Once Upon a Perfect Summer's Day
Death in Nature: We never saw it coming until...18 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5 about death, Once Upon a Perfect Summer's Day, has the correct syllable count and reminds us all how the weather can change on a dime and become cold and partly deadly.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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This 5-7-5 about death, Once Upon a Perfect Summer's Day, has the correct syllable count and reminds us all how the weather can change on a dime and become cold and partly deadly.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Hello Bill,
Such a massive storm...still recovering...
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Fabiha_N
This is a well-written haiku, which tells a very tragic event.
The way you worded and described it was really well done. It does make me really sad when I read your author notes at the end.
Nature is beautiful in so many ways, but at times, it can be destructive too.
Great work :)
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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This is a well-written haiku, which tells a very tragic event.
The way you worded and described it was really well done. It does make me really sad when I read your author notes at the end.
Nature is beautiful in so many ways, but at times, it can be destructive too.
Great work :)
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Hello Fabiha N!
So pleased you enjoyed my offering.
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Gloria ....
What a tragedy that turned out to be Diane. And a storm and a half. Excellent entry into the contest and many, many thanks for the information in your author notes too.
Great job!
Gloria
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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What a tragedy that turned out to be Diane. And a storm and a half. Excellent entry into the contest and many, many thanks for the information in your author notes too.
Great job!
Gloria
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Oh, Gloria!
I "missed the boat" on this one! Must not have conveyed the utter devastation as well as I thought I did. And I felt really uncomfortable adding my "Author's Notes" for fear that I was telling too much. At any rate, it was truly the most horrific natural disaster my husband and I have ever experienced. Within the span of twenty minutes, over 40 mature oaks and maples lay broken, battered, dead on our property. And more than a few landed on our roof and deck. Yes we have cleaned up the mess, but the trees will never be restored to their glory in our lifetime.
On a positive note, we have an enhanced view of Grand Traverse East and West Bays, and the forest is regenerating ...with our help. I need to write about a Japanese dogwood that refused to die...It stood about 30ft tall, and it snapped in half. We were told to dig it up, as it would never bloom again...Therein lies the story...and my renewed faith in Mother Nature...
As far as the contest = yikes! I faired terribly! So it goes!
Have a wonderful weekend! And thank you for your thoughtful review!
diane
Comment from cailinraine8
The utter destruction of any nature force is overwhelming and you have presented this horror well with a few lines... the after effects are devastating and we feel for all life and the spirits of the forest... well written and nice presentation.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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The utter destruction of any nature force is overwhelming and you have presented this horror well with a few lines... the after effects are devastating and we feel for all life and the spirits of the forest... well written and nice presentation.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Hello cailinraine8,
I doubt that I will ever forget this storm...
Thank you for your thoughtful review!
diane
Comment from donette1914
wow this is outstanding and so terrible of what happened in Michigan, storms can come to fast and move anything in there way. i love the art work and this is a wonderful poem well done it was a pleasure
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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wow this is outstanding and so terrible of what happened in Michigan, storms can come to fast and move anything in there way. i love the art work and this is a wonderful poem well done it was a pleasure
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Hello donette,
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from CD Richards
Excellent 5-7-5 about the murderous power of storms. I recall one particular storm a couple of decades ago here, which sounds about on a similar level, in terms of ferocity and destruction. It is a humbling thing to see massive oaks and other large trees uprooted, twisted and snapped like toothpicks - not to mention damage to human property.
Very well written, best of luck with it. Craig
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Excellent 5-7-5 about the murderous power of storms. I recall one particular storm a couple of decades ago here, which sounds about on a similar level, in terms of ferocity and destruction. It is a humbling thing to see massive oaks and other large trees uprooted, twisted and snapped like toothpicks - not to mention damage to human property.
Very well written, best of luck with it. Craig
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Hello CD Richards!
Man! I missed the boat on this one! I must not have conveyed to folks the utter devastation that this "straight line event" had on its victims. In a matter of half an hour, what nature had grown for over a hundred years was wiped out - never to be replaced in our lifetimes. We are still recovering, and yes, we are deeply humbled...
Thank you for understanding and for your thoughtful review.
diane
Comment from samantha0930
It feels astonishing that everything could be so easily destroyed. Granted, it must have been a powerful storm, but still, that just the wind and some rain and ice could create so much damage is awesome (I know this usually has a good connotation, but it's hard to think of another word). And not just because it destroyed the trees and some buildings, but also because of the immense impact that has on everything else--the life that was there that no longer can be supported.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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It feels astonishing that everything could be so easily destroyed. Granted, it must have been a powerful storm, but still, that just the wind and some rain and ice could create so much damage is awesome (I know this usually has a good connotation, but it's hard to think of another word). And not just because it destroyed the trees and some buildings, but also because of the immense impact that has on everything else--the life that was there that no longer can be supported.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Hello smanatha0930,
I know what you mean. I lived through it, and one moment we were about to have dinner, and the next 80ft maple limbs and branches came thundering down upon our roof, house, and deck - covering everything. They came within inches of breaking our windows. And the really crazy part? We just stood and watched; frozen - too stunned to move. Afterwards, the silence was just eerie. We have stumps on our property that we still have yet to be able to remove...Crazy
Thank you for your thoughtful review!
Comment from Marge Setzer
Succinct look at a devastating stroke by Nature that wiped out everything in her path. Sad that it happened so quickly without a moment's notice. A fitting metaphor for life. We prepare, but sometimes other forces surprise us and we have no control in terms of the consequences. Your last line in which you personify the forests is especially apt and poetic. It's been two years since Mother Nature demonstrated her power to you. I hope that the forest is recovering from the blow. Thanks for sharing this story. Marge
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Succinct look at a devastating stroke by Nature that wiped out everything in her path. Sad that it happened so quickly without a moment's notice. A fitting metaphor for life. We prepare, but sometimes other forces surprise us and we have no control in terms of the consequences. Your last line in which you personify the forests is especially apt and poetic. It's been two years since Mother Nature demonstrated her power to you. I hope that the forest is recovering from the blow. Thanks for sharing this story. Marge
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Hello Marge!
I am so pleased that you enjoyed my 5/7/5 offering. Slowly, the forest is recovering, and so are we...
Thank you for your thoughtful and kind review!
Comment from Debbie Pope
Well it is hard not to think of tornadoes in this category. With tornadoes, nature itself causes so much death of nature. It is definitely one of the aspects of nature that I do not revere--respect but definitely not revere. You picked an even more perfect topic for this contest. Straight line winds are more common than tornadoes and cause the same damage. People think, there's no tornado warning. I'm safe. Not so. Good job.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Well it is hard not to think of tornadoes in this category. With tornadoes, nature itself causes so much death of nature. It is definitely one of the aspects of nature that I do not revere--respect but definitely not revere. You picked an even more perfect topic for this contest. Straight line winds are more common than tornadoes and cause the same damage. People think, there's no tornado warning. I'm safe. Not so. Good job.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Hello Debbie!
I had not even heard of "straight line winds" until this disaster took place. It truly was a beautiful day, and then...Mother Nature let loose!
Thank you for your thoughtful and excellent review!
Comment from Beck Fenton
What devastation you describe in your haiku! Nature has no reasoning, no way to understand why wanton destruction occurs. Time will replace the trees, but yes, there will always be the memory of what was. Good work with the prompt and good luck!
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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What devastation you describe in your haiku! Nature has no reasoning, no way to understand why wanton destruction occurs. Time will replace the trees, but yes, there will always be the memory of what was. Good work with the prompt and good luck!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2018
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Hello Beck!
Thank you for your thoughtful review. I appreciate it!
