautiful and deeply significant to us is only half-seen, ephemeral and barely understood. That delicious borderline between fantasy and reality that is, as you so aptly say "just a flimsy defiance" of logic and scientific analysis.
"But the more you analyze it, mortal,
The less enthralled you will be"
Some things are just to be enjoyed; the shapes in clouds, half seen shadows on a summer's day, sunlight on water.
Poetry does not explain these things, but it does sometimes open our eyes to them, as you do here.
Very much enjoyed!
Earthly beiing (being)
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Thank you tfawcus for your marvelous thoughts about this work. Blessings.
Comment from jenintorre
I enjoyed reading your fantasy free verse poem. I think she is a mermaid, well I hope so.
A nicely written poem. I wish you luck in the competition cheers Jen.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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I enjoyed reading your fantasy free verse poem. I think she is a mermaid, well I hope so.
A nicely written poem. I wish you luck in the competition cheers Jen.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Thank you for your great comments and your best wishes.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hello. "Earthly be[i]ing" no two i's
This is a grand piece for this contest. It has a great imagination at play and everyone likes the idea of a mermaid come to shore with two legs. Good luck in the contest. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Hello. "Earthly be[i]ing" no two i's
This is a grand piece for this contest. It has a great imagination at play and everyone likes the idea of a mermaid come to shore with two legs. Good luck in the contest. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Thank you for your great comments and for allerting me to the typo.Corrected
Comment from Pamusart
My interpretation was f this is twofold. One is that this human is struggling with his religious or spiritual beliefs. The other is that humans must seize the moment when it is offered. So when divine beings beckon, you must go. But, first, you have to see or feel or whatever you must do to know it is there. If you miss it, it may never return. So, LOOK. nice poem. Thank you for sharing and best of luck with this poem
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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My interpretation was f this is twofold. One is that this human is struggling with his religious or spiritual beliefs. The other is that humans must seize the moment when it is offered. So when divine beings beckon, you must go. But, first, you have to see or feel or whatever you must do to know it is there. If you miss it, it may never return. So, LOOK. nice poem. Thank you for sharing and best of luck with this poem
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Such a world of possibilities lies in one's mind. I was in New York with my husband at the Museum a couple of years ago. I saw this picture andd i was enthralled by it. it was the adolesent me, lost, alone, trying to find who I was? Anx now, many years later, it still, ask me...Thank you so much for the marvelous comments.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written free verse ekphrastic poem about the girl in the portrait that seems half unreal. More like a mermaid or an alien from another planet standing on the water's edge seemingly not knowing what to do next.
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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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A very well-written free verse ekphrastic poem about the girl in the portrait that seems half unreal. More like a mermaid or an alien from another planet standing on the water's edge seemingly not knowing what to do next.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Thank you Sandra for reading and commenting in this work.
