Comment from MelB

Excellent

Hi Jenintorre, congratulations on the win! This is a well written free verse with great description and imagery. I could see it all in my mind as you described it.

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2018

I am so pleased you liked it. Thanks for your comments

Comment from Cedar

Excellent

This is simply a beautiful piece of work. It makes me long for summertime even more. I love the picture that you selected.

I can see why it won the contest. Congratulations...Bill

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018

Thanks Bill I am so pleased you like it as I am a big fan of your work.xxx

reply by Cedar on 03-Mar-2018

Thank you very much, my friend. I really appreciate your gracious comments. I also enjoy reading your work. This poem certainly deserved to win the contest. Have a wonderful evening...Bill

Comment from donette1914

Excellent

very nice and the words were outstanding of a time that pasted. if walls could only talked. i love the art work and this is a wonderful poem well done it was a pleasure to read your work

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018

Thank you so much

Comment from cailinraine8

Excellent

I really enjoyed this,... can relate to the old-fashioned country life and almost feel the rocking of the chair on the verandah. You paint a picture even without the perfect one presented here. Fine work.

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018

Thanks. I couldn't find the perfect picture. I got the verandah but couldn't find Ned.

Comment from apky

Excellent

Great free verse here, with Ned a kind of watcher from his tower,
remembering his own days.

Although I'm a prose person and pretty poor in writing poetry,
I love reading poems like this, poems that have some meaning
for me and give me something to take away with me. So it's not
a wonder that I would read an excellent poem like yours.

Thanks you for sharing.

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018

Thank you for your great review.

Comment from Ogden

Excellent

I read this as a recurrent recollection, rich with imagery, by an old man, from the vantage point of his every-day perch, savoring a time and place in his life, forever etched in his memory.

It's a game old folks play.

Don (aka Ogden)

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018

Thanks for reading Don.

reply by Ogden on 03-Mar-2018

You're very welcome. Nice work!

Comment from kiwigirl2821

Excellent

This reminds me of the deep south and home. I used to watch my mother and father rock out on the veranda with a slow gentle move and all us kids were so busy being kids and having fun. Awesome write. Good luck. xoxo Kiwi

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018

I envisioned it in the deep south. So pleased that you enjoyed it. Thanks

Comment from Mrs. KT

Excellent

Hello!
I smiled throughout my reading of your well-crafted free verse. Ned remind me of my grandfather, Archie, who did not sit on a veranda, but on a chair underneath the trees on his farm, watch the road and highway that both ran in front of his farm. He would sit there for hours lamenting progress.
The rocking motion of Ned in his chair is echoed throughout your poem, and draws the reader in as well as Ned reminisces about his youth while swatting flies. I truly enjoyed spending time with Ned... Thank you!

diane

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018

I am so pleased that you enjoyed it. Thanks.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written free vrrse poem about life and a hot summer afternoon watching the teenage boys in their faded Levis and the girls on the sun baked ground.

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018

Thanks for your comments

Comment from A. Willow Bends

Exceptional

Very earthy. Human. Very sexy and you nailed it on this one. I love what can be done with free verse and the layout with the photo. Super! Enjoyable and I do not often give six stars. Great job!
Wendy

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018

Thank you Wendy. I'm glad you thought the picture was O.K. I tried tp find one of an old guy in a rocking chair but to no avail. X